Honey bunny
Beach date9 total reviews
Comment from equestrik
The cadence and rhythm are good and make this easy to read, but I am afraid that I am not totally getting the humor here, maybe I am missing something. Best of luck in the contest.
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The cadence and rhythm are good and make this easy to read, but I am afraid that I am not totally getting the humor here, maybe I am missing something. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello anonymous
Interesting entry for the Humorous 50 Word Story writing prompt contest. You followed the rules okay.
I don't get the humor about the beaches....and the writing is confusing.
Good luck in the contest.
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Hello anonymous
Interesting entry for the Humorous 50 Word Story writing prompt contest. You followed the rules okay.
I don't get the humor about the beaches....and the writing is confusing.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
Comment from F. William Lester
Very nice. One hundred words is difficult enough. Fifty words must really be a challenge. You spun a very interesting story in fifty words. Your writing is tight and efficient, I don't have any suggestions to give except to keep up the good work. Well done. Thanks for the read. Thanks for the review. Stay well.
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Very nice. One hundred words is difficult enough. Fifty words must really be a challenge. You spun a very interesting story in fifty words. Your writing is tight and efficient, I don't have any suggestions to give except to keep up the good work. Well done. Thanks for the read. Thanks for the review. Stay well.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like a fun afternoon on the beach and there is much lighthearted fun included in this cute write about smiles on a beach somewhere in the sun, love Dolly x
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This sounds like a fun afternoon on the beach and there is much lighthearted fun included in this cute write about smiles on a beach somewhere in the sun, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a funny entry for the Humorous 50 Word Story Contest writing prompt. I enjoyed this poem very much. I hope it does well in the contest. Best of luck to you!
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This is a funny entry for the Humorous 50 Word Story Contest writing prompt. I enjoyed this poem very much. I hope it does well in the contest. Best of luck to you!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
It is a nice and funny 50 word story. It would be worth 5 stars (also for the slight erotic undertone) if it didn't have 2 grammatical errors in the last line. Pity!
1. Our lives are funny, or: Our life is funny.
2. ...and the juices are gone, or: and the juice is gone.
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It is a nice and funny 50 word story. It would be worth 5 stars (also for the slight erotic undertone) if it didn't have 2 grammatical errors in the last line. Pity!
1. Our lives are funny, or: Our life is funny.
2. ...and the juices are gone, or: and the juice is gone.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
Comment from IndefinitelySmallx
Wonderfully suggestive! I love it. It is nice to have a break from the serious tone I usually stumble across to see something both funny and for the more mature audience. Good luck with the contest and thanks for sharing.
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Wonderfully suggestive! I love it. It is nice to have a break from the serious tone I usually stumble across to see something both funny and for the more mature audience. Good luck with the contest and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
Comment from Earl Corp
Thanks for including the picture, because I was kind of confused by Peaches. Your story started out like a rhyming poem. Thank you for sharing. Stay safe and stay healthy.
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Thanks for including the picture, because I was kind of confused by Peaches. Your story started out like a rhyming poem. Thank you for sharing. Stay safe and stay healthy.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
Comment from oliver818
Haha I enjoyed reading this poem. It's a very good entry for this competition I think. I like the way you made it a conversation which is a bit unusual for a poem but it works well. Best of luck and have a great day
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Haha I enjoyed reading this poem. It's a very good entry for this competition I think. I like the way you made it a conversation which is a bit unusual for a poem but it works well. Best of luck and have a great day
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
