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Comment from Teri7
Craig, This is such a sweet and precious love poem for your wife. You have been holding out on us with the romance poems! You used such loving and great words. I wish you both a very happy and blessed Valentines Day/Night! Teri
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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Craig, This is such a sweet and precious love poem for your wife. You have been holding out on us with the romance poems! You used such loving and great words. I wish you both a very happy and blessed Valentines Day/Night! Teri
Comment Written 14-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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Thank you, Teri. It was a lovely day and evening. Wishing you the same. Craig
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You are so welcome my friend! Thank you also!
Comment from Bill Schott
This blank verse, You, presented with two octaves and a couplet, is masterfully composed to present the general universal truisms in the first section, then finding all those positives in the traits of the companion. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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This blank verse, You, presented with two octaves and a couplet, is masterfully composed to present the general universal truisms in the first section, then finding all those positives in the traits of the companion. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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Thanks for the kind comments, Bill. Glad it made sense to you. Cheers, Craig.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi
This is a very romantic blank verse love poem. I like how each line in the second stanza coincides with its matching line in the first stanza. The couplet summarizes the poem. Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy your weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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Hi
This is a very romantic blank verse love poem. I like how each line in the second stanza coincides with its matching line in the first stanza. The couplet summarizes the poem. Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy your weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 14-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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Thanks, Joan, for the very kind comments and good wishes. Have a great weekend. Much appreciated, Craig.
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Thanks, Joan, for the very kind comments and good wishes. Have a great weekend. Much appreciated, Craig.
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You are most kindly welcome, Craig.
I'll try my best despite the icy temps.
Joan
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Craig
There must of been a glitch in the system. This posted twice.
Joan
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No worries, Joan. It seems to have been happening a lot lately in the forums, too.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a very special Valentine's poem for yor valentine, Craig. I like all the comparisons you've made and the closing couplet is beautiful. Well done, cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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This is a very special Valentine's poem for yor valentine, Craig. I like all the comparisons you've made and the closing couplet is beautiful. Well done, cheers
Valda
Comment Written 14-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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Thanks, Valda, for the lovely comments. Much appreciated, Craig
Comment from lyenochka
I lovely sonnet-like poem for your beloved. (Instead of ten lines, you have eighteen but it is written with the lovely iambic pentameter and ends with a couplet. ) I liked the various metaphors from boats to meals. I especially liked the allusion to all the senses including the taste of the loved one's spices she brings to life!
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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I lovely sonnet-like poem for your beloved. (Instead of ten lines, you have eighteen but it is written with the lovely iambic pentameter and ends with a couplet. ) I liked the various metaphors from boats to meals. I especially liked the allusion to all the senses including the taste of the loved one's spices she brings to life!
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2025
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Hi Helen,
Yep, a couple of differences. 4.5 stanzas instead of 3.5, and no rhymes. It's basically just blank verse (which doesn't have a set length or format, other than the iambic pentameter). Glad you enjoyed, thanks for the lovely comments :) Craig
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You know I didn't even miss the rhymes! So it worked beautifully!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Wow, Craig, this is very good! Your free verse reads beautifully with fluency and evocative imagery, in particular, the metaphor of the ship without a rudder. My favourite lines (though all are good):
"You are the spice that makes my life a feast/of tasty treats and succulent delights."
This romantic verse is a joy to read and I wouldn't change a thing - well maybe remove the errant punctuation between 'wherever' and 'it' in the second stanza. A strong contender - good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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Wow, Craig, this is very good! Your free verse reads beautifully with fluency and evocative imagery, in particular, the metaphor of the ship without a rudder. My favourite lines (though all are good):
"You are the spice that makes my life a feast/of tasty treats and succulent delights."
This romantic verse is a joy to read and I wouldn't change a thing - well maybe remove the errant punctuation between 'wherever' and 'it' in the second stanza. A strong contender - good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 13-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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Thanks so much for the encouraging comments, Debbie. Much appreciation too for spotting the uninvited full stop; I'm not sure how that found its way in! Cheers, Craig
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed the way your lover mad you feel here when you describe your inner most feelings here with emotion and love. When we have this kind of support it is hard to let go of it, much enjoyed, a skilful post and I hung onto your every word here, a delightful read, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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I enjoyed the way your lover mad you feel here when you describe your inner most feelings here with emotion and love. When we have this kind of support it is hard to let go of it, much enjoyed, a skilful post and I hung onto your every word here, a delightful read, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 13-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the delightful comments, Dolly. Much appreciated. Craig.
Comment from Debbie Pope
I think that you have a winner here with this sonnet. The very format speaks of love. My favorite line is
the channel safe when you are at the helm
Deep down, women don't want to be protected. They like being at the helm because they trust the female judgment. For you as a man to recognize that is very loving to me. That's what makes this line stand out.
I also like
you are the spice that makes my life a feast
of tasty treats and succulent delights
In these last two lines, you open yourself to female whims and eccentricities. That too is incredibly loving. You let your lover blossom and revel in her ways.
I probably should have prefaced my comments saying that I read this sonnet as a man to a woman. That is the way that it works for me. Of course that is the way that you wrote it. It is very loving, sincere, artful, and good.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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I think that you have a winner here with this sonnet. The very format speaks of love. My favorite line is
the channel safe when you are at the helm
Deep down, women don't want to be protected. They like being at the helm because they trust the female judgment. For you as a man to recognize that is very loving to me. That's what makes this line stand out.
I also like
you are the spice that makes my life a feast
of tasty treats and succulent delights
In these last two lines, you open yourself to female whims and eccentricities. That too is incredibly loving. You let your lover blossom and revel in her ways.
I probably should have prefaced my comments saying that I read this sonnet as a man to a woman. That is the way that it works for me. Of course that is the way that you wrote it. It is very loving, sincere, artful, and good.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the lovely comments, Debbie, and insightful as always. I know I'd be far less without the love, support and wisdom of my better half, and life would be a lot less fun. Thanks for the lovely shiny stars, too. Craig
Comment from Elizabeth-Ann1
When you know you're in love, this is how it feels. You still go through the storms and the throws of hardship and smelling the roses, but when it's with your person, it changes everything. Love this piece!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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When you know you're in love, this is how it feels. You still go through the storms and the throws of hardship and smelling the roses, but when it's with your person, it changes everything. Love this piece!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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Yes, it does change everything. Thanks for the lovely comments, and I'm glad you enjoyed. Cheers, Craig.
Comment from Ulla
Aw, This is a love declaration if I'd ever heard one. What a wonderful poem to write to and about the person that means most to you. All the best in the contest.
It's good to seeing you back. Ulla:)))
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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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Aw, This is a love declaration if I'd ever heard one. What a wonderful poem to write to and about the person that means most to you. All the best in the contest.
It's good to seeing you back. Ulla:)))
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Comment Written 13-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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Thanks so much, Ulla. Your supportive comments mean a lot. Good to be back; I hope the creative juices will flow enough to hang around a while :) All the best, Craig.
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I hope so Craig. Lol
