Rebellious September
Amphibrach meter ~ Rhyming poem29 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
SSSSSStunning! Congrats on your prize for this masterpiece--should have been a hands-down winner. Gorgeous imagery--fresh take on a seasonal theme. Cheerssssss. LIZ
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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SSSSSStunning! Congrats on your prize for this masterpiece--should have been a hands-down winner. Gorgeous imagery--fresh take on a seasonal theme. Cheerssssss. LIZ
Comment Written 27-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Hello Liz... you have made my day with your thoughts on Rebellious September. I am delighted you like it and the personification that was so prevalent. It was fun to try to write from that point of view. Thank you so much! Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from sammielwf
Sugarray,
I must admit to flashes of jealously on behalf of September, my birth month.
Yes, both September and I share a rebellious spirit..
Yes, September and I share a hope that the we will lead the parade (Autumnal or otherwise)
and puce colored array!!!!!! Puce colored array...well I think not!
Need you be reminded that September's stone is the beautiful sapphire!
Oh darn! ...Oh dear! ....Oh changing seasons!
No matter how much September and I dream of being the premiere season all year long.....it will never come to pass.
Sugarray....
this review is written with (falling leaf in cheek)..
I absolutely loved this entry and congratulate you on your fine fine showing.
Sammielwf (who will cede to Mother Nature's cycle now!)
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2020
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Sugarray,
I must admit to flashes of jealously on behalf of September, my birth month.
Yes, both September and I share a rebellious spirit..
Yes, September and I share a hope that the we will lead the parade (Autumnal or otherwise)
and puce colored array!!!!!! Puce colored array...well I think not!
Need you be reminded that September's stone is the beautiful sapphire!
Oh darn! ...Oh dear! ....Oh changing seasons!
No matter how much September and I dream of being the premiere season all year long.....it will never come to pass.
Sugarray....
this review is written with (falling leaf in cheek)..
I absolutely loved this entry and congratulate you on your fine fine showing.
Sammielwf (who will cede to Mother Nature's cycle now!)
Comment Written 26-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2020
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Haha... your review is so very clever, Sam... I loved it. Thank you for your wonderful review and a boost to my spirits!! :)
Melissa
Comment from Sally Law
How the heck did I miss this gem? A lovely offering and done to perfection. Like a steak....
Sending you my best today as always and blessings for your day,
Sal xos.....xo...
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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How the heck did I miss this gem? A lovely offering and done to perfection. Like a steak....
Sending you my best today as always and blessings for your day,
Sal xos.....xo...
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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Hello Sweet Sal! Thank you for your lovely review. I am so glad you liked it and that rebellious September ~ what was she thinking??? ;)
Melissa
Comment from Cindy Decker
This is such a creative way of expressing the change of seasons. All the words flow like the natural order of things.
Exceptional poem!
Good luck in the contest.
Cindy
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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This is such a creative way of expressing the change of seasons. All the words flow like the natural order of things.
Exceptional poem!
Good luck in the contest.
Cindy
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Hi Cindy. Thank you very much for the wonderful review and comments. So appreciated!!
Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
Gotta tell ya, Melissa, I absolutely LOVE the artwork, and of course that is only the start of this lovely verse. I believe the amphibrach metre is exactly the one to use to illustrate the changing of the guard, because summer isn't exactly excited to let go of her thrills, and neither are we.
A superb poem that I thoroughly enjoyed reading and reviewing. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Gotta tell ya, Melissa, I absolutely LOVE the artwork, and of course that is only the start of this lovely verse. I believe the amphibrach metre is exactly the one to use to illustrate the changing of the guard, because summer isn't exactly excited to let go of her thrills, and neither are we.
A superb poem that I thoroughly enjoyed reading and reviewing. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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I am so delighted, Gloria, by your comments, review and rating. As you know I was introduced to this meter by you and quite often reread.. He Painted Still Lifes .. before I begin to write in this meter... it reacquaints me with the flow and rhythm... a superb poem... So glad you like this one.... hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Well, Melissa - this so deserves a six, my lady, but I've none in my quiver... You've so rhythmically painted the perfect picture of peace in metaphor and in actuality -- love it! ;) Thanx so much for sharing that vision on this 'gloomy' day! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Well, Melissa - this so deserves a six, my lady, but I've none in my quiver... You've so rhythmically painted the perfect picture of peace in metaphor and in actuality -- love it! ;) Thanx so much for sharing that vision on this 'gloomy' day! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Hi Yvette... thank you very much or the encouraging words. Hope your day has stopped being gloomy!!
Melissa
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Naaah, twas just the weather... hoping for the sun tomorrow!! ;) :)
Comment from Boogienights
This is one of the best rhyming poems for this contest that i have read so far. So descriptive, you can just see the petulant child September holding out, but as we all know, autumn will have its day. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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This is one of the best rhyming poems for this contest that i have read so far. So descriptive, you can just see the petulant child September holding out, but as we all know, autumn will have its day. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Ahhh.. thanks for the wonderful evaluation and review!! I really appreciate it.
Melissa
Comment from dragonpoet
Melissa,
This group of abcb quatrains uses imagery and personification well.
This describes the storms of this well for the east coast. I with the west coast could get some of that rain.
The picture shows the vibrancy of Summer with the finch and the decaying for the fall with flower.
Keep writing, and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Melissa,
This group of abcb quatrains uses imagery and personification well.
This describes the storms of this well for the east coast. I with the west coast could get some of that rain.
The picture shows the vibrancy of Summer with the finch and the decaying for the fall with flower.
Keep writing, and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much Joan!!
Melissa
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You are most kindly welcome, Melissa.
Joan
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
I enjoyed your poem about a brave, but foolish, September. She was clinging to Summer's coattails, ignoring October sitting by the fence with his own spectacular colors. All the while, Mother Nature is getting a big kick out of their horseplay.
So many nice lines, but my favorite is...
"Amidst all the fuss, Mother Nature sat watching
amused at September's rebellious façade.
She knew all the while that the seasons were changing
and Autumn would lead in the Grand Promenade."
The rhythm is galloping. A pleasure to read.
Right this minute, we are being slapped with a tropical storm. But thankfully, we don't live on the east coast of Nova Scotia. Teddy is treating Halifax to quite a display. Not so bad here in Saint John, New Brunswick.
"A southern breeze bellowed midst drenching deluges,
with inches of flooding from wild hurricanes." ... It's the time of year for hurricanes. We just have to hope we don't get nailed with a big one. They collide with Florida, Texas and Louisiana, and often work their way up the east coast to our Atlantic provinces every fall.
Nicely penned, Melissa!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Hi Melissa,
I enjoyed your poem about a brave, but foolish, September. She was clinging to Summer's coattails, ignoring October sitting by the fence with his own spectacular colors. All the while, Mother Nature is getting a big kick out of their horseplay.
So many nice lines, but my favorite is...
"Amidst all the fuss, Mother Nature sat watching
amused at September's rebellious façade.
She knew all the while that the seasons were changing
and Autumn would lead in the Grand Promenade."
The rhythm is galloping. A pleasure to read.
Right this minute, we are being slapped with a tropical storm. But thankfully, we don't live on the east coast of Nova Scotia. Teddy is treating Halifax to quite a display. Not so bad here in Saint John, New Brunswick.
"A southern breeze bellowed midst drenching deluges,
with inches of flooding from wild hurricanes." ... It's the time of year for hurricanes. We just have to hope we don't get nailed with a big one. They collide with Florida, Texas and Louisiana, and often work their way up the east coast to our Atlantic provinces every fall.
Nicely penned, Melissa!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Hi KB! Thank you for your wonderful review. I sure hope the hurricanes dissipate before they get to you all. I am delighted that you enjoyed the petulant September!
Melissa
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is a lovely poem Melissa September has really been
strange this year. Cold and hot days taking turns and many cloudy days here in Nevada. Hopefully the change in seasons will slow the virus down. This poem should do well in the contest. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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This is a lovely poem Melissa September has really been
strange this year. Cold and hot days taking turns and many cloudy days here in Nevada. Hopefully the change in seasons will slow the virus down. This poem should do well in the contest. Nancy:)
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Hi Nancy. Thank you for the wonderful review!!
Melissa
