The Box
Mysterious Package Contest Entry11 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You really had the reader going. Such suspense. Such horror. We may have thought you might have figured something. Then you pull a tongue-in-cheek/ finger-in-nose funny ending. Well plotted.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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You really had the reader going. Such suspense. Such horror. We may have thought you might have figured something. Then you pull a tongue-in-cheek/ finger-in-nose funny ending. Well plotted.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Liz. Yeah, I went a long way around just to tell a silly joke. That was my whole idea...to build up the suspense for absolutely nothing. lol I'm glad you liked this ridiculous piece. Thank again.
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Ron
Comment from robyn corum
DS,
UGH!!!!! That was a super surprise ending -- and rather more than a weeeee bit DISGUSTING!
But I can see a hundred people lining up to get their own lone nose-picking finger if they can find the place to start. hahaha
Thanks for the smile and good luck!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
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DS,
UGH!!!!! That was a super surprise ending -- and rather more than a weeeee bit DISGUSTING!
But I can see a hundred people lining up to get their own lone nose-picking finger if they can find the place to start. hahaha
Thanks for the smile and good luck!
Comment Written 09-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
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HAHAHA! Thank you so much for the fantastic review, Robyn. I was just in one of those twisted moods again. lol I'm glad you liked this ridiculous piece. I hope you have yourself a great weekend and thank you again.
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Ron
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Eeeeee-yeeeeeww!! I should have seen an 'usual' ending coming on that one, Ron -- great catch and angle, sir!! ;) Thanx for the big grin and best of luck to you at the polls! :) Yvette
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Eeeeee-yeeeeeww!! I should have seen an 'usual' ending coming on that one, Ron -- great catch and angle, sir!! ;) Thanx for the big grin and best of luck to you at the polls! :) Yvette
Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Lol. Yeah, I couldn't really figure out where to go with this without making it ridiculously long, so I just went my usual route. When in doubt, make it twisted. Haha. Thank you for the excellent review, Yvette. I'm glad you got a smile out of this silliness. Have yourself a great day.
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Ron
Comment from mrsmajor
Hi,
Well, I didn't expect that you would receive such a gift, but as I read on and on, I didn't know whether to laugh or to cry, but I decided that such a thing wouldn't happen, and you were just writing a really mysterious piece. To receive someone's finger, and never finding out whose it was, was indeed a mystery...I read this so easily, anyone can tell you are a true writer...I wish you well in the contest, this is surely a good entry.,,both the creativity, and the writing itself deserve 6 great big stars...Thanks for sharing...
Warmly,
Victoria
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Hi,
Well, I didn't expect that you would receive such a gift, but as I read on and on, I didn't know whether to laugh or to cry, but I decided that such a thing wouldn't happen, and you were just writing a really mysterious piece. To receive someone's finger, and never finding out whose it was, was indeed a mystery...I read this so easily, anyone can tell you are a true writer...I wish you well in the contest, this is surely a good entry.,,both the creativity, and the writing itself deserve 6 great big stars...Thanks for sharing...
Warmly,
Victoria
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Wow! Thank you so much for the fantastic review and giant sixer, Victoria. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind comments. I'm glad you like the piece. Thank you again.
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Ron
You're very welcome, Ron, it was my pleasure!
Comment from amada
Your story for sure it has a huge mystery. Too bad you never found it this mystery. Some woman was missing a finger, somewhere, somehow. It was nice to read.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Your story for sure it has a huge mystery. Too bad you never found it this mystery. Some woman was missing a finger, somewhere, somehow. It was nice to read.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Amada. I really appreciate the gracious. I'm glad you liked my little story. Hope you have a great day.
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Ron
Comment from CrystieCookie999
LOL LOL LOL! Dark humor at its best. This is the kind of writing I would share with young people to point out that horror doesn't have to be gory slashers, just the suggestion of something awful. Although, of course, I have great sympathy for someone who loses a finger to someone sinister. Thank you for a great post.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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LOL LOL LOL! Dark humor at its best. This is the kind of writing I would share with young people to point out that horror doesn't have to be gory slashers, just the suggestion of something awful. Although, of course, I have great sympathy for someone who loses a finger to someone sinister. Thank you for a great post.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Hey, Christie, hi. Thank you so for the awesome review and giant sixer. I'm glad you had a chuckle out of this silly piece. I was just in one of those moods. lol I dearly appreciate the gracious rating and your great comments. Have yourself a wonderful day and thank you again.
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Ron
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Dragon, you are a master of what I call the 'twist at the end.' ( is there a name writers use for that?)
Anyway a very scary feeling was replaced with a chuckle and a grin this morning when I started my reviews for the day. I Thank you for that. And I hope you win!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Dear Dragon, you are a master of what I call the 'twist at the end.' ( is there a name writers use for that?)
Anyway a very scary feeling was replaced with a chuckle and a grin this morning when I started my reviews for the day. I Thank you for that. And I hope you win!
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review, Suzanna. Yeah, if there is a name for it, I don't know what it is. lol I always like to come up with some ridiculous ending one way or the other. I'm glad you had a chuckle at this silly piece. I really appreciate the gracious stars and kind comments. I hope you have a great day and thank you again.
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Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This held me onto the edge of my seat for sixty seven years. I followed the author through a range of excellently portrayed emotions and feelings, on his search to try and work out who? where? why?
Then I reached the last day, in the last paragraph, and I was disappointed. The author had traded strong writing for a cheap trick, offering only a joke instead of power.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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This held me onto the edge of my seat for sixty seven years. I followed the author through a range of excellently portrayed emotions and feelings, on his search to try and work out who? where? why?
Then I reached the last day, in the last paragraph, and I was disappointed. The author had traded strong writing for a cheap trick, offering only a joke instead of power.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Yeah, it was all just for a silly joke. I knew it was going to disappoint some folks. That was some of the reason for how dumb it ended. I do that sometimes. Thanks for the review and stars, Katherine. I'm glad you liked it up to the ending at least.
Ron
Comment from TommyWrites
....this is terribly hilarious. I wasn't sure what I should except when I started reading it. To be honest, I did not expect that! This is such a unique way to use the contest, and very funny!
You story strung your reader along in a good way, and I throughly enjoyed this piece. I think you have a good chance with this piece, it's different, it's funny, it's good!
Good luck,
TommyWrites~
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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....this is terribly hilarious. I wasn't sure what I should except when I started reading it. To be honest, I did not expect that! This is such a unique way to use the contest, and very funny!
You story strung your reader along in a good way, and I throughly enjoyed this piece. I think you have a good chance with this piece, it's different, it's funny, it's good!
Good luck,
TommyWrites~
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the excellent review, Tommy. Yeah, I like messing with people's minds on here. I'm sure it'll have a few folks disappointed but that's just me. Lol. I'm glad you liked this silly piece, friend. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. Have a great rest of your weekend.
Ron
Comment from GE Parson
FUUUNNNNYYYYY!! What can I say? Let your fingers do the walking? You touch that again, I chop your finger off? Maybe it was a mafia finger and he meant it to go the MofiaBoss and got thje wrong address..MMM?
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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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FUUUNNNNYYYYY!! What can I say? Let your fingers do the walking? You touch that again, I chop your finger off? Maybe it was a mafia finger and he meant it to go the MofiaBoss and got thje wrong address..MMM?
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Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Lol. Thank you for the great review, GEP. I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. I'm glad you liked this ridiculous piece. Have yourself a great rest of your weekend.
Ron
