Mom Goes to Prison
A Story About a Mother Going to Prison33 total reviews
Comment from Wayne Fowler
I can imagine the trauma. On both ends of the ordeal.
Your father is the one who needs to go to prison.
For almost 20 years I owned a low-rent trailer park. Deadbeat fathers were terrible for young families.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2025
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I can imagine the trauma. On both ends of the ordeal.
Your father is the one who needs to go to prison.
For almost 20 years I owned a low-rent trailer park. Deadbeat fathers were terrible for young families.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2025
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Yes, Wayne. You are so right. Thank you so much for the great review! I truly appreciate you!
Comment from mermaids
Your story touches the reader. It is heart breaking when a mother has to go to jail. Your mother did the best she could and probably wrote bad checks out of desperation. Your writing is excellent and holds the reader's interest. There are many who can relate to your story.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2025
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Your story touches the reader. It is heart breaking when a mother has to go to jail. Your mother did the best she could and probably wrote bad checks out of desperation. Your writing is excellent and holds the reader's interest. There are many who can relate to your story.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2025
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Thank you so much! I truly appreciate the kind words and great review!
Comment from royowen
Isn't it funny? I can remember my wife went off to Europe on s two month scholarship she'd won to study in Germany, my younger child was only six at the time, she would cry a lot for for those two months, I couldn't console her, only distractions of sleeping over at her friend's house. When my wife finally came home, my daughter smiled then burst into tears, it was hard for her to process the emotions. Dear people, like you, I don't think she will forget that time, beautifully written Harry, Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2025
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Isn't it funny? I can remember my wife went off to Europe on s two month scholarship she'd won to study in Germany, my younger child was only six at the time, she would cry a lot for for those two months, I couldn't console her, only distractions of sleeping over at her friend's house. When my wife finally came home, my daughter smiled then burst into tears, it was hard for her to process the emotions. Dear people, like you, I don't think she will forget that time, beautifully written Harry, Blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2025
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Thank you so much Roy for the kind words and great review! I truly appreciate you!
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Well done
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
If always sad when the Mother is taken from a family for whatever reason as the Mother keeps the family together through thick and thin. This sounds like a very personal story Harry and I felt the emotion here, I am glad this story ended with some happiness, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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If always sad when the Mother is taken from a family for whatever reason as the Mother keeps the family together through thick and thin. This sounds like a very personal story Harry and I felt the emotion here, I am glad this story ended with some happiness, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 20-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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Yes, it was Dolly. Thank you so much for the great review!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I was a little confused about the time line, because you started off by mentioning your first memory being at three. From there, you launched into the vignette about your mother not coming home. That's when I realized you COULDN'T be three and being at home by yourself and waiting for her return from work. Plus, then you write about shooting with your grandfather, so for sure you weren't three and doing that! So, I think it's important to feed your age into the story.
Next, she went to prison for six months? Or jail? It would have to be a miiiiiighty hefty amount on many checks (like, tens of thousands) in order for it to be considered Grand Theft and, thereby, a felony.
Anyway, lots of details here and a fast pace.
And finally,
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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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I was a little confused about the time line, because you started off by mentioning your first memory being at three. From there, you launched into the vignette about your mother not coming home. That's when I realized you COULDN'T be three and being at home by yourself and waiting for her return from work. Plus, then you write about shooting with your grandfather, so for sure you weren't three and doing that! So, I think it's important to feed your age into the story.
Next, she went to prison for six months? Or jail? It would have to be a miiiiiighty hefty amount on many checks (like, tens of thousands) in order for it to be considered Grand Theft and, thereby, a felony.
Anyway, lots of details here and a fast pace.
And finally,
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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No, I started by saying most people can remember what they did at the age of 3 or 4. I remember 4. And yes, my grandfather taught me how to shoot guns when I was 4. My you didn't read the story.
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I most distinctly DID read the story, Harry. But I also noticed that you mentioned that your grandparents had to come get you when your mother failed to show up after work. So were you four when that happened, too?
And it was BECAUSE you mentioned that your earliest memories were at four that I felt you should mention your age when everything happened with your mother's problems with being incarcerated. Because, with that "age four/memory" fresh in your readers' minds, then it seems like you were also four when she didn't come home. But that couldn't be right, or chances are that they then would've also charged her with neglect of her minor children, since that's a really long time to be leaving them unattended.
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Oh boy!
Comment from Darlene BoClair
As I read this story I realize the cost of having children at any decade takes a toll on the family and community. Only thing I can do is read. There is no review I an write that would change the circumstances.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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As I read this story I realize the cost of having children at any decade takes a toll on the family and community. Only thing I can do is read. There is no review I an write that would change the circumstances.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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You are so right Darlene. It costs money to raise children. And these days its worse. Thank you so much for the review!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
My goodness, you have me tearing up over here. What a rough life for a small child to try to understand and get through. Parents sometimes make bad judgements when they are pushed in a corner and trying to give their kids a decent life. Thanks for sharing your story.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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My goodness, you have me tearing up over here. What a rough life for a small child to try to understand and get through. Parents sometimes make bad judgements when they are pushed in a corner and trying to give their kids a decent life. Thanks for sharing your story.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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Thank you so much Marilyn for the kind words and great review!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Wow, your story really pulled me in! I could feel every emotion including that overwhelming moment of joy when your mother came home. You painted such a clear picture of that time in your life. I could really connect with it. I love how you showed both the hardship and the love that carried you through. Your storytelling is so honest - that makes it powerful. That last moment with your mother was just beautiful!
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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Wow, your story really pulled me in! I could feel every emotion including that overwhelming moment of joy when your mother came home. You painted such a clear picture of that time in your life. I could really connect with it. I love how you showed both the hardship and the love that carried you through. Your storytelling is so honest - that makes it powerful. That last moment with your mother was just beautiful!
Comment Written 20-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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Thank you again, Michael for such kind words and a great review!
Comment from evilynne
That is a heart tugging story. It's difficult for young children to understand the absence of a parent, no matter what the reason. You had a difficult time, which you conveyed in this well written story. Evi
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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That is a heart tugging story. It's difficult for young children to understand the absence of a parent, no matter what the reason. You had a difficult time, which you conveyed in this well written story. Evi
Comment Written 20-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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Thank you so much Evilynne. I truly appreciate the kind words and great review!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
It had to be devasting for your mother to be in prison, especially at an early age. I've had first graders whose fathers were prison, and it was hard on them, but they still had their moms. Thank you for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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It had to be devasting for your mother to be in prison, especially at an early age. I've had first graders whose fathers were prison, and it was hard on them, but they still had their moms. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2025
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Thank you so much Barbara for the kind words and great review!
