Moonlight Dance
Night time dance between light and dark.11 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Cosmic,
I really like the words and artwork you chose to intertwine like the sun and the moon. I like the metaphor of the dance. You can almost see them dancing like a couple on the dance floor. I like the personification at the end too.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Have a great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Hi Cosmic,
I really like the words and artwork you chose to intertwine like the sun and the moon. I like the metaphor of the dance. You can almost see them dancing like a couple on the dance floor. I like the personification at the end too.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 30-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Thank you so very much for your 6-star review. This was the first poem that I had written in 5 or so years and I was nervous about how it would be received. Thank you again for such a generous post.
Cosalind
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You're very welcome. This is a good reentry into writing.
Joan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This acrostic poem is very beautiful and reads smoothly. The description of the moonlight dancing is excellent. Thank you for sharing this entry with us. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2024
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This acrostic poem is very beautiful and reads smoothly. The description of the moonlight dancing is excellent. Thank you for sharing this entry with us. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for your feedback.
Comment from papa55mike
To dance in the moonlight across a lake with the stars to accompany you and your partner. Nice sentiment. What a wonderfully written poem and great rhyme. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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To dance in the moonlight across a lake with the stars to accompany you and your partner. Nice sentiment. What a wonderfully written poem and great rhyme. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 25-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your encouraging words.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Acrostic Poetry Contest. The criteria is met for this poem with the words Moonlight Dance down the left hand side. Very nice flow and rhyme to this piece. The descriptions are lovely. The artwork and black and white colors of the background and text add to the presentation. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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An excellent entry for the Acrostic Poetry Contest. The criteria is met for this poem with the words Moonlight Dance down the left hand side. Very nice flow and rhyme to this piece. The descriptions are lovely. The artwork and black and white colors of the background and text add to the presentation. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your encouraging words.
Comment from Mark Jackson
This is great. I really like it the meaning is clear and the imagery is strong. My only suggestion (and this is my personal preference and so I have not marked you down) a rhyming couplet makes a really good way to finish a poem. I just felt this work had not quite finished somehow. My other suggestion would be to increase the size of your text I feel that would make the whole presentation slightly better balanced.
I have given you a five because I thought it was great, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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This is great. I really like it the meaning is clear and the imagery is strong. My only suggestion (and this is my personal preference and so I have not marked you down) a rhyming couplet makes a really good way to finish a poem. I just felt this work had not quite finished somehow. My other suggestion would be to increase the size of your text I feel that would make the whole presentation slightly better balanced.
I have given you a five because I thought it was great, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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This is an acrostic poem, so the size of the poem is per contest guidelines. Thank you for your suggestions and feedback.
Comment from lancellot
This is very nice. Reading this, I wished for a few more stanzas, but that would mean more words, and I think Moonlight Dance is just fine as you wrote it.
A strong entry, good luck in the voting.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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This is very nice. Reading this, I wished for a few more stanzas, but that would mean more words, and I think Moonlight Dance is just fine as you wrote it.
A strong entry, good luck in the voting.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Thank you. I felt there was more to say. I could have written more and perhaps I may, still. I had to stay within the guidelines of the contest this time.
Comment from mrsmajor
Very nice entry for the contest, the first line is a great opening, and the last line closes the poem well...I like the last line...nice ending for the poem.
Good luck in the contest..
Warmly,
Victoria
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Very nice entry for the contest, the first line is a great opening, and the last line closes the poem well...I like the last line...nice ending for the poem.
Good luck in the contest..
Warmly,
Victoria
Comment Written 23-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your feedback. This was the first poem I've written in about 3 years and I was nervous about how it would turn out. Your feedback is encouraging.
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You're very welcome, looks like a good poem to me, I enjoyed reading it...All the best, for your future writing...
Victoria
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem beautifully captures the beauty of the night sky. I love how you show us the transition into dawn at the end. It's like a slowly developing story. The imagery is beautiful and your poem for me evoked a sense of peacefulness and wonder.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Your poem beautifully captures the beauty of the night sky. I love how you show us the transition into dawn at the end. It's like a slowly developing story. The imagery is beautiful and your poem for me evoked a sense of peacefulness and wonder.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your feedback.
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
What an interesting way of interpreting light and dark. I love it!! I like when you say, "never meeting, they often caress." What a perfect picture too!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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What an interesting way of interpreting light and dark. I love it!! I like when you say, "never meeting, they often caress." What a perfect picture too!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement and feedback.
Comment from locust
Really good job with this! I especially liked the rhyme between 'hello' and 'fellow'. Something about it sings. Best of luck in the contest! I'm excited to see what we all come up with!
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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Really good job with this! I especially liked the rhyme between 'hello' and 'fellow'. Something about it sings. Best of luck in the contest! I'm excited to see what we all come up with!
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Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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Thank you for reviewing my post. I am excited, too.
