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Comment from Mark D. R.
You matched words and artwork in perfect unison for your contest entry. I am a big fan of this format - I center text lines for all my short poems.
IMHO ... the presentation level for FS reviewers will be enhanced if you raise the font size of your post. Also, I read the first two lines as a single thought, so consider a semi colon or period after your middle line.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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You matched words and artwork in perfect unison for your contest entry. I am a big fan of this format - I center text lines for all my short poems.
IMHO ... the presentation level for FS reviewers will be enhanced if you raise the font size of your post. Also, I read the first two lines as a single thought, so consider a semi colon or period after your middle line.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Thanks. I am still trying to figure out how to increase the font size. Appreciate your comments.
Comment from amahra
The artwork looked blurry, perhaps it didn't before you uploaded it. Nonetheless, I liked the five seven five poem and thought it was very romantic, Great job.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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The artwork looked blurry, perhaps it didn't before you uploaded it. Nonetheless, I liked the five seven five poem and thought it was very romantic, Great job.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a lovely 5-7-5 poem and it can be taken as feeling them there with you even when they are gone, or feeling that your world is right when you are together. I found this very poignant. Good luck in the contest. Cheers
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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This is a lovely 5-7-5 poem and it can be taken as feeling them there with you even when they are gone, or feeling that your world is right when you are together. I found this very poignant. Good luck in the contest. Cheers
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
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Thanks
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Those warm cosy moments we remember the past and feel the presence of either a loved one or feel a spiritual ambience, as the sunsets and night descends we are at peace, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Those warm cosy moments we remember the past and feel the presence of either a loved one or feel a spiritual ambience, as the sunsets and night descends we are at peace, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Very nicely done piece of writing. You are spot-on for the count of syllables. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Your ending line is a teaser...is it God who is there - or a lost love? Well-done, Poet
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Very nicely done piece of writing. You are spot-on for the count of syllables. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Your ending line is a teaser...is it God who is there - or a lost love? Well-done, Poet
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you
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You're welcome!
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:-)
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is definitely romantic what with the fire burning in the center of your universe so I think this is an excellent 5-7-5 poem. The last line is interesting in that it says, 'I know you are there.' This could mean the person you love, is there beside you or, I know you are there in my mind or in my dreams. It could mean a lot of things. Maybe you want the ambiguity, I am not sure.
Thank you for letting me search for the clues you leave for us. I happen to like ambiguous poetry.
Have a great weekend,
Jesse
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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This is definitely romantic what with the fire burning in the center of your universe so I think this is an excellent 5-7-5 poem. The last line is interesting in that it says, 'I know you are there.' This could mean the person you love, is there beside you or, I know you are there in my mind or in my dreams. It could mean a lot of things. Maybe you want the ambiguity, I am not sure.
Thank you for letting me search for the clues you leave for us. I happen to like ambiguous poetry.
Have a great weekend,
Jesse
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you. Yes, ambiguity was intended. You are kind.
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Great!
Good luck with the contest!
Jesse
Comment from Sugarray77
The meaning in this poem is endearing and heartfelt. I enjoyed reading it. I would mention that for a contest, the artwork or photography is very important. You might consider finding a better photo that isn't blurry. It will matter to the judges. Just a suggestion.
Melissa
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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The meaning in this poem is endearing and heartfelt. I enjoyed reading it. I would mention that for a contest, the artwork or photography is very important. You might consider finding a better photo that isn't blurry. It will matter to the judges. Just a suggestion.
Melissa
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you for the advice. I appreciate your interest and time
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Friend,
Nice piece of Romance Poetry meeting the desired norms; having impressive phraseology.
"...I know you are there" Lovely presentation of Guess work!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Hello Friend,
Nice piece of Romance Poetry meeting the desired norms; having impressive phraseology.
"...I know you are there" Lovely presentation of Guess work!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you
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Welcome!
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Thnak you
Comment from Senyai
Hi Mystery Writer,
Such a warm inviting poem, full of memories that stir as night fall comes. A presence is felt of a loved one long past but oh so near!
Lovely, well written and flowed well. Brought a smile to my lips, because I felt your words :))
Have a great weekend,
Senyai
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Hi Mystery Writer,
Such a warm inviting poem, full of memories that stir as night fall comes. A presence is felt of a loved one long past but oh so near!
Lovely, well written and flowed well. Brought a smile to my lips, because I felt your words :))
Have a great weekend,
Senyai
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you. If you felt, I am successful
