Sing the Body Electric*
We are as two ships -36 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry is well presented in all areas--the color scheme, the font, the formatting of lines, the added video, and the true, albeit lustful, message. You did a great job. I really like the last lines where they taper down. The mention of St. Elmo's Fire is awesome.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Your contest entry is well presented in all areas--the color scheme, the font, the formatting of lines, the added video, and the true, albeit lustful, message. You did a great job. I really like the last lines where they taper down. The mention of St. Elmo's Fire is awesome.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi Jan,
This is an awesome review! Your words are encouraging and I thank you for the well wishes too.
Have a lovely weekend coming up :))
Always,
Senyai
Comment from royowen
I have a liking for different love poems, and let's face it tends to be more lust than real love, I guess because actual love is sacrificing of self. So this is more like it, strong, purposeful, no holds barred, bold and as they say...brassy, just loved this, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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I have a liking for different love poems, and let's face it tends to be more lust than real love, I guess because actual love is sacrificing of self. So this is more like it, strong, purposeful, no holds barred, bold and as they say...brassy, just loved this, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi Roy,
I hesitated to post this because it might be construed the wrong way, but took a chance and threw it out there. I think physical love is most important for satisfying basic human needs and should be a sacred thing between a man and woman, man and wife, two people deeply in love.
I am pleased you seemed to feel the sacred tenor to my words, because they were written from that standpoint and hoped they would be taken that way. Have a great weekend, my dear friend.
Always :))
Senyai
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Well done, Song of Songs is out there
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Yes, the Song of Songs. Ecclesiastes and the Song of Solomon always fascinated me. When I was young I wondered why this was included and kept in the Bible. Now that I am older I understand why.
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Yep, you?re wise, God is an intimate God, after all the kingdom is within.
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So true, Mr. Owen.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
We are as two ships -
Sing the Body Electric*
by Senyai
Excellent entry for the Love Poem Poetry Contest. I like the presentation and video too. Light alliteration. It flows nicely. I like how you incorporated the song and poem titles. I thought, Body Electric, sounded inverted... of Electric body, but I see in your notes it's not.
Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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We are as two ships -
Sing the Body Electric*
by Senyai
Excellent entry for the Love Poem Poetry Contest. I like the presentation and video too. Light alliteration. It flows nicely. I like how you incorporated the song and poem titles. I thought, Body Electric, sounded inverted... of Electric body, but I see in your notes it's not.
Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi Gypsy,
Ahh, this encouraging review with your thoughts made my day! Thank you for your input which I value very much. I hope the author?s notes weren?t rambling on too long?. but felt they were necessary for clarification.
Have a great weekend, Gypsy :))
Always,
Senyai
Comment from Artasylum
This is perfection and so beautifully written... it flowed liked a river raging then quiet... thanks for the poem an Frank Zappa... you have penned in my book perfection.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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This is perfection and so beautifully written... it flowed liked a river raging then quiet... thanks for the poem an Frank Zappa... you have penned in my book perfection.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi Diana,
Oh wow, thank you for your welcoming and generous review! Your words really touched me and made my evening! So pleased you felt it worthy of a six. Thank you for this gift!
I love Frank Zappa too :))
Have a wonderful weekend coming up,
Senyai
Comment from Ric Myworld
Those passing in the night encounters we're never likely to forget, even the forgettable ones. LOL. Ships ridding the waves. Thanks for sharing another fine picture and poem combination.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Those passing in the night encounters we're never likely to forget, even the forgettable ones. LOL. Ships ridding the waves. Thanks for sharing another fine picture and poem combination.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi Ric,
Your review and thoughts were amusing. Thank you for your encouraging words on my poem as well.
How?s the weather in Cincinnati lately?getting pretty chilly at night? We are starting to feel like fall in Texas even though the leaves are still brown on the trees but hoping for a frost soon to turn them brilliant reds and golds.
Have a great weekend, Ric:))
Senyai
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Good, amusing sound better than silly. But either way, I just hope my reviews bring a smile. It's down in the forties and fifties at night. Warmer than usual in theses parts. I don't expect a lot of color this year, since it's probably going to turn cold all at once. You have a better chance in Texas. Have a wonderful weekend!
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Ahh yes. The weather is strange these days, Ric. Thanks much for the update and take care.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
This is a mind-blowing free verse poem.. I can't visualize myself writing this deep poem and the exotic form you have penned. This is an ode to love than romance. Love can be about friendship. Love can mean compassion. Love can hurt. Love remains one of our humanity's biggest mystery.I can't comment on the technical aspects of the poem because I am not aware of them. I just read and feel it from the inside. Much enjoyed. Good luck!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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This is a mind-blowing free verse poem.. I can't visualize myself writing this deep poem and the exotic form you have penned. This is an ode to love than romance. Love can be about friendship. Love can mean compassion. Love can hurt. Love remains one of our humanity's biggest mystery.I can't comment on the technical aspects of the poem because I am not aware of them. I just read and feel it from the inside. Much enjoyed. Good luck!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi Seshandri,
Oh my, thank you, sir, for a most elegant review! I am so so pleased you felt this poem spoke to you. Then I am happy. Your awesome words needed no clarifying as they were generous and welcomed in my heart.
Thanks for your understanding the essence of my words Seshadri?
Have a blessed tomorrow:))
Senyai
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Hi Seshandri,
Oh my, thank you, sir, for a most elegant review! I am so so pleased you felt this poem spoke to you. Then I am happy. Your awesome words needed no clarifying as they were generous and welcomed in my heart.
Thanks for your understanding the essence of my words Seshadri?
Have a blessed tomorrow:))
Senyai
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Wow, this is excellent and if I had a sixer to give you I would do it in a flash!
I sing the body electric is the perfect title for this poem! You spell out the clandestine evening and the wonderful sheets of linen are the nightcap to your romantic interlude with a lover! Senyai, I haven't met you before but I will watch for your posts in the future!
This sensual love affair reminds me of days of old when I had many a lover come to call!
Have a sensual day, with your loved ones,
Jesse
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Wow, this is excellent and if I had a sixer to give you I would do it in a flash!
I sing the body electric is the perfect title for this poem! You spell out the clandestine evening and the wonderful sheets of linen are the nightcap to your romantic interlude with a lover! Senyai, I haven't met you before but I will watch for your posts in the future!
This sensual love affair reminds me of days of old when I had many a lover come to call!
Have a sensual day, with your loved ones,
Jesse
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi Jesse,
Oh I am touched my words spoke to you! True love can start in strange ways, sometimes. Life is never scripted and we all have to navigate the days we are given. If that makes sense. Your review was beyond awesome and meant so much to me.
Have a grand weekend, Jesse:))
Senyai
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Hi Jesse,
Oh I am touched my words spoke to you! True love can start in strange ways, sometimes. Life is never scripted and we all have to navigate the days we are given. If that makes sense. Your review was beyond awesome and meant so much to me.
Have a grand weekend, Jesse:))
Senyai
Comment from Sherry Asbury
"I sing the body electric" was a sad episode about an electric or robotic grandmother who never aged, as the little girl grew older. Thank you for the YouTube bit - I always wondered what Frank Zappa looked like. And that poem - wow, such power and glory and I love the way it tapers to an end - an electric orgasm. Such superior presentation.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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"I sing the body electric" was a sad episode about an electric or robotic grandmother who never aged, as the little girl grew older. Thank you for the YouTube bit - I always wondered what Frank Zappa looked like. And that poem - wow, such power and glory and I love the way it tapers to an end - an electric orgasm. Such superior presentation.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi Sherry,
I should print out your fantastic review and pin it to my wall above my computer for encouragement LOL! It is awesome and I am beyond pleased my poem spoke to you.
You are the first person who commented on knowing about that science fiction story by Ray Bradbury which was made into an episode of Twilight Zone. Yes, a very strange story wasn?t it? Very sad and frankly bizarre really. I borrowed that phrase from Ray Bradbury which I have always loved.
Your time to review and assess is truly appreciated,Sherry?you are very astute and wide read I see :)) Thank you for your thoughts.
Always,
Senyai
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Hi Sherry,
I should print out your fantastic review and pin it to my wall above my computer for encouragement LOL! It is awesome and I am beyond pleased my poem spoke to you.
You are the first person who commented on knowing about that science fiction story by Ray Bradbury which was made into an episode of Twilight Zone. Yes, a very strange story wasn?t it? Very sad and frankly bizarre really. I borrowed that phrase from Ray Bradbury which I have always loved.
Your time to review and assess is truly appreciated,Sherry?you are very astute and wide read I see :)) Thank you for your thoughts.
Always,
Senyai
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It was my pleasure. Something about the phrase: I sing the body electric - just appeals to me - your write was fantastic!!
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Thank you, Sherry ❤️
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Senyai,
Nice piece of poetry drenched in love meeting the desired norms, having impressive phraseology, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and remarkable presentation.
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hello Senyai,
Nice piece of poetry drenched in love meeting the desired norms, having impressive phraseology, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and remarkable presentation.
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi RPSaxena,
Thank you for your thoughts on my work. I am beyond pleased it spoke to you! Your input means so much :))
Have a wonderful weekend, RP
Always,
Senyai
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Hi RPSaxena,
Thank you for your thoughts on my work. I am beyond pleased it spoke to you! Your input means so much :))
Have a wonderful weekend, RP
Always,
Senyai
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Senyai, ): Always Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
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Thank you :))
Comment from Hitcher
Nothing wrong with jumping ship when it comes to setting each others worlds on fire and turning the temperature up higher and higher...
I remember those days and nights well... Mmmmmm : ))
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Nothing wrong with jumping ship when it comes to setting each others worlds on fire and turning the temperature up higher and higher...
I remember those days and nights well... Mmmmmm : ))
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi Hitcher,
Your review was awesome and your thoughts were too. Yes, the fleeting days of youth?ah I am so pleased my words spoke to you. Love in all its aspects is truly a treasured gift.
Stay well. stay happy ?
Senyai
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Hi Hitcher,
Your review was awesome and your thoughts were too. Yes, the fleeting days of youth?ah I am so pleased my words spoke to you. Love in all its aspects is truly a treasured gift.
Stay well. stay happy ?
Senyai
