DUEL with the DEVIL
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There are some people in life who are prone to addictions and can't focus on what is important in life as their addiction takes over. I was once addicted to coca cola and drank cans of it at work all day long. When I kicked the habit, I had headaches for a whole week. We are creatures of habit and some take it to another level. It is easy to say this is my last fix, it is a bit like someone promising to go on a diet and puts it off until Monday, and that day never arrives.
Brian seems to be wasting his life here and I am not sure Julia will put up with it for much longer.
Another fine chapter Jim, love Dolly x x x
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There are some people in life who are prone to addictions and can't focus on what is important in life as their addiction takes over. I was once addicted to coca cola and drank cans of it at work all day long. When I kicked the habit, I had headaches for a whole week. We are creatures of habit and some take it to another level. It is easy to say this is my last fix, it is a bit like someone promising to go on a diet and puts it off until Monday, and that day never arrives.
Brian seems to be wasting his life here and I am not sure Julia will put up with it for much longer.
Another fine chapter Jim, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024
Comment from lyenochka
I like how Julia's love for Brian outweighs the foreboding prophecy of her mother about him. I knew she would think of it at a time like this. Good idea to switch to Julia's POV at a time that we can't quite trust what Brian says about the situation.
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I like how Julia's love for Brian outweighs the foreboding prophecy of her mother about him. I knew she would think of it at a time like this. Good idea to switch to Julia's POV at a time that we can't quite trust what Brian says about the situation.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
It is so sad that Julia came home to discover Brian's experiment failed. Seeing what happens when he comes down from a month's long high could be interesting if it does not leave him incapacitated. He may be closer to success than his drug-addled brain knows.
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It is so sad that Julia came home to discover Brian's experiment failed. Seeing what happens when he comes down from a month's long high could be interesting if it does not leave him incapacitated. He may be closer to success than his drug-addled brain knows.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Jim,
I suppose if I were Brian, I'd be rejoicing that Julia didn't pick up a frying pan and bean me on the noggin. Considering that she worked so hard for the money that was used to come up with the drug and test it, I don't know that I'd have that much compassion. Don't get me wrong, I'm glad that she is so forgiving, and is willing to go on this journey yet again, but it would seem that she would have some feelings of betrayal, or at the very least lose some trust in him. Going on tour again would be so difficult if he is left home alone. I guess we'll see where this goes.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
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Hello Jim,
I suppose if I were Brian, I'd be rejoicing that Julia didn't pick up a frying pan and bean me on the noggin. Considering that she worked so hard for the money that was used to come up with the drug and test it, I don't know that I'd have that much compassion. Don't get me wrong, I'm glad that she is so forgiving, and is willing to go on this journey yet again, but it would seem that she would have some feelings of betrayal, or at the very least lose some trust in him. Going on tour again would be so difficult if he is left home alone. I guess we'll see where this goes.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
Comment from Wendy G
I thought he would be really angry with her for her coming home early and catching him out. And I thought she would be really angry with him, for letting her down and himself as well. Maybe they will both explode in four hours' time. Julia is a very good person to be willing to stand by him - but if he doesn't pull himself together, then love alone might not be enough. She wouldn't want to live with him the way he is for too long. Looking forward to more.
Wendy
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I thought he would be really angry with her for her coming home early and catching him out. And I thought she would be really angry with him, for letting her down and himself as well. Maybe they will both explode in four hours' time. Julia is a very good person to be willing to stand by him - but if he doesn't pull himself together, then love alone might not be enough. She wouldn't want to live with him the way he is for too long. Looking forward to more.
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
Comment from lancellot
Okay, I will give you a straightforward review. It is not personal, just my observation.
Hmm, a character POV shift, sort of. I say that because in a way, Julia's character is the same as Brian's, which is the same as Francine, which is the same as Daniel and Kimiko, and Dr.... and so on. They all seem like they're cut from the same template.
"Perhaps I should feel anger that he has squandered our money, and he appears to have done nothing to fix this problem that he created after it had been going so well"
-Yes, you're shining a light on what the readers will take as an obvious story and character issue, but that doesn't eliminate the problem. As the character of Julia doubles down (like we knew she would) on the 'saintly support' syndrome that most of the characters have. They are not normal or balanced humans, and they all (except for stepmom) behave like they are all on some happy drug or live in a strange world where they are exceptional humans.
And yet again Brian seems as if he will suffer no real consequence or repercussions or loss. Which at this point the reader knows he won't, so.... what devil is there?
Now, don't say the usual FanStory, I'm sorry you don't like it. That's not it. Jim, you can write. You can. This story, like the others are ultra positive, and an outgrowth of you. But you, and your personality can't be the source of every story. That makes the world and behavior of the individual characters unrealistic, predictable and carbon copies.
Brian is an unrealistic addict, because he has not been allowed to behave like a typical addict or even hit rock bottom. That would be negative. A real addict, steals, lies, cheats, abandons, get abandoned, loses morals, rebels, denies, has friends and family who doubt him, get angry, fight him, walk out, cry, and so on. Brian (the genius) hasn't even been arrested once, or gone homeless, or kicked out of school, or fired, or dumped. And his sister is a cop, now FBI agent
So, if there is a devil, it is not an effective devil. He even has a perfect excuse for being on drugs. A real incurable painful injury. So, he is not to blame for his actions.
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Okay, I will give you a straightforward review. It is not personal, just my observation.
Hmm, a character POV shift, sort of. I say that because in a way, Julia's character is the same as Brian's, which is the same as Francine, which is the same as Daniel and Kimiko, and Dr.... and so on. They all seem like they're cut from the same template.
"Perhaps I should feel anger that he has squandered our money, and he appears to have done nothing to fix this problem that he created after it had been going so well"
-Yes, you're shining a light on what the readers will take as an obvious story and character issue, but that doesn't eliminate the problem. As the character of Julia doubles down (like we knew she would) on the 'saintly support' syndrome that most of the characters have. They are not normal or balanced humans, and they all (except for stepmom) behave like they are all on some happy drug or live in a strange world where they are exceptional humans.
And yet again Brian seems as if he will suffer no real consequence or repercussions or loss. Which at this point the reader knows he won't, so.... what devil is there?
Now, don't say the usual FanStory, I'm sorry you don't like it. That's not it. Jim, you can write. You can. This story, like the others are ultra positive, and an outgrowth of you. But you, and your personality can't be the source of every story. That makes the world and behavior of the individual characters unrealistic, predictable and carbon copies.
Brian is an unrealistic addict, because he has not been allowed to behave like a typical addict or even hit rock bottom. That would be negative. A real addict, steals, lies, cheats, abandons, get abandoned, loses morals, rebels, denies, has friends and family who doubt him, get angry, fight him, walk out, cry, and so on. Brian (the genius) hasn't even been arrested once, or gone homeless, or kicked out of school, or fired, or dumped. And his sister is a cop, now FBI agent
So, if there is a devil, it is not an effective devil. He even has a perfect excuse for being on drugs. A real incurable painful injury. So, he is not to blame for his actions.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024