Ever watchful
Events on our planet provoke a response from nature27 total reviews
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Wendy,
Thanks for sharing this delightful poem. For eons men have had a special relationship with the moon. It's hard to fathom that we have a heavenly body so close to the earth. I enjoy all the phases of the moon. When there is a full moon, the tides get huge though, and fishing gets kind of tough. Too much water moving and the fish kind of hang near the bottom until slack tide.
Have a blessed day gal.
Tom
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Hello Wendy,
Thanks for sharing this delightful poem. For eons men have had a special relationship with the moon. It's hard to fathom that we have a heavenly body so close to the earth. I enjoy all the phases of the moon. When there is a full moon, the tides get huge though, and fishing gets kind of tough. Too much water moving and the fish kind of hang near the bottom until slack tide.
Have a blessed day gal.
Tom
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much Tom. Yes, for fishermen there are also many things of great importance to know about the moon. A super review.
Wendy
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was beautiful. Very concise but set a mood. As if the moon was hiding, trying to escape attention. The fact that you had me view the moon as a character with emotions was pretty cool. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen
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This was beautiful. Very concise but set a mood. As if the moon was hiding, trying to escape attention. The fact that you had me view the moon as a character with emotions was pretty cool. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Thank you Gretchen! What a lovely review. Thanks too for the good wishes.
Wendy
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is an outstanding simile. Your alliteration is wonderful, and I love the personification of the moon. I like especially how that through the shadows, hope is still evident.
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This is an outstanding simile. Your alliteration is wonderful, and I love the personification of the moon. I like especially how that through the shadows, hope is still evident.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for your super review. I am so glad you understood my layer of meaning. Thank you very much for the six beautiful stars, especially for such a short one. Very honoured to receive them.
Wendy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this contest entry. The alliteration worked, and the photo fit perfectly with the poem. Crescent moons can be, and often are, as beautiful as full moons. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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I enjoyed reading this contest entry. The alliteration worked, and the photo fit perfectly with the poem. Crescent moons can be, and often are, as beautiful as full moons. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Thank you Barbara for your lovely review, and for the good wishes too. All are valued.
Wendy
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Wendy,
Your line poem is very beautiful and gives the reader a glimmer of hope in the end. I thought that the sadness that shadows the moon is the earth itself, full of tragedy and despair, but there is hope in that small sliver that the light will again shine
Brightly. Excellent word play using silver and sliver.
Great poem, Wendy.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Wendy,
Your line poem is very beautiful and gives the reader a glimmer of hope in the end. I thought that the sadness that shadows the moon is the earth itself, full of tragedy and despair, but there is hope in that small sliver that the light will again shine
Brightly. Excellent word play using silver and sliver.
Great poem, Wendy.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Wow, thank you Cindy for the six stars. A great honour, especially for such a short one! You understood perfectly what I wanted the reader to understand. I?m so glad.
Wendy
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You?re welcome, Wendy.😊
Comment from Begin Again
A poet I am not and find it impossible to sound knowledgable when discussing a poem of any kind, but I do like the thought that the crescent moon leaves us with a sliver of hope that our tomorrows can be better.
Hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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A poet I am not and find it impossible to sound knowledgable when discussing a poem of any kind, but I do like the thought that the crescent moon leaves us with a sliver of hope that our tomorrows can be better.
Hugs, Carol
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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You got the meaning perfectly so that makes me very happy. Thank you for taking the time to read and review this tiny one.
Wendy
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Yes, they say there is still a "sliver" of hope for us, but we must heed the warnings - the sadness - that our surroundings are making clear to us.
I love these simply stated poems which say so much more than the words written.
Also looking forward to your next chapter on the trip with teenagers. How many chapters left?
Best of luck with the contest.
Pam
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Yes, they say there is still a "sliver" of hope for us, but we must heed the warnings - the sadness - that our surroundings are making clear to us.
I love these simply stated poems which say so much more than the words written.
Also looking forward to your next chapter on the trip with teenagers. How many chapters left?
Best of luck with the contest.
Pam
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Thank you Pam for such a lovely review! Yes, one has to compress something meaningful into just a few syllables, harder than one thinks.
I have finished the series now with "No dramas - just for once".
Now thinking if I have anything else to write about or whether I need to be more creative and develop some skills with fiction.
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I didn't realize that was the last chapter! I thought you'd do a trip home chapter. I enjoyed it 😀. I use prompts for all of my fiction. I just wrote one with the prompt: Write a story about someone who takes the long way home. Do you take part in the Australian writing contest? It's quarterly and they give you several prompts to use. The next one is first Friday in December.
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Can you please tell me more about the Australian quarterly contests? That?s exactly what I would love! I just need a topic or prompt to get me started ? thanks for that idea.
W
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https://www.writerscentre.com.au/furious-fiction/
You have to sign up to receive the email, then they send you the prompts and you have 55 hours to write and submit. It's flash fiction too - I think 550 words. I love it!
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Oh yes, thank you. I know that one. My trouble was that I was out a lot at weekends and never had the time to finish within the 55 hours. I'll have another look. They get thousands of entries! But yes, even ust having a prompt to get going is good.
Wendy
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written lune poem. It has a Nice overall presentation background and font. Lovely photo to compliment your words. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a beautifully written lune poem. It has a Nice overall presentation background and font. Lovely photo to compliment your words. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Thank you Joanne for your lovely review and good wishes!
Wendy
Comment from Bill Schott
This lune poem, Ever Watchful, has the proper formatting and sees the crescent moon as an object of pity: the fullness obscured by a world of troubles.
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This lune poem, Ever Watchful, has the proper formatting and sees the crescent moon as an object of pity: the fullness obscured by a world of troubles.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Thank you Bill. I like your interpretation! I hadn?t thought of that - I saw it as an object of hope, that despite the shadows cast by the world and its troubles, there was still a little hope shining through.
Wendy
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Wendy.
-You wrote a very good lune poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery describes the moon, along
with the personification with the sadness it feels.
-A ray of hope at the end.
-A good entry; good luck!!
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Wendy.
-You wrote a very good lune poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery describes the moon, along
with the personification with the sadness it feels.
-A ray of hope at the end.
-A good entry; good luck!!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
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Thank you Pam. I?m glad you liked it, and saw the sliver of hope. Thanks too for the good wishes.
Wendy
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You are very welcome, Wendy.
