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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Appreciating what you can do for her is not the same as appreciating you.I am busier than a one armed paperhanger at a wallpaper convention. I do not have time to review each one in order to catch up. Good theme. Good work. Karen
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Appreciating what you can do for her is not the same as appreciating you.I am busier than a one armed paperhanger at a wallpaper convention. I do not have time to review each one in order to catch up. Good theme. Good work. Karen
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
Comment from T B Botts
Hey Jim,
I haven't been reviewing much lately, but I liked this. I think gals with glasses are hot, quite frankly. I hope Brian doesn't get his heart broken, but I guess that's part of being a teen. Well done my friend.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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Hey Jim,
I haven't been reviewing much lately, but I liked this. I think gals with glasses are hot, quite frankly. I hope Brian doesn't get his heart broken, but I guess that's part of being a teen. Well done my friend.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 25-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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I'm happy you found this again, Tom. I've missed your perceptive comments.
Yeah, he's not going to miss out on the full teen experience.
Comment from Thesis
Being with her,tutoring her, and getting paid to do it. How can this guy lose? I like how you added the sister's words of warning that Sandi might think he's too young for her, or might not want to go out with an underclassman. I guess we'll see,
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Being with her,tutoring her, and getting paid to do it. How can this guy lose? I like how you added the sister's words of warning that Sandi might think he's too young for her, or might not want to go out with an underclassman. I guess we'll see,
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Yeah, things are looking pretty rosy right now. Could he defy the odds this time? As you say, we'll see.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I could really picture he big grin on Brian's face as he walked away from tutoring Sandi. You described the scene well probably remembering your youthful days, no doubt. Nice chapter Jim.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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I could really picture he big grin on Brian's face as he walked away from tutoring Sandi. You described the scene well probably remembering your youthful days, no doubt. Nice chapter Jim.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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The highlight of his life so far, Brian would probably have said. Yes, I drew on some of my own experiences as a teenager for this chapter. An exciting but potentially painful time too.
Comment from tfawcus
Another great chapter, Jim. You have characterised an adolescent crush superbly. I have a feeling Brian will get along fine with Sandi, acknowledging her strengths and building from her weaknesses, unless someone else turns up to rock the boat.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Another great chapter, Jim. You have characterised an adolescent crush superbly. I have a feeling Brian will get along fine with Sandi, acknowledging her strengths and building from her weaknesses, unless someone else turns up to rock the boat.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Thanks very much, Tony. What a difficult time of life with its ups and downs and powerful forces at work. We'll see in the next chapter which way it goes--for now.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
The algebra lessons went well as he does describe how to do it in a way that it is easier for her. The fact that she saw him as he hoped to be seen also helps. Maybe they can date.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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The algebra lessons went well as he does describe how to do it in a way that it is easier for her. The fact that she saw him as he hoped to be seen also helps. Maybe they can date.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Yeah, maybe. There's always hope. Such an uncertain time of life.
Comment from LJbutterfly
So far, this is going quite well for Brian. His sister is trying to kill his dreams. It's possible things go exactly the way Brian wants, even if it doesn't last. I like the way you've built in a little suspense to keep the reader coming back. Regardless to what happens now, the bigger story is yet to come.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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So far, this is going quite well for Brian. His sister is trying to kill his dreams. It's possible things go exactly the way Brian wants, even if it doesn't last. I like the way you've built in a little suspense to keep the reader coming back. Regardless to what happens now, the bigger story is yet to come.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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It's actually going to become pretty important what happens now, because it will govern the direction of his life for a number of years. But who can ever tell when they happen what sort of long-term effects small events might end up having?
Comment from jmdg1954
Good chapter, Jim. I am totally befuddled at this friendship. Here I thought she would be snobbish toward Brian, being younger and all. The way you wrote it, she seems to genuine be alright with him, maybe no to date but as a friend...
I'll just have to wait to see where this all shakes out.
Hurry with the next chapter, curious minds need to know.
Excellent.
John
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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Good chapter, Jim. I am totally befuddled at this friendship. Here I thought she would be snobbish toward Brian, being younger and all. The way you wrote it, she seems to genuine be alright with him, maybe no to date but as a friend...
I'll just have to wait to see where this all shakes out.
Hurry with the next chapter, curious minds need to know.
Excellent.
John
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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Thanks, John. So far, so good with Sandi. Maybe he will have a chance with her after all. They seem to be having fun together. Who knows? My mother was a year older than my father.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is going very well for Brian - a pretty girl who's paying him for teaching her a subject that he enjoys. Yet, obviously, in the back of my mind, I'm expecting the crash back to reality. This is clever because we're never going to be sure of when that's going to happen and, meanwhile, we're warming to Brian more and more! Well done, Jim, I'm enjoying this. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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This is going very well for Brian - a pretty girl who's paying him for teaching her a subject that he enjoys. Yet, obviously, in the back of my mind, I'm expecting the crash back to reality. This is clever because we're never going to be sure of when that's going to happen and, meanwhile, we're warming to Brian more and more! Well done, Jim, I'm enjoying this. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Debbie. What could possibly go wrong now? They seem to really be hitting it off, but you never know if and when the shoe may drop. I'll keep you in suspense for a while.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Things are looking up for Brian. I have to agree with Fran. Sandi may say no for a while, but I'm guessing a yes is in his future. I am enjoying reading this story. You're doing a great job writing it.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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Things are looking up for Brian. I have to agree with Fran. Sandi may say no for a while, but I'm guessing a yes is in his future. I am enjoying reading this story. You're doing a great job writing it.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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Thanks so much. Ever the optimist, eh, Barbara? We shall see!
