The Old Storyteller
Everyone is a Storyteller36 total reviews
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is such a lovely story and the imagery evokes all kinds of memories of the people in my life who were "story tellers." The old men who sat on benches in front of the general stores in my hometown were story tellers. I think the world needs these storytellers as much as they did in the past. They hold information not found on the Internet or television. Good luck win the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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This is such a lovely story and the imagery evokes all kinds of memories of the people in my life who were "story tellers." The old men who sat on benches in front of the general stores in my hometown were story tellers. I think the world needs these storytellers as much as they did in the past. They hold information not found on the Internet or television. Good luck win the contest.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Mary, thanks for taking the time to review my poem. I am glad you found it enjoyable and it evoked memories of your own storytellers. I had some as well. Yes the world still does needs them. Cheers
Comment from Carlos' girl
Yep. Isn't there a quote about let your old men see visions and your young men dream dreams? The concept is a nice one to write on and you do so very well. Nice work. I wouldn't mind if you added a color for the background to sort of highlight the verse.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Yep. Isn't there a quote about let your old men see visions and your young men dream dreams? The concept is a nice one to write on and you do so very well. Nice work. I wouldn't mind if you added a color for the background to sort of highlight the verse.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem. Yes take your point on the background color. Might have to get more adventurous on the next occasion . Take Care.
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Aaaw no worries. Its a fine poem with or without color
Comment from Senyai
Hi Barry,
Wow, this is perfect! Love this excellently written poem with exceptional rhyme and meter. Enjoyed reading about this delightful storyteller as his eyes light up as his tales grow larger than life with each retelling.
I knew a couple of old men that sat on southern porches, pipe smoking as they talked...their pipe smoke circling in the damp night air...
I could hear the crickets too as I read your lilting words :))
Wonderful entry and good luck in the contest with your beautiful poem.
Always,
Senyai
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Hi Barry,
Wow, this is perfect! Love this excellently written poem with exceptional rhyme and meter. Enjoyed reading about this delightful storyteller as his eyes light up as his tales grow larger than life with each retelling.
I knew a couple of old men that sat on southern porches, pipe smoking as they talked...their pipe smoke circling in the damp night air...
I could hear the crickets too as I read your lilting words :))
Wonderful entry and good luck in the contest with your beautiful poem.
Always,
Senyai
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Senyai , Thanks for taking the time to review my poem and I am so glad you enjoyed it. Yes the pipe smoking is something now not so prominent but the story tellers are still around.
Take care
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Yes, I do miss my father?s pipe aroma wafting through his study at Christmas time especially his cherry tobacco :))
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem has great imagery and smooth flow. It shows an old man that wants to share his life with other people. Maybe those people will find some wisdom in his words and he will be that much happier for a time.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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This poem has great imagery and smooth flow. It shows an old man that wants to share his life with other people. Maybe those people will find some wisdom in his words and he will be that much happier for a time.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Thanks for taking the time to review my poem. I am glad you enjoyed it and thanks for your best wishes . Cheers and take care.
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=You are most kindly welcome, Barry
Joan
Comment from Paul McFarland
Six stars for you, Barry. This moistened my eyes. Speaking of that, please leave out the "the" in that line. Those last two lines really put the finishing touch to this great poem. A rare six stars from me.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Six stars for you, Barry. This moistened my eyes. Speaking of that, please leave out the "the" in that line. Those last two lines really put the finishing touch to this great poem. A rare six stars from me.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Paul, Wow 6 stars . Thank you and thanks for your suggestion.I am certainly happy with the overall response the poem has received. Have a great day and take care.
Comment from SoulRiver
A really fantastic poem. It flowed beautifully and the rhyme was spot on. The imagery was clear and it was great to get to know (even for a short while) the storyteller and share in the joy that reminiscing brings him.
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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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A really fantastic poem. It flowed beautifully and the rhyme was spot on. The imagery was clear and it was great to get to know (even for a short while) the storyteller and share in the joy that reminiscing brings him.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Thanks for taking the time to review my poem. Lets hope storytellers keep telling their stories with embellishment.
Cheers and take care.
