Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 102 "Settling In"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Good story and well-written. I could have warned you about a spitz. It's interesting how your family found new friends. I hope you got that backyard fenced with that dog around. Thanks for another glimpse into your family's life.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2021
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Good story and well-written. I could have warned you about a spitz. It's interesting how your family found new friends. I hope you got that backyard fenced with that dog around. Thanks for another glimpse into your family's life.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2021
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Thank your for the review. I'm pleased you are reading them. We will have the yard fenced by the next chapter.
Beth
Comment from Sankey
This was a great chapter and really good reading. Not only that, surprise, surprise NO SPAGS! So glad you pointed me to this dunno how I missed it. Keep em coming.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2021
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This was a great chapter and really good reading. Not only that, surprise, surprise NO SPAGS! So glad you pointed me to this dunno how I missed it. Keep em coming.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2021
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Thank you for reviewing this one. I didn't think you had seen it.
I appreciate you my friend.
Beth
Comment from Begin Again
Little Kokomo looks far too cute to be mean and temperamental to others. It's sad when things out of our control happen to our furbabies and we can't possibly help them. It appears he did have a long life though. Smiles to you and Kokomo!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Little Kokomo looks far too cute to be mean and temperamental to others. It's sad when things out of our control happen to our furbabies and we can't possibly help them. It appears he did have a long life though. Smiles to you and Kokomo!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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He was a bit of a looney-tune. I guess he was happy but he sure enjoyed scaring people. Looks can be deceiving. LOL
Beth
Comment from Judy Lawless
Hi Beth. This is the first time that I've read any of this book you are writing. It caught my attention because the title is the same as my current novel chapter! :)
Writing our memoirs for our family to enjoy is a wonderful idea. You seem to have lots to tell. I'd like to be able to visualize the characters better, perhaps by use of some dialogue and actions.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Hi Beth. This is the first time that I've read any of this book you are writing. It caught my attention because the title is the same as my current novel chapter! :)
Writing our memoirs for our family to enjoy is a wonderful idea. You seem to have lots to tell. I'd like to be able to visualize the characters better, perhaps by use of some dialogue and actions.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for stopping by to read my chapter. Some of my chapters do contain dialogue and some contain current events. I realize people like dialogue and like to use it, but since the whole book is dialogue in the sense that I'm speaking to my deceased husband, it seems a little weird to use it too often.
I hope you stop by again.
Beth
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Yes, Spitz dogs can be vicious and over protective. Not a good pet for children. Your new home sounds great. Lots of room for a family to grow. I always wanted a two story Victorian house so my kids and their families could all visit at once. That never happened, but they all moved to Ely after we did so no problem. Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Yes, Spitz dogs can be vicious and over protective. Not a good pet for children. Your new home sounds great. Lots of room for a family to grow. I always wanted a two story Victorian house so my kids and their families could all visit at once. That never happened, but they all moved to Ely after we did so no problem. Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thanks so much Nancy. Those dogs look sweet but they aren't. I would never get another one, although I think this one might have been crazier than most.
Beth
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
He looks gorgeous! It's hard to imagine him terrorizing your visitors. But, you never mentioned how he got on with the cats. Or did they stay apart? This is another lovely part, Beth, the snow was something else! We've never had snow like that. The only bit we had this year disappeared within hours. I can just imagine you on garbage-can lids, sliding down the iced road. Lol. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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He looks gorgeous! It's hard to imagine him terrorizing your visitors. But, you never mentioned how he got on with the cats. Or did they stay apart? This is another lovely part, Beth, the snow was something else! We've never had snow like that. The only bit we had this year disappeared within hours. I can just imagine you on garbage-can lids, sliding down the iced road. Lol. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the review. I did keep the dog and cars apart. I think this dogs problem was with people rather than other animals. We've not had snow this year but it may be coming yet.
Beth
Comment from 4theloveoftrees
Beth, as usual, I really enjoy reading your stories and think it's such an awesome idea! It sounds like the move was an adventure with a 10-inch snowfall you had never seen before. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Beth, as usual, I really enjoy reading your stories and think it's such an awesome idea! It sounds like the move was an adventure with a 10-inch snowfall you had never seen before. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the great review and comments. I'm so glad you like reading this.
Beth
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Oh no! Kokomo was a terror! Too bad, I really love dogs and I love the name -- that Beach Boys song is so nice and breezy. But unfortunately, a very small percentage of dogs have very bad temperaments. Maybe you're right about the illness, but it sounds as though genetics may have also been a factor, considering the behavior of the group of dogs they were bred from. Poor Evan got a nasty bite out of the bargain!
You may want to remind the reader who Kimberly was, the first time you refer to her in this chapter. I didn't remember her from the previous chapter (until you later mentioned Jane, the Realtor) and for some reason I thought she might be one of your next-door Mormons. But, on the other hand, if this is going to all be in one book, chances are that your readers won't be reading only one or two chapters a week, like I am. So maybe I'm wrong about this. If no one else mentions it, maybe you can leave it be.
It's a wee bit surprising that Christy was a little jealous of Kimberly, but of course, I haven't spent much time around twins! Especially for opposite-sex twins, getting accustomed to a twin's girlfriend or boyfriend might not be easy. I understand that twins share a very special bond, even when they're fraternal. My half-sister Tricia has twin girls, age 12, but they're out in Montana, and I haven't seen them since they were in diapers -- just pictures, videos and phone calls.
Here are the errors I found, with my usual list of suggestions:
After spending most of lives living in smaller houses,
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After spending most of our lives living in smaller houses,
...but first you wanted to fence in the back yard.
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...but first you wanted to fence in the backyard.
...and a 10 in. snow was a rare treat.
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...and a 10-inch snow was a rare treat.
Kimberly didn't' seem to like having Christi around ...
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Kimberly didn't seem to like having Christi around ...
A few weeks into the New Year, Jane, Kimberly's mom and our real estate lady, invited our family over ...
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A few weeks into the New Year, Jane (Kimberly's mom and our real estate lady) invited our family over ...
...a girl a bit older than Connie and boy about Connie's age.
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...a girl a bit older than Connie and a boy about Connie's age.
Their family were members of the same type church as ours,
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Their family were members of the same church denomination as ours, [unless it's not, but just generally the same doctrinally]
...but eventuality hunger bought them out.
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...but eventually hunger brought them out.
Unfortunately no one in the family knew enough about dogsto know how to properly train them.
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Unfortunately no one in the family knew enough about dogs to know how to properly train them.
He kept him for several days. and when we got him back,
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He kept him for several days, and when we got him back,
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It must have been lovely to have such a large house. You must have had some very sweet memories there -- except for the furry little monster, who actually lived to be 18!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Oh no! Kokomo was a terror! Too bad, I really love dogs and I love the name -- that Beach Boys song is so nice and breezy. But unfortunately, a very small percentage of dogs have very bad temperaments. Maybe you're right about the illness, but it sounds as though genetics may have also been a factor, considering the behavior of the group of dogs they were bred from. Poor Evan got a nasty bite out of the bargain!
You may want to remind the reader who Kimberly was, the first time you refer to her in this chapter. I didn't remember her from the previous chapter (until you later mentioned Jane, the Realtor) and for some reason I thought she might be one of your next-door Mormons. But, on the other hand, if this is going to all be in one book, chances are that your readers won't be reading only one or two chapters a week, like I am. So maybe I'm wrong about this. If no one else mentions it, maybe you can leave it be.
It's a wee bit surprising that Christy was a little jealous of Kimberly, but of course, I haven't spent much time around twins! Especially for opposite-sex twins, getting accustomed to a twin's girlfriend or boyfriend might not be easy. I understand that twins share a very special bond, even when they're fraternal. My half-sister Tricia has twin girls, age 12, but they're out in Montana, and I haven't seen them since they were in diapers -- just pictures, videos and phone calls.
Here are the errors I found, with my usual list of suggestions:
After spending most of lives living in smaller houses,
-->
After spending most of our lives living in smaller houses,
...but first you wanted to fence in the back yard.
-->
...but first you wanted to fence in the backyard.
...and a 10 in. snow was a rare treat.
-->
...and a 10-inch snow was a rare treat.
Kimberly didn't' seem to like having Christi around ...
-->
Kimberly didn't seem to like having Christi around ...
A few weeks into the New Year, Jane, Kimberly's mom and our real estate lady, invited our family over ...
-->
A few weeks into the New Year, Jane (Kimberly's mom and our real estate lady) invited our family over ...
...a girl a bit older than Connie and boy about Connie's age.
-->
...a girl a bit older than Connie and a boy about Connie's age.
Their family were members of the same type church as ours,
-->
Their family were members of the same church denomination as ours, [unless it's not, but just generally the same doctrinally]
...but eventuality hunger bought them out.
-->
...but eventually hunger brought them out.
Unfortunately no one in the family knew enough about dogsto know how to properly train them.
-->
Unfortunately no one in the family knew enough about dogs to know how to properly train them.
He kept him for several days. and when we got him back,
-->
He kept him for several days, and when we got him back,
***
It must have been lovely to have such a large house. You must have had some very sweet memories there -- except for the furry little monster, who actually lived to be 18!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you Mary Kay. I'm always happy when you review my work because you catch so many things. Thanks so much and thank you for the stars. I really enjoyed your comments as well.
Beth
Comment from Ben Colder
Normally there is no cure for the sickness but yours seemed to be a miracle. Speaking of snow, we are getting our share as I type here in Arkansas.
Sorry to be so late in reviewing.
Good one Beth.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Normally there is no cure for the sickness but yours seemed to be a miracle. Speaking of snow, we are getting our share as I type here in Arkansas.
Sorry to be so late in reviewing.
Good one Beth.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you Chuck, I'm pleased you are reading some of these again and I do appreciate all the stars.
Beth
Comment from lyenochka
Oh dear! What lot of work you went through for your pets. I don't think I could handle a dog like that. The only dog we had that would snap at people was more of a guard dog but she was really good with us.
I guess you'll let us know more about Connie in the next post.
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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Oh dear! What lot of work you went through for your pets. I don't think I could handle a dog like that. The only dog we had that would snap at people was more of a guard dog but she was really good with us.
I guess you'll let us know more about Connie in the next post.
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dogsto know how to properly train them. (dogs to)
Comment Written 14-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the review and comments. One the backyard was fenced, he could scare people but he couldn't get to them. He was an interesting dog.
Beth
