Body of a Horse, Heart of a Man
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "The Journey Begins"A modern twist on Greek Mythology.
16 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Hi Rhonda, it is lovely to see that you're back with the story. I really enjoyed this and it's good to get back into the story.
I know that you have a lot on your plate. How is it going? I often think about you and Wayne.
As for me, I have once again slowed down from the site. I very nearly left. What Trump said about Greenland/Denmark and him being prepared to use force to achieve his goal totally threw me. We're NATO for Peet's sake. I'm Danish with an American brother. We share the same father, so by blood I'm half American. He voted for Trump and this site is American .I feel totally betrayed.
Now, having said all this, I have decided to stay, but not as actively. At least for the foreseeable future. Hugs, Ulla xx
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Hi Rhonda, it is lovely to see that you're back with the story. I really enjoyed this and it's good to get back into the story.
I know that you have a lot on your plate. How is it going? I often think about you and Wayne.
As for me, I have once again slowed down from the site. I very nearly left. What Trump said about Greenland/Denmark and him being prepared to use force to achieve his goal totally threw me. We're NATO for Peet's sake. I'm Danish with an American brother. We share the same father, so by blood I'm half American. He voted for Trump and this site is American .I feel totally betrayed.
Now, having said all this, I have decided to stay, but not as actively. At least for the foreseeable future. Hugs, Ulla xx
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Hey, Dear Ulla,
I'm so sorry for what has happened to you and your people!! No need to leave this site. We are your family!!! I appreciate your six stars and review, my friend!
Love and hugs,
Rhonda
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Thank you so much, Rhonda, dear friend. Xcx
Comment from Jacob1395
Mary does seem like a lovely person, although, like Diantha, I am wondering if something more is going on here and if, perhaps she has stumbled into a trap. Another excellent chapter, Rhonda, I really enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Mary does seem like a lovely person, although, like Diantha, I am wondering if something more is going on here and if, perhaps she has stumbled into a trap. Another excellent chapter, Rhonda, I really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Hi Jacob,
Thank you so much for your review, my friend!! She's definitely not in a trap, no more than the rest of them anyway.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from royowen
Diantha has been taken in her home, welcomed and provided with fresh clothing one and a very comfortable bed and surrounds and she is blessed by the
the sheer comfort of the surrounds, all the girls love Atrius, but for obvious reasons unavailable, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Diantha has been taken in her home, welcomed and provided with fresh clothing one and a very comfortable bed and surrounds and she is blessed by the
the sheer comfort of the surrounds, all the girls love Atrius, but for obvious reasons unavailable, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much, Roy. A little calm before the storms.
Take care,
Rhonda
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Well done
Comment from Pam (respa)
Very good images and chapter to go with them, Rhonda. We see Diantha in a different setting and having to say goodbye to Atrius. You do a good job introducing Mary, who sounds very kind and just like a mother who cares for her family and others, as well. I imagine it was hard for Diantha to see Atrius leave as if there had been no connection between them. A romance seemed to be brewing, but maybe it wasn't meant to be.
Mary also seems perceptive and gives Diantha some good advice about all those who had fallen under the spell of Atrius. Good descriptive detail of the room where Diantha will be staying. It sounds very pleasant and comfortable.
Diantha seems interested in the clothes that Mary was recommending for her, as well as the significance of the patch in this society. It was amazing that there was a mix of things from two different centuries.
A very good conclusion that describes Diantha and her thoughts about where she is and what exactly was giving her this feeling of comfort? You leave her and the reader wondering what the real Concorde Valley is. You need a question mark at the end of the very last sentence.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2025
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Very good images and chapter to go with them, Rhonda. We see Diantha in a different setting and having to say goodbye to Atrius. You do a good job introducing Mary, who sounds very kind and just like a mother who cares for her family and others, as well. I imagine it was hard for Diantha to see Atrius leave as if there had been no connection between them. A romance seemed to be brewing, but maybe it wasn't meant to be.
Mary also seems perceptive and gives Diantha some good advice about all those who had fallen under the spell of Atrius. Good descriptive detail of the room where Diantha will be staying. It sounds very pleasant and comfortable.
Diantha seems interested in the clothes that Mary was recommending for her, as well as the significance of the patch in this society. It was amazing that there was a mix of things from two different centuries.
A very good conclusion that describes Diantha and her thoughts about where she is and what exactly was giving her this feeling of comfort? You leave her and the reader wondering what the real Concorde Valley is. You need a question mark at the end of the very last sentence.
Very well done.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2025
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Hi Pam,
Thank you so much for the six star rating!! I appreciate your comments about the development of Diantha, and the possibility that Atrius just might not be the right one for her. I'm about to take her further down that rabbit hole. Thanks for finding the missing question mark as well.
I appreciate your time on this project,
Take care,
Rhonda
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Rhonda. I think Diantha and Atrius make a good couple and oddly enough are believable even though he is a centaur. But you never know when it might be possible for that to change:) I am enjoying the story.
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Thank you so much. The situation will intensify as a new character is introduced, lol.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Diantha actually is in a much safer place than the governor's mansion she once lived in. She also is very comfortable in her new home with someone who will know how to be a true friend.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2025
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Diantha actually is in a much safer place than the governor's mansion she once lived in. She also is very comfortable in her new home with someone who will know how to be a true friend.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2025
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Hi Carol,
In a bit, you'll find safety isn't quite what you think it will be, but it will be a more satisfying way of life.
Thanks so much,
I always appreciate your time reviewing this book.
Rhonda
Comment from DonandVicki
I'm guessing that there is a serpent somewhere in the woodpile. I enjoyed the way that you gave a vivid description of the lady at the beginning of the chapter and the dialogue was very believable.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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I'm guessing that there is a serpent somewhere in the woodpile. I enjoyed the way that you gave a vivid description of the lady at the beginning of the chapter and the dialogue was very believable.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Hi Don,
Thank you so much for the review and comments!! There's a snake, or a threat anyway, but Diantha won't find out about it right away.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What a fascinating place in which she now finds herself. The visuals suggest it is safe and cosy, even of a fairytale quality. And the embroidered patch adds still more of a quaint and mysterious element. I like the fact that the home has a mix of modern with 18th century so that we can't quite pinpoint this timeless location. And, as for Atrius, has Diantha been, disappointingly, misled by his magical charms, like so many others? Is this her salvation or something much more perilous? Your faultlessly written story, Rhonda, asks more questions that it answers. I must read on:) Warm wishes Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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What a fascinating place in which she now finds herself. The visuals suggest it is safe and cosy, even of a fairytale quality. And the embroidered patch adds still more of a quaint and mysterious element. I like the fact that the home has a mix of modern with 18th century so that we can't quite pinpoint this timeless location. And, as for Atrius, has Diantha been, disappointingly, misled by his magical charms, like so many others? Is this her salvation or something much more perilous? Your faultlessly written story, Rhonda, asks more questions that it answers. I must read on:) Warm wishes Debbie
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Hi Debbie,
Thank you so much for the lovely review!!
The fairytale quality was intentional, and a place of refuge from what she's been through and where she's heading.
Timeless is also what I was going for.
Diantha isn't deceived, but Atrius has some decisions of his own to make. While a caring guy, he still has some selfish traits that he'll have to overcome before his condition changes.
Thanks again, my friend,
Hugs,
Rhonda
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I think I was trying to get into Diantha's head but not really imagining that the build-up so far in the story would possibly allow Atrius to let her down. I didn't explain that very well:(
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a shame that Atrius can't have a proper relationship. We know that Diantha has come under his spell and has strong feelings for him. I wonder if there isn't a spell that would undo the one that nasty witch put on him. Now she is settled with the lovely Mary, she will learn more about where she is living. And you've ended this chapter with an awful sense of foreboding. We wait to find out. Well done, my dear friend. Another great chapter. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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What a shame that Atrius can't have a proper relationship. We know that Diantha has come under his spell and has strong feelings for him. I wonder if there isn't a spell that would undo the one that nasty witch put on him. Now she is settled with the lovely Mary, she will learn more about where she is living. And you've ended this chapter with an awful sense of foreboding. We wait to find out. Well done, my dear friend. Another great chapter. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Hi Sandra,
Thank you so much for the six stars and for the comments. You're a fantasy writer, so you understand the score for Atrius. There's a key to it all, and it will show up in a bit. Point is, he is still too involved with loving what he is, both when he was on Mount Olympus and now to want badly enough to change.
Foreboding...yes!!
Love and hugs,
Rhonda
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Yes, I can understand that. Okay. We will have to find that 'witch' and have her put a spell on Diantha!!!! 😂xxx
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Hehe. Well, it was Zeus who did it, but maybe he'll deal with his reluctant Nephew, lol. He has to deal with hubris first.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Hi Rhonda, I like the way you used this chapter to get us familiar with Mary, her home and the surroundings that Diantha would be a part of for a while. You explained in such detail about Mary's personality as well as how she looked.
I sure could understand how it was so hard to be left at a stranger's home, even though she knew it was coming. And of course she was nervous and didn't want to leave Atrius' side.
The house and Diantha's room too you gave such a great description of. I was thinking how helpful that will be with the coming chapters to have the image and focus already planted in our minds. Brilliant thinking on your behalf.
Also giving us all of Diantha's feelings, fears and emotions was such a big part of learning about her first day in this village. As I read I realized I would have felt the exact same way as she did. It was so very relatable.
Then the ending was the icing on the cake as you hinted at the fact that there may be a hidden secret or something that may not be as perfect as it appeared. And that Diantha had that in the back of her mind or in her subconscious as she adapted to her temporary home.
Great job and as always, I am so excited for more, as this gets more and more intriguing by the minute. Thank you again for this awesome chapter and read.
Love, Debi
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Hi Rhonda, I like the way you used this chapter to get us familiar with Mary, her home and the surroundings that Diantha would be a part of for a while. You explained in such detail about Mary's personality as well as how she looked.
I sure could understand how it was so hard to be left at a stranger's home, even though she knew it was coming. And of course she was nervous and didn't want to leave Atrius' side.
The house and Diantha's room too you gave such a great description of. I was thinking how helpful that will be with the coming chapters to have the image and focus already planted in our minds. Brilliant thinking on your behalf.
Also giving us all of Diantha's feelings, fears and emotions was such a big part of learning about her first day in this village. As I read I realized I would have felt the exact same way as she did. It was so very relatable.
Then the ending was the icing on the cake as you hinted at the fact that there may be a hidden secret or something that may not be as perfect as it appeared. And that Diantha had that in the back of her mind or in her subconscious as she adapted to her temporary home.
Great job and as always, I am so excited for more, as this gets more and more intriguing by the minute. Thank you again for this awesome chapter and read.
Love, Debi
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Wow, Debi,
What a comprehensive review, my dear friend!! It was almost as long as my chapter. I feel so special, and it was so helpful. You actually nailed my reasons for the chapter.
I know it doesn't read as exciting as some of the others, but I wanted to set the scene as well.
I did leave with the hint so people understood there is something else going on.
Much love,
Rhonda
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I am trying harder to give my reviewers more of what I would like to see in my own.
You are always so detailed with me, which always helps me so much.
There are so many reviews that I sometimes get that make me wonder if they are even reviewing what I wrote or someone else's post. You know?
Comment from forestport12
Your descriptions really drew me in. The simple way and with few words you described people and the setting. It's almost like a different style from before, but I admit I haven't been there for you in review. I do like this new novel you've started.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Your descriptions really drew me in. The simple way and with few words you described people and the setting. It's almost like a different style from before, but I admit I haven't been there for you in review. I do like this new novel you've started.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Hi Stan,
I really appreciate you taking the time to review, my friend.
This chapter is a step back from the action to set the scene. It's something I'm not usually good at doing and mostly because the readers prefer action. Sometimes, you have to spend time with detail.
Thanks again for the stars and the comments. It really makes me feel better about taking time to explain some things.
Take care,
Rhonda
