Absence of Light
No other way out?38 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This poem spells it out bit by bit. The despair that some victims experience throughout their lives when none know the reason why. I can't imagine getting to the point where it would lead to my demise, yet others get to that dreaded door. I pray for them.
Ralf
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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This poem spells it out bit by bit. The despair that some victims experience throughout their lives when none know the reason why. I can't imagine getting to the point where it would lead to my demise, yet others get to that dreaded door. I pray for them.
Ralf
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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As I do. Thank you for reading my poem and for your insightful comments.
Comment from Debra White
Hi Boogienights,
Your poem is so well written. The structure creates tension and I like how the lines between the mono rhymed verses, rhyme with each other too.
The subject of your poem is heartbreaking, yet increasingly, we hear about people taking their own lives because they are unable to continue in this life with the burden of depression.
Thank you for sharing, and also for providing the contact number in your notes - it really could help someone who reads it.
Best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Hi Boogienights,
Your poem is so well written. The structure creates tension and I like how the lines between the mono rhymed verses, rhyme with each other too.
The subject of your poem is heartbreaking, yet increasingly, we hear about people taking their own lives because they are unable to continue in this life with the burden of depression.
Thank you for sharing, and also for providing the contact number in your notes - it really could help someone who reads it.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem and for your insightful comments. I appreciate both. Thank you also for this excellent review. :)
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Dear BN,
This poem resonates through my own experience, but mine is a happier ending.
Your well/chosen words paint a man who feels such despair, but suffers in silence. I like also your perfect rhyme--they fit together flawlessly.
Your unforgettable poem fills my heart with sadness for this man and his distraught family.
This is an exceptional poem.
Good luck in the contest,
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Dear BN,
This poem resonates through my own experience, but mine is a happier ending.
Your well/chosen words paint a man who feels such despair, but suffers in silence. I like also your perfect rhyme--they fit together flawlessly.
Your unforgettable poem fills my heart with sadness for this man and his distraught family.
This is an exceptional poem.
Good luck in the contest,
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem. I'm so glad that you're ok now, I thank you for this excellent review. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Depression has been exacerbated recently with the pandemic and people have become more deeply depressed. Your descriptions and deep and meaningful and you must be speaking from experience here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Depression has been exacerbated recently with the pandemic and people have become more deeply depressed. Your descriptions and deep and meaningful and you must be speaking from experience here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem, it's always good to hear from you. :)
Comment from karenina
As one who suffers from depression, I thank you for breathing life into the unrelenting darkness that is ever present...whispering "Do it! End it! Now!"-- How eloquently you capture (literally and metaphorically)-- his descent. I was a " cutter" for years! I needed to see the pain that living caused. I tried suicide and failed. You have your finger on my pulse! So glad, now, my plan was foiled...but oh, the darkness is so like a shroud! Great poem!--Karenina
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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As one who suffers from depression, I thank you for breathing life into the unrelenting darkness that is ever present...whispering "Do it! End it! Now!"-- How eloquently you capture (literally and metaphorically)-- his descent. I was a " cutter" for years! I needed to see the pain that living caused. I tried suicide and failed. You have your finger on my pulse! So glad, now, my plan was foiled...but oh, the darkness is so like a shroud! Great poem!--Karenina
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem. I'm so glad you recovered and are here to share your gifts. God bless.
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Thank you! I don't know about "my gifts"--but I do love to write and review!--Karenina
Comment from AprilViolet
This poem is so powerful. A life lost and the many left behind to deal with the grief. Ive sometimes thought of people who commit suicide as selfish but as I get older I have changed my tune on the issue. Wonderfully and thoughtfully written. Six stars
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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This poem is so powerful. A life lost and the many left behind to deal with the grief. Ive sometimes thought of people who commit suicide as selfish but as I get older I have changed my tune on the issue. Wonderfully and thoughtfully written. Six stars
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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You are the best! Thank you for this excellent review. :)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Yes, Boogienights, you painted a true picture of what I have read about depression. You did a great job formatting your poem into segments with subheadings. Your words flow smoothly with great meaning, details, and imagery. Those left behind after a suicide are left wondering the what if's, should haves, and why didn't I. Thanks for the informative notes, too.
Respectfully, Jan
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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Yes, Boogienights, you painted a true picture of what I have read about depression. You did a great job formatting your poem into segments with subheadings. Your words flow smoothly with great meaning, details, and imagery. Those left behind after a suicide are left wondering the what if's, should haves, and why didn't I. Thanks for the informative notes, too.
Respectfully, Jan
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Thank you for this wonderful review, it really means a lot to me. :)
Comment from Carol Clark2
This is a very well-written poem on a very difficult topic. The poem flows well, and the rhyme is well done. I love the short lines throughout, which almost tell the story without the rest of the lines. Thank you for sharing this poem.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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This is a very well-written poem on a very difficult topic. The poem flows well, and the rhyme is well done. I love the short lines throughout, which almost tell the story without the rest of the lines. Thank you for sharing this poem.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Thank you for this exceptional review, I'm honored by it. :)
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The rating is well deserved.
