The Miranda Chronicles
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "My Eyes Are Up Here"Miranda solves a mystery.
12 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is very interesting and kept me on the edge of my seat as I read it. I can't wait to read more of this. You used great dialogue and very good descriptive words. Thank you for sharing! Merry Christmas! Teri
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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This is very interesting and kept me on the edge of my seat as I read it. I can't wait to read more of this. You used great dialogue and very good descriptive words. Thank you for sharing! Merry Christmas! Teri
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much. I appreciate the nice review and the extra star. Gretchen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nice dialogue. Good work.
One thing that always gets me is how writers deal with time.
Some will have a conversation that takes at most 2-3 minutes but claim that an hour passed. Here, you have Colleen accept a steaming cup of coffee and finish it in a 2-3 minute interview. Hmmm.
Anyway, nice progress. And watch out for Missy.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Very nice dialogue. Good work.
One thing that always gets me is how writers deal with time.
Some will have a conversation that takes at most 2-3 minutes but claim that an hour passed. Here, you have Colleen accept a steaming cup of coffee and finish it in a 2-3 minute interview. Hmmm.
Anyway, nice progress. And watch out for Missy.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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I can honestly say I can finish a coffee hot and black in under 5 minutes. And if hurried, I have been known to gulp the remainder. Not exactly ladylike but I get what you're saying. Thanks so much for this great review. Gretchen
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I would die!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Miranda has been warned a couple of times and her own gut. Missy is out to get her. I really don't trust her. I am also happy that Mitch believes Miranda. I really like this story. You're doing a good job writing it.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Miranda has been warned a couple of times and her own gut. Missy is out to get her. I really don't trust her. I am also happy that Mitch believes Miranda. I really like this story. You're doing a good job writing it.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much. I'm super happy you are enjoying this story. It's been fun to write. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
I loved the ending, Gretchen. Her implied vulnerability in the face of her outward demeanor. She Is scared. She Does need her momma.
My eyes flicker to the Gazette on the coffee table. [This part is magic given what her purpose for it was, and what the reporter has just said. You didn't over or underplay it. You just flickered her eyes to it. Bravo!]
I do hope when this comes to an end that you try to get it published, or at least self-publish, if you don't want to go through the rigamarole.
Jay
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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I loved the ending, Gretchen. Her implied vulnerability in the face of her outward demeanor. She Is scared. She Does need her momma.
My eyes flicker to the Gazette on the coffee table. [This part is magic given what her purpose for it was, and what the reporter has just said. You didn't over or underplay it. You just flickered her eyes to it. Bravo!]
I do hope when this comes to an end that you try to get it published, or at least self-publish, if you don't want to go through the rigamarole.
Jay
Comment Written 16-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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I plan on self publishing for sure. Have had moderate success with the other stories I've self published. I think body language and tics make a character real. Miranda is very real to me. Thank you for your encouragement. It helps more than you know. Lol. Gretchen
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By moderate success, do you mean people other than your family bought your stories? I'm asking because I have never had success with any of my published stories.
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Yes. The first book The 'Shine Baby sold about 400 copies. The second one Sins of My Father sold about the same. The last one Baby Steps is still selling. But I would like to publish Miranda's story when I'm done. But the cost of self publishing keeps getting more expensive.
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Oh, wait! You don't mean Amazon self-published books. That's the only way I've gone. Well, except for my first disastrous attempt at what I thought was a legit publisher: Publish America!
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Yes. It was createspace when I did it.
Comment from royowen
Although the reporter is interested in sensation, and really selling copy, I think she sees more potential in Ms Toblerone than in Miranda, Miranda real does exude normality, a rough diamond, but at least honest as she can be. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : I don(')t have anything...
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Although the reporter is interested in sensation, and really selling copy, I think she sees more potential in Ms Toblerone than in Miranda, Miranda real does exude normality, a rough diamond, but at least honest as she can be. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : I don(')t have anything...
Comment Written 16-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Miranda is exactly as she appears to be. I really appreciate your review and comments. Gretchen
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Well done
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well isn't that something! Missy has a vendetta against Miranda! That makes me think Missies husband admired Miranda
in some way and for some reason mentioned it to Missy. That
must have made her jealous of Miranda and now she is out to destroy her. That is scary! Good job, Gretchen. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Well isn't that something! Missy has a vendetta against Miranda! That makes me think Missies husband admired Miranda
in some way and for some reason mentioned it to Missy. That
must have made her jealous of Miranda and now she is out to destroy her. That is scary! Good job, Gretchen. Nancy:)
Comment Written 16-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you for this outstanding review and rating. I really appreciate it. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
Some people need their momma, and other need to stay as far away from momma as they possibly can. Not all mommas know the right answers. LOL. Thanks for sharing. But please, don't tell momma I said that. :-)
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Some people need their momma, and other need to stay as far away from momma as they possibly can. Not all mommas know the right answers. LOL. Thanks for sharing. But please, don't tell momma I said that. :-)
Comment Written 16-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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I promise you mom will never heat it from me. Lol. Great review and very true. Some moms are good at advice and others terrible. Gretchen
Comment from John Ciarmello
Gretchen! I'd like to six all of these if I could. Just consider that done. But the sixies is not what writing is all about. Your style is addicting. I haven't read one chapter where I didn't want more yesterday. I apologize because I'm about to reference your writing to a bowl of Doritos. I know I'm going to want more before I even start eating. Damn, girl! Good stuff! Missy's character is exploding before our eyes! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Gretchen! I'd like to six all of these if I could. Just consider that done. But the sixies is not what writing is all about. Your style is addicting. I haven't read one chapter where I didn't want more yesterday. I apologize because I'm about to reference your writing to a bowl of Doritos. I know I'm going to want more before I even start eating. Damn, girl! Good stuff! Missy's character is exploding before our eyes! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 16-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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I like the dorito comparison. You're speaking my language. Missy is gonna explode soon. This is very, very loosely based on someone I used to work with. Drama has been amped up but a dangerous, no conscience kind of girl. It's been very therapeutic. Lol. Thank you for the great review and the nice compliments. Both appreciated. Gretchen.
Comment from Sankey
Wow, this was a bit of a change of direction. I wonder what the reporter will do with her interview notes. Still a great read and I always look forward to more from you.No spags.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Wow, this was a bit of a change of direction. I wonder what the reporter will do with her interview notes. Still a great read and I always look forward to more from you.No spags.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Thanks so very much. I appreciate this. Gretchen
Comment from Douglas Goff
Interesting read. It's hard to jump into the middle of something, but I got the gist of it. Really good character development.
One fine tune. People speak in contractions. It just comes natural:
"I know Missy. She is a born liar."
(She's)
Good stuff!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Interesting read. It's hard to jump into the middle of something, but I got the gist of it. Really good character development.
One fine tune. People speak in contractions. It just comes natural:
"I know Missy. She is a born liar."
(She's)
Good stuff!
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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I think Miranda was trying to make a point. Sounds more emphatic when each word is stressed. But thank you for this. I get what you're saying. Thank you for this great review. Gretchen
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Ahhh. Italicize the word ?is? and that would come across exactly how you meant it. Nicely done
