A note from our bird feeder
1-6-1 wild life poem3 total reviews
Comment from Amelie Johns
This is a lovely 1-6-1 poem. I like how the three lines are so interconnected. This is a perfect poem for this time of year as the birds struggle to survive in Winter Season. A beautiful sentiment is expressed here.
I think it is great as it is. An alternative I can think of would be to put 'mission achieve' with the quotations leaving out the 'd', to match up with the 'e' at the end of 'give' and 'live'. Just a thought but equally great as it is. Thanks for sharing. This is a fine entry. Best of luck!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025
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This is a lovely 1-6-1 poem. I like how the three lines are so interconnected. This is a perfect poem for this time of year as the birds struggle to survive in Winter Season. A beautiful sentiment is expressed here.
I think it is great as it is. An alternative I can think of would be to put 'mission achieve' with the quotations leaving out the 'd', to match up with the 'e' at the end of 'give' and 'live'. Just a thought but equally great as it is. Thanks for sharing. This is a fine entry. Best of luck!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025
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Thanks so much for reading and for the suggestion! My husband said the same thing so I guess that makes it two persons suggesting this now. I will change it. Thank you so much!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I enjoyed your poem! "Wild birds mission achieved" is a wonderful way to end this poem. The word "Live" at the end is a nice touch - you can feel the happiness that the birds are being helped. Great job! Keep it up!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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I enjoyed your poem! "Wild birds mission achieved" is a wonderful way to end this poem. The word "Live" at the end is a nice touch - you can feel the happiness that the birds are being helped. Great job! Keep it up!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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Thank you so much for your kind words and for taking the time to review!
Comment from mermaids
I have a bird feeder at my window so I can relate to your words. Excellent 1-6-1 use of words that captures a picture of nature. Having a bird feeder is a wonderful experience to watch the various birds. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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I have a bird feeder at my window so I can relate to your words. Excellent 1-6-1 use of words that captures a picture of nature. Having a bird feeder is a wonderful experience to watch the various birds. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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Thank you so much for your kind words, well wishes, and for taking the time to review!
