Time for a Change
What if we could change the past?29 total reviews
Comment from Kit Nongkhlaw
I am mesmerized by this story. You weave it like a magic tapestry with beautiful patterns in the design. No wonder you won the contest. It is a wonderful read. Amazing. Kit
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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I am mesmerized by this story. You weave it like a magic tapestry with beautiful patterns in the design. No wonder you won the contest. It is a wonderful read. Amazing. Kit
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for this, Kit! I appreciate the six bright stars, and the lovely things you wrote about my story. I really felt inspired when I wrote it. I would love to write a sequel, but every time I thought about it, there were certain obstacles to overcome in the storyline. Maybe someday, I will be inspired to get past that. Meanwhile, I feel so good when I know that my story makes someone happy. Thanks! - Mary Kay
Comment from Goodadvicechan
The author is an amazing story teller. The story, though hard to believe, is true. It is written so vividly that you have no choice but believe it is true.
Do such miracles really happen? I tend to believe it may happen one's mind.
I totally enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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The author is an amazing story teller. The story, though hard to believe, is true. It is written so vividly that you have no choice but believe it is true.
Do such miracles really happen? I tend to believe it may happen one's mind.
I totally enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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Thank you for this fantastic review! Yes, the place such miracles happen, is in one's mind -- where one can freely dream. It makes me so happy to read that you enjoyed my story. I certainly enjoyed writing it. May God bless you and your loved ones, and keep you all safe, at Christmas, and throughout the New Year. - Mary Kay
Comment from Victoreahh
I love the way you wrote this story, weaving the past, present and future into the plot. You created mystique and fantasy with a good dose of a possibility of "What if?" Your description of the changes of your physical looks gives the reader a glimpse of your younger self, with enough reality to remember what those days before all of our aches and pains took hold. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your creation. I am thrilled my writing somehow popped into your view, as it has given me the opportunity to explore yours.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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I love the way you wrote this story, weaving the past, present and future into the plot. You created mystique and fantasy with a good dose of a possibility of "What if?" Your description of the changes of your physical looks gives the reader a glimpse of your younger self, with enough reality to remember what those days before all of our aches and pains took hold. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your creation. I am thrilled my writing somehow popped into your view, as it has given me the opportunity to explore yours.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for reviewing my story, Victoreahh! I appreciate the excellent and lovely review very much. Oh yes, those were the days -- before parts of our bodies started wearing out, right and left! I'm also very happy that our paths crossed. God bless you, my new friend.
Love, Mary Kay
Comment from Minglement
Wow, what an engaging entry for the writing prompt. I can see why it won (congratulations!). I thought it was going to turn out that you were dead, but I hadn't read the writing prompt, yet. I loved that you incorporated your faith, prayer and your beautiful relationship with your hubby. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Wow, what an engaging entry for the writing prompt. I can see why it won (congratulations!). I thought it was going to turn out that you were dead, but I hadn't read the writing prompt, yet. I loved that you incorporated your faith, prayer and your beautiful relationship with your hubby. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much, Marcia, for your exceptional, thoughtful and wonderful six-star review! I'm glad you didn't read the writing prompt first, so that you could be surprised by the story, as it unfolded. I first imagined it all in my mind, then wrote it on a day out going to medical appointments, because the deadline was close -- so I was on transportation and sitting in medical offices while writing, but it all worked out. Yes, I was able to use many aspects of my own life, and based my character on that (you would know, more than most :-)
God bless you, my dear friend. Much love, Mary Kay xoxo
Comment from Alchera
Long Island which is not an island has become the setting place of this fabulous three dimensional (between past, present and future,) story between reality and prediction: a short story that broke the Covid 19 and the reality of the desease began to grow all around the place, and people still didn't and couldn't believe it.. taking it seriously.
Great predicted thought superhero of the past, present and epocalytic future reality. It will still be a long term desease, my dearest friend! You deserved all the winning trophy! Congratulations! and take care with Jorge!
What a beautiful picture of you, little young girl! That's reason that Jorge never left you alone, I see!
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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Long Island which is not an island has become the setting place of this fabulous three dimensional (between past, present and future,) story between reality and prediction: a short story that broke the Covid 19 and the reality of the desease began to grow all around the place, and people still didn't and couldn't believe it.. taking it seriously.
Great predicted thought superhero of the past, present and epocalytic future reality. It will still be a long term desease, my dearest friend! You deserved all the winning trophy! Congratulations! and take care with Jorge!
What a beautiful picture of you, little young girl! That's reason that Jorge never left you alone, I see!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much, my dear friend, Tony, what a fantastic, extra-special six-star review! Yes, that was me in my thirties, but Jorge knew me when I was in my late twenties, and it's true, that he never left me alone. Thank you for the compliments. I am very blessed to have a husband who loves me "for better or for worse," etc., etc.!
I am so glad you enjoyed my superhero plot. I really had fun with it, and I wrote it one day while I was out visiting the doctor! (I think actually I had two appointments.) I was running out of time to meet the contest deadline, so I wrote while traveling, while waiting etc., but I put a lot of thought into it. Yes, "East Island" is really Long Island, kind of an extension of Queens. I have family members and friends who live out there, and my husband and I spent our honeymoon in a lovely area of Long Island -- very romantic! The seashore was so beautiful.
I am keeping you and your family in my prayers, Tony. Do you pronounce the "ch" in your last name like the softer sound in "church" or the crisper sound in "cat?" Like "Katherine?" I was just wondering. May God bless you and keep you all strong and safe. Sending hugs from us to you, your friend, Mary Kay
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I really enjoy reading this story and you won the contest that I have also entered. You story deserved the #1 award. You warned people about Convid19 and you told people to wear masks. What a super hero! I can't believe you want to visit East Island. I have a friend who also wants to go there and has asked me to go with a couple years ago. It didn't happen. I might go there sometimes.
What an exceptional story
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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I really enjoy reading this story and you won the contest that I have also entered. You story deserved the #1 award. You warned people about Convid19 and you told people to wear masks. What a super hero! I can't believe you want to visit East Island. I have a friend who also wants to go there and has asked me to go with a couple years ago. It didn't happen. I might go there sometimes.
What an exceptional story
Comment Written 17-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for your fantastic and exceptional review, Lisa! It's such an awesome surprise, to get a review of a story out of nowhere, when I wasn't promoting it, and a six, besides!
The actual name of the place is Long Island, but I didn't want to write about a train vs car wreck in an actual place, not far from where I live -- there may have been a few of those in the past that really happened, but I don't know for sure, and I didn't want to upset anyone (or worse, accidentally predict any accident that might occur in the future). I don't know if you're from around here or not, but if you are, it wouldn't be difficult to figure out that it was about the Long Island and its railroad, or the LIRR, which I've been on, possibly hundreds of times. I'm not sure if Long Island is even properly an island, or just an extension of the borough of Queens, outside of NYC. There might be a town called East Island, on Long Island itself, and there may be one in Hawaii, or might have been, because it's possibly underwater now, and when I googled it, it said the population was zero. So I'm not sure which Long Island you want to go to, but I'm so glad you liked my story! I was considering adding another chapter or more, but wasn't sure where to go with it.
I know this has been a rambling reply, but thank you so much! God bless you.
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P.S. I know that you're not originally from around here, because you were born and raised in China, but what I meant is that I don't know where you are living today.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I missed this story, Mary, it was fabulous! Congratulations on your well deserved win! The thing is, when the story did break the Covid 19 had begun and was growing, people would sit up and listen. Well done, my friend. Superb story. ;)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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I missed this story, Mary, it was fabulous! Congratulations on your well deserved win! The thing is, when the story did break the Covid 19 had begun and was growing, people would sit up and listen. Well done, my friend. Superb story. ;)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for your fantastic review, Sandra! I really appreciate your enthusiastic comments and I can tell that you enjoyed my story. Blessings and hugs, Mary Kay xoxo
Comment from teols2016
A nice mix of faith, current events, and this prompt. Wonder what else she can change for the better, especially for herself? People love flawed heroes. Well done and best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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A nice mix of faith, current events, and this prompt. Wonder what else she can change for the better, especially for herself? People love flawed heroes. Well done and best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your excellent and thoughtful review. As for your question, it's a very good one, and I have already thought about what I might "fix" if I decide to add some chapters onto this story; and that's a big "if," mostly because of the paradoxes inherent to time travel; I'm having a little trouble working that out! God bless you. - Mary Kay
Comment from Raul1
This is a well written story. It is interesting that she discovered that she has magic powers. Congratulations on winning the contest. Exceptional work! Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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This is a well written story. It is interesting that she discovered that she has magic powers. Congratulations on winning the contest. Exceptional work! Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much, Raul, for your exceptional and thoughtful review. The six stars are very much appreciated! May God bless you and your family, and keep you and your loved ones safe. - Mary Kay
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a complex story with a interesting choice for Lynn to have made. The further details of the new body was a great connection to the biblical referencing. Definitely an original tale of time travel and supernatural intervention.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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This is a complex story with a interesting choice for Lynn to have made. The further details of the new body was a great connection to the biblical referencing. Definitely an original tale of time travel and supernatural intervention.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Bill, for your great review of my story! I appreciate your very thoughtful comments and your overall assessment of the plot. May God bless you! - Mary Kay