Silent Voices
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Nothing But Me"Verses of personification
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Comment from lyenochka
It's sobering to think that "truth" is what we create or even are able to create. And yet, we all have our own versions of what happened and each person's narrative is tainted with their own version of "truth." Scary but true!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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It's sobering to think that "truth" is what we create or even are able to create. And yet, we all have our own versions of what happened and each person's narrative is tainted with their own version of "truth." Scary but true!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Very well said! Thank you so much, Helen! Xo
Comment from estory
This was interesting as it seems to be the voice of a poem, speaking to the poet. I liked that closing stanza; So build me well, I'm yours to gain; I am what you create. We get this feeling that you have to be careful in what you craft, because when it's done, it takes on a life of its own. There's a great sense of responsibility in the creative process. "I am what you command." There's this part of yourself that can be seen in anything you create. "I am the constant, quiet voice, that's up to you speak." Again there is this sense that the poem was always there, in your mind, in your soul, and you have an obligation to bring it to life. Or it will remain in the dark forever. A tragedy. estory
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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This was interesting as it seems to be the voice of a poem, speaking to the poet. I liked that closing stanza; So build me well, I'm yours to gain; I am what you create. We get this feeling that you have to be careful in what you craft, because when it's done, it takes on a life of its own. There's a great sense of responsibility in the creative process. "I am what you command." There's this part of yourself that can be seen in anything you create. "I am the constant, quiet voice, that's up to you speak." Again there is this sense that the poem was always there, in your mind, in your soul, and you have an obligation to bring it to life. Or it will remain in the dark forever. A tragedy. estory
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from barbara.wilkey
My silent voice who helps guide me is the Holy Spirit. Although once in a while, I decide to try it on my own. God always has to dig me out the hole I got myself in. I enjoyed reading. Thank you.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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My silent voice who helps guide me is the Holy Spirit. Although once in a while, I decide to try it on my own. God always has to dig me out the hole I got myself in. I enjoyed reading. Thank you.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from GoWiSt
"Nothing But Me" Oh, you selfish you. :-)
Nice reading flow and rhymes.
Well, I hope we 'create' good things, as some of the bad ones we have have had long-lasting negative effects. So, let's take our time before we fashion something new.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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"Nothing But Me" Oh, you selfish you. :-)
Nice reading flow and rhymes.
Well, I hope we 'create' good things, as some of the bad ones we have have had long-lasting negative effects. So, let's take our time before we fashion something new.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Lol! Thank you!
Comment from papa55mike
That's very true, we do become changed by how people treat us, whether good or bad. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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That's very true, we do become changed by how people treat us, whether good or bad. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from Brenda Strauser
Beautiful poem. I enjoyed reading it. It is well written. Your feelings are well woven into the poem. I like the picture, it is unique and very colorful. Very good job.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Beautiful poem. I enjoyed reading it. It is well written. Your feelings are well woven into the poem. I like the picture, it is unique and very colorful. Very good job.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Jessica, this is a most lovely verse, giving readers lots to think about. Your rhyme, flow, and word choices are simple and clear, allowing us to understand and enjoy the message. Our inner voices are worthy of our attention.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Jessica, this is a most lovely verse, giving readers lots to think about. Your rhyme, flow, and word choices are simple and clear, allowing us to understand and enjoy the message. Our inner voices are worthy of our attention.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Ginda, your kindness and encouragement are so very appreciated. Thank you xoxoxo
Jess
Comment from June Sargent
Born of choice and made in mind - sums it all up. Some tend to believe what they choose to - as absolute truth. Unfortunately, it may not be in line with what is actual truth - which stands unchanged, impossible to kill. In the end, truth will win. Well said!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Born of choice and made in mind - sums it all up. Some tend to believe what they choose to - as absolute truth. Unfortunately, it may not be in line with what is actual truth - which stands unchanged, impossible to kill. In the end, truth will win. Well said!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, June! Xo
Comment from royowen
Before I knew who God, I had an accompanying voice, that must have been God, and it actually saved my life, so I've always had that voice, but kind, advising and cajoling me, this is beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Before I knew who God, I had an accompanying voice, that must have been God, and it actually saved my life, so I've always had that voice, but kind, advising and cajoling me, this is beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much! Xo
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Welcome Jessica
Comment from Jim Wile
I loved this, Jess, until I got to the last two stanzas, and then I got confused. I guess I'm one of those who "fails to understand."
It seems as though in the first five stanzas, you were objectifying truth, but then it seems like you contradict that idea by saying, "I am what you command" and "I am what you create."
How can it be both objective and subject to what you command and create?
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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I loved this, Jess, until I got to the last two stanzas, and then I got confused. I guess I'm one of those who "fails to understand."
It seems as though in the first five stanzas, you were objectifying truth, but then it seems like you contradict that idea by saying, "I am what you command" and "I am what you create."
How can it be both objective and subject to what you command and create?
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Jim, you consistently spot the areas that I wrestle with. Your sharp, perceptive reviews are a gift.
I considered adding an additional stanza before the last two to try and clarify the contradicting transition.
I wanted to convey the thought that the truth, while absolute, actually originates from choices and actions. Once formed, this truth becomes unchangeable, making it both a creation and a constant. Though this leans more towards personal truths, I feel it also applies to truths beyond that. What we perceive as definitive is, in fact, born from the momentary and can lay the groundwork for future truths. Being mindful of this won't change what's already true but potentially build new, positive ?truths.?
Hopefully, that helped clarify my intentions, and I don't sound like a nutjob. lol
Thank you, MM. Your feedback is highly valuable to me!
Xo
Jess
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Not sure I fully understand that. If you have some time, could you perhaps give me an example of both a personal truth and a non-personal truth you feel this applies to and then how it applies? (You don't need to write an essay about it : ) )
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So, personal truth is tricky. In the poem, I was leaning more toward factual occurrences; simply, what is true. For example: a woman cheats on her husband. The cemented fact is their act of infidelity, leaving the individual with the choice to conceal or disclose it. The decision to act is where subjection comes into play. Alteration is not an option. The message in those stanzas was to be mindful of our actions and the truths that we create.
On the other hand, personal truth can also relate to aspects of belief or faith, but that?s a territory I tread lightly given the influence of perception.
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I get it now. I confess I hadn't thought about it that way. I think what threw me was saying "Born of choice" and "Build me well" when what you're really doing is revealing the truth and sharing it. Thus, if you'd said:
"Revealing me rests in my mind" and "So share me well," I think I would have gotten your meaning. But that's just me.
