Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Football Chapter 1 part 2"A mother faces life's struggles.
28 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Yep, I do believe football is more of a religious calling in Texas, isn't it? lol
Another good clean chapter furthering the characters.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Hi there,
Yep, I do believe football is more of a religious calling in Texas, isn't it? lol
Another good clean chapter furthering the characters.
All the best
G
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review. I am so glad you dropped by. I've missed you.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I like the concept of your story. It kind of made me think what happens when a person is in a hurry. Spilled coffee that is poured right from the pot can be rather hot! Katherine must have forgotten about her burn when she got home.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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I like the concept of your story. It kind of made me think what happens when a person is in a hurry. Spilled coffee that is poured right from the pot can be rather hot! Katherine must have forgotten about her burn when she got home.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Too worried about her son. Thank you.
Comment from w.j.debi
Katherine and the gentelman are certainly off to a rocky start. He seems super polite. We don't hear ma'am in my area except for military men and some southern transplants. Is it common in Texas? I like it. It seems so friendly and adds an air of chilvary to the story.
Excellent dialogue. Again, I felt pulled right into the scene.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Katherine and the gentelman are certainly off to a rocky start. He seems super polite. We don't hear ma'am in my area except for military men and some southern transplants. Is it common in Texas? I like it. It seems so friendly and adds an air of chilvary to the story.
Excellent dialogue. Again, I felt pulled right into the scene.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Texans are a little different but very polite. As you said, so are military men. My husband did 23 years in the Army.l. Thank you.
Comment from Sanku
The owner of the huge mastiff keep bumping into her.He keeps apologising to her too.The accidental meetings are very interesting .It is typical of boys to get embarrassed when their mother checks up on them.
I loved it .
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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The owner of the huge mastiff keep bumping into her.He keeps apologising to her too.The accidental meetings are very interesting .It is typical of boys to get embarrassed when their mother checks up on them.
I loved it .
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
As soon as I saw the football. I thought oh no a football story. But I was pleasantly surprised. You story is very well written and your characters well defined and interesting.
I truly enjoyed the story and would want to read more.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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As soon as I saw the football. I thought oh no a football story. But I was pleasantly surprised. You story is very well written and your characters well defined and interesting.
I truly enjoyed the story and would want to read more.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review. Football plays a minor roll.
Comment from estory
Chance encounters seem to be driving these two together. Spilled coffee, an interest in football, in their kids; I guess its enough to go on. I like the realistic dialogue and you worked in those tensions between teenage sons and their mothers; the mom, finding it hard to step back and let go, the son squirming to get out from under her. And the stranger who seems nice and is little by little trying to edge closer to her. estory
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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Chance encounters seem to be driving these two together. Spilled coffee, an interest in football, in their kids; I guess its enough to go on. I like the realistic dialogue and you worked in those tensions between teenage sons and their mothers; the mom, finding it hard to step back and let go, the son squirming to get out from under her. And the stranger who seems nice and is little by little trying to edge closer to her. estory
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sally Law
I understand this dynamic as I was raised by my single mother. We were a family of four children as well. She was overwhelmed and overprotective, but very loving.
Katherine appears to be laser focused on raising her children, but there's something else here, as my psychologist husband would say: a deep-seated distrust in men. It looks like her ex-husband really did a number on her. I'm hopeful for the days ahead and more to be filled in in the coming chapters. You have a good story line here.
Sending my best today as always, and blessings for your day,
Sally XOs.....
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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I understand this dynamic as I was raised by my single mother. We were a family of four children as well. She was overwhelmed and overprotective, but very loving.
Katherine appears to be laser focused on raising her children, but there's something else here, as my psychologist husband would say: a deep-seated distrust in men. It looks like her ex-husband really did a number on her. I'm hopeful for the days ahead and more to be filled in in the coming chapters. You have a good story line here.
Sending my best today as always, and blessings for your day,
Sally XOs.....
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-It is a very good chapter, Barbara.
-It follows well from the first one,
and continues with another encounter
between Katherine and mystery man.
-The scene at the coffee shop was
developed very well with specific detail.
-It is an interesting premise that
Katherine would allow her son to
go with the gentleman.
-It makes for a great plot twist,
but I would never have done it!
-Jordan seems okay with it, though.
-Katherine is reassured after
the phone call to the school, but
obviously Jordan doesn't want
to be in an awkward position
being in a new school.
-Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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-It is a very good chapter, Barbara.
-It follows well from the first one,
and continues with another encounter
between Katherine and mystery man.
-The scene at the coffee shop was
developed very well with specific detail.
-It is an interesting premise that
Katherine would allow her son to
go with the gentleman.
-It makes for a great plot twist,
but I would never have done it!
-Jordan seems okay with it, though.
-Katherine is reassured after
the phone call to the school, but
obviously Jordan doesn't want
to be in an awkward position
being in a new school.
-Well done.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are quite welcome.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Well paced, carries me along, dialog is believable and characters are appealing--so yes, as regards your note, I did enjoy reading as much as ... Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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Well paced, carries me along, dialog is believable and characters are appealing--so yes, as regards your note, I did enjoy reading as much as ... Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sandragee
Jordan is a typical fifteen-year-old. He's full of teenage angst, he's overdramatic, and easily embarrassed. The character is believable. You did a great job of making him seem real. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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Jordan is a typical fifteen-year-old. He's full of teenage angst, he's overdramatic, and easily embarrassed. The character is believable. You did a great job of making him seem real. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
