The Center
What really counts41 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
In so few words, you painted a picture in my mind. I think of the cozy room with a fire in the fireplace. It gives off heat to combat the cold. But also gives off warmth that soothes the soul. Everything around me lets me know that you are there, even when you are not.
Good luck with the contest.
Patty
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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In so few words, you painted a picture in my mind. I think of the cozy room with a fire in the fireplace. It gives off heat to combat the cold. But also gives off warmth that soothes the soul. Everything around me lets me know that you are there, even when you are not.
Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
In a few words, you have poured your heart out. As Helen Keller has said, "The best and most beautiful things in life cannot be seen or even touched. They must be felt with the heart." Good luck!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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In a few words, you have poured your heart out. As Helen Keller has said, "The best and most beautiful things in life cannot be seen or even touched. They must be felt with the heart." Good luck!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you. If you felt something, I am successful
Comment from Wendy G
An interesting and thought-provoking short piece. The reader concludes that a loved one has left or died, but his presence lingers on, with the warm homeliness of the fire at the close of day. The presence is very real. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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An interesting and thought-provoking short piece. The reader concludes that a loved one has left or died, but his presence lingers on, with the warm homeliness of the fire at the close of day. The presence is very real. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 5-7-5 poem you have penned for the writing prompt entry. You used very good descriptive words and the imagery went well with the words. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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This is a very well written 5-7-5 poem you have penned for the writing prompt entry. You used very good descriptive words and the imagery went well with the words. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you
Comment from Janetsue
You have submitted an excellent 5-7-5 entry in the writing prompt contest. Its message creates a strong image in the mind accompanied by personal feelings about someone important to the poet. Home fireplaces are wonderful. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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You have submitted an excellent 5-7-5 entry in the writing prompt contest. Its message creates a strong image in the mind accompanied by personal feelings about someone important to the poet. Home fireplaces are wonderful. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you
Comment from Midi O'Rourke
This paints a good picture of someone musing while looking into the flames as a lot of us do in various places. It feels like the person is alone and somewhat sad. I can't help but wonder about the last line - is the person *there* in the fire or in the room. If they are in the room the word should be *here*
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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This paints a good picture of someone musing while looking into the flames as a lot of us do in various places. It feels like the person is alone and somewhat sad. I can't help but wonder about the last line - is the person *there* in the fire or in the room. If they are in the room the word should be *here*
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you for your insight. I am glad it made you wonder.
Comment from karenina
I see metaphors even when there are none so don't mind me...
Still I could not help but think that red fire burning in your home was your heart!
If so, clever, clever way to weave that in, without being obvious. If not, take credit for it anyway! (smile)
Karenina
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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I see metaphors even when there are none so don't mind me...
Still I could not help but think that red fire burning in your home was your heart!
If so, clever, clever way to weave that in, without being obvious. If not, take credit for it anyway! (smile)
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you for your understanding.
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Thank you for writing an interesting piece!
Karenina
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Comment from Anne Johnston
"The red fire burns warm
in my home at evening time
I know you are there."
I like your title "The Center". Home is special because of those who are there with us.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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"The red fire burns warm
in my home at evening time
I know you are there."
I like your title "The Center". Home is special because of those who are there with us.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Yes, it is, Thank you for your kind words
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You are welcome
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Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"The Center", is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. Woven through each line are the golden threads of truth. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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"The Center", is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. Woven through each line are the golden threads of truth. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Thank you
You're welcome.
Comment from royowen
There's probably nothing better than a bustling, welcoming fire in one's home, we have a reverse cycle air conditioner to warm our place, simply because we don't have a fireplace. Beautifully written, this great 5/7/5 poetry entry in this contest, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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There's probably nothing better than a bustling, welcoming fire in one's home, we have a reverse cycle air conditioner to warm our place, simply because we don't have a fireplace. Beautifully written, this great 5/7/5 poetry entry in this contest, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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