Upon The Wings of Butterflies
Beautiful description of their wings18 total reviews
Comment from Kirsten Shonle
I love butterfly's. This is a great ode to the beautiful butterfly. I love the way you painted the picture. Great imagery was used. The rhyming was also superb. I enjoyed this read.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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I love butterfly's. This is a great ode to the beautiful butterfly. I love the way you painted the picture. Great imagery was used. The rhyming was also superb. I enjoyed this read.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Hi Kristen, I guess you guessed I love them too! LOL Glad you enjoyed! Thank you for the wonderful review! :o) helvi
Comment from Harry Craft
Such a great poem about a butterfly. I truly enjoyed reading this poem too. The photo goes great with the poem and the rhyming scheme is awesome. Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Such a great poem about a butterfly. I truly enjoyed reading this poem too. The photo goes great with the poem and the rhyming scheme is awesome. Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Hi Harry, I'm so glad you enjoyed! Thank you for the great review!
:o) Helvi
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You are so welcome Helvi!
Comment from RodG
What a charming poem this is, Helvi2. I love butterflies and you have described them beautifully in every stanza. I especially like this simile: Her fragile body like a breath
That flows upon a breeze. And this metaphor: Upon the wings of butterflies
Are gemstones caught adrift
Very nice! Rod
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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What a charming poem this is, Helvi2. I love butterflies and you have described them beautifully in every stanza. I especially like this simile: Her fragile body like a breath
That flows upon a breeze. And this metaphor: Upon the wings of butterflies
Are gemstones caught adrift
Very nice! Rod
Comment Written 01-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Hi Rod, Thank you for the lovely compliments and wonderful review! I'm thrilled you enjoyed! :o) Helvi
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My pleasure.
Comment from Tim Margetts
Helvi, this is a sweet, elegant piece with a gentle rhythm and clear affection for its subject.
The language is soft and sensory throughout-"a breath that flows upon a breeze" and "gemstones caught adrift" are particularly lovely. The consistent rhyme and meter give it a sing-song quality that fits the theme well, almost like a lullaby or a nature hymn.
There's something old-fashioned in the best way about the tone-it leans into wonder without irony, which feels refreshing. The imagery is accessible and appealing, and while butterflies are a well-trodden poetic subject, the execution here shows care and warmth.
If there's anything to tweak, it might be a slight overuse of adjectives like lovely, beautiful, charming-all accurate, but slightly repetitive across stanzas.
Swapping one or two for more unexpected descriptors could add freshness. Still, the joy in the writing is clear, and that's what carries the piece.
A charming, feel-good poem with clear visual grace.
Tim x
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Helvi, this is a sweet, elegant piece with a gentle rhythm and clear affection for its subject.
The language is soft and sensory throughout-"a breath that flows upon a breeze" and "gemstones caught adrift" are particularly lovely. The consistent rhyme and meter give it a sing-song quality that fits the theme well, almost like a lullaby or a nature hymn.
There's something old-fashioned in the best way about the tone-it leans into wonder without irony, which feels refreshing. The imagery is accessible and appealing, and while butterflies are a well-trodden poetic subject, the execution here shows care and warmth.
If there's anything to tweak, it might be a slight overuse of adjectives like lovely, beautiful, charming-all accurate, but slightly repetitive across stanzas.
Swapping one or two for more unexpected descriptors could add freshness. Still, the joy in the writing is clear, and that's what carries the piece.
A charming, feel-good poem with clear visual grace.
Tim x
Comment Written 01-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Hi Tim, Thank you for not only the wonderful review but the tweaks as well! I'm glad you enjoyed this and thought it had a touch of elegance. :o) Helvi
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You brought the fluttering movement to my eyes here as I witnessed this colourful insect fly by in your well worded poem, fabulous descriptions: sprite, jewels, palette, treasure, breathtaking all add to the magic of your poem, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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You brought the fluttering movement to my eyes here as I witnessed this colourful insect fly by in your well worded poem, fabulous descriptions: sprite, jewels, palette, treasure, breathtaking all add to the magic of your poem, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 01-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Hi Dolly, If I passed on a thought that brought you pleasure I'm beyond pleased! Thank you so much for the wonderful review!
:o) Helvi
Comment from teafor2
Helvi, an obvious grand title, reenforcing picture, imagery laden theme and
affable tone melds with lyrical phrases to complete a captivating poetical write showcasing one of nature's eye-catching/attention getting "bugs"...
I love the lack of punctuation, it allows reader(s) to peruse at their on pace.
A well crafted ditty. teafor2
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Helvi, an obvious grand title, reenforcing picture, imagery laden theme and
affable tone melds with lyrical phrases to complete a captivating poetical write showcasing one of nature's eye-catching/attention getting "bugs"...
I love the lack of punctuation, it allows reader(s) to peruse at their on pace.
A well crafted ditty. teafor2
Comment Written 01-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Hi teafor2, Thank you sooo much for the awesome teview!!! I 'm thrilled you enjoyed it so much! :o) Helvi
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You are sooo welcome. teafor2
Comment from pome lover
yes, they are pretty, and graceful in flight. And their coloring and designs are amazing.
You described them very well, and also expressed your delight in watching them.
Very nice, indeed.
Katharine
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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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yes, they are pretty, and graceful in flight. And their coloring and designs are amazing.
You described them very well, and also expressed your delight in watching them.
Very nice, indeed.
Katharine
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Comment Written 01-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Hi Pome lover, I'm glad you enjoyed! Love creating poems that lift people's spirit! Thank you for the wonderful review! :o) Helvi
Comment from bob cullen
The vision of a butterfly told so delightfully. Your words flow together even more beautifully than the image I've tried to describe. Thank you for taking the time to review my poem.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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The vision of a butterfly told so delightfully. Your words flow together even more beautifully than the image I've tried to describe. Thank you for taking the time to review my poem.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Hi Bob, Thank you so much for the lovely compliment! I'm thrilled you enjoyed this so much! :o) Helvi
