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Tanka Pair

A chapter in the book Tanka Collection

Natal Plum Thorns

by Gypsy Blue Rose


Tanka Using All 5 Senses:

 

Natal plum thorns

have risen between us

and if I can't have you 

my life has no meaning 

bitter saps taste like the end

 

Light gray mist

drifts over crashing waves

that sound like rage 

with fierce grief of lost love 

tangled in salty pungent scent 

 

 




"Come, bitter conduct, come, unsavory guide.
Thou desperate pilot, now at once run on
The dashing rocks thy seasick, weary bark.
Here's to my love" (drinks the poison) om - 'Romeo and Juliet'

Most Tanka poems are written by women poets.

Natal Plum is a hardy barrier shrub with edible fruit. The shrub produces two-inch forked thorns covered in glossy green poisonous white sap when broken.

Barbara Wilkey challenge me to use all senses. In these tankas, I use "touch, hearing. sight, smell and taste".

TANKA is a Japanese poetic form that originated in Japan's Imperial Court, where the men and women engaged in courtship would exchange tanka after an intimate night. This poetic form was created 1,200 years ago. FORM: It's written in a succinct manner of 31 syllables (5/7/5/7/7) OR LESS because Japanese and English syllables are different. Personification, metaphor, and simile are permitted in Tanka. Capitalization and punctuation should only be used when necessary. No end rhymes.
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.

Gypsy
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