Goodbye Friend
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Comment from Robert Trudel
Touching. Heart breaking. I can feel that it comes from the bottom of your heart and how difficult the break is but that it must be so. I can also feel the hurt when you say you thought he was a better man. PS: we are told to add a point in how the poem could be improved. I can't do so. I think this poem is perfect as it is. Regards, Robert.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
Touching. Heart breaking. I can feel that it comes from the bottom of your heart and how difficult the break is but that it must be so. I can also feel the hurt when you say you thought he was a better man. PS: we are told to add a point in how the poem could be improved. I can't do so. I think this poem is perfect as it is. Regards, Robert.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Richard Montfort Cary
You touched my heart. I've known your pain. I liked the repeat of "I probably won't come again" and then the sad twist of "I know now I won't come again." All in all, however, the rhyming is a little forced. Keep writing! You have the instinct of moving the reader. Keep it up!
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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
You touched my heart. I've known your pain. I liked the repeat of "I probably won't come again" and then the sad twist of "I know now I won't come again." All in all, however, the rhyming is a little forced. Keep writing! You have the instinct of moving the reader. Keep it up!
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Comment Written 19-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I like the repetitative line. It is as if the speaker is resolving, trying to solidify their commitment to themself. This reminds me of a book by Robin Norwood called Women Who Love too Much. It's basic premise is that we keep hoping he'll change. We eventually realize that we need to focus on ourselves and let the person we were so committed to, is not really going to change. And we do not need to worry, they always find someone else to take care of them.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
I like the repetitative line. It is as if the speaker is resolving, trying to solidify their commitment to themself. This reminds me of a book by Robin Norwood called Women Who Love too Much. It's basic premise is that we keep hoping he'll change. We eventually realize that we need to focus on ourselves and let the person we were so committed to, is not really going to change. And we do not need to worry, they always find someone else to take care of them.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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Thank you for reading my poem and for the review. That book sounds interesting, I'll have to check it out. :)
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I read it and found myself skipping to the back of the book where she gives steps to stop managing and contolling him. I think that part is the best. The first part is stories of different women. This is a good link: https://thepowermoves.com/women-who-love-too-much/
Comment from Jody Miller
Wow - unfortunately many of us have been here - thank you for putting our feelings out there. It is hard to "give up". It takes much more strength to leave than to stay . . . .
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
Wow - unfortunately many of us have been here - thank you for putting our feelings out there. It is hard to "give up". It takes much more strength to leave than to stay . . . .
Comment Written 07-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for this excellent review. I've been through this experience as well...it hurts. I'm so glad you liked my poem, thanks for reading.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about relationships that sometimes seem not to work out for certain people no matter how hard they try to make it work, there comes a time that we make it to end.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
A very well-written poem about relationships that sometimes seem not to work out for certain people no matter how hard they try to make it work, there comes a time that we make it to end.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Suzanne Albers
This to me was the best poem in the contest. I chose it also because it wasn't too sad like some of the other ones were like death. I liked your theme
of friendship ending for whatever reason, and the way you changed your last line to I know that I won't come again
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
This to me was the best poem in the contest. I chose it also because it wasn't too sad like some of the other ones were like death. I liked your theme
of friendship ending for whatever reason, and the way you changed your last line to I know that I won't come again
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your vote. I really appreciate you reading my poem, you're awesome. :)
Comment from Patty Palmer
A bittersweet poem telling him the truth that you probably won't be back again. The end of a relationship. That's always a tough one to handle. But as they say, all good things must come to an end. Good job! Good luck with the contest!
Patty
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
A bittersweet poem telling him the truth that you probably won't be back again. The end of a relationship. That's always a tough one to handle. But as they say, all good things must come to an end. Good job! Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thank you for this very nice review, I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a perfect entry for The End writing prompt. It is interesting and informative. I do hope it does well in the contest. Best of luck to you!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
This is a perfect entry for The End writing prompt. It is interesting and informative. I do hope it does well in the contest. Best of luck to you!
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thank you for reading and for your best wishes. :)
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your lost love poem and its repeats for emphasis, with the bit of a modification in the last line. Your rhymed couplets in quatrains were very effective, along with the picture to reinforce the conclusion. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
I admired your lost love poem and its repeats for emphasis, with the bit of a modification in the last line. Your rhymed couplets in quatrains were very effective, along with the picture to reinforce the conclusion. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much, I really do appreciate it.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Excellent entry for the The End writing prompt contest.
Your poem tells a story about unrequited love.
You followed the rules of the contest well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
Hello, anonymous,
Excellent entry for the The End writing prompt contest.
Your poem tells a story about unrequited love.
You followed the rules of the contest well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thank you for this great review. :)