Scene at a Cast Meeting
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Comment from kahpot
The examination and its description of the body's condition were amazing, had me feeling for the poor lass, I must have missed GED becoming a zombie but those lines comparing the two were great, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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The examination and its description of the body's condition were amazing, had me feeling for the poor lass, I must have missed GED becoming a zombie but those lines comparing the two were great, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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When Ned was running for "Predsodent" there was a lot of chaos.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
A little more serious setting to the scenes with the murder of Pez acting like a woman (but not sounding too happy about it) yet I love that he was under all this makeup making mumbling sounds while the others were talking about him being a woman. That was hilarious.
Wow, quite a list and conglomeration of body damage. Funny there was anything there to autopsy.
DED doesn't seem like such a bad guy. A daydream of repentance.
Even tho this had a darker tone to it, it was still funny as heck.
Great job, Bill. I am totally enjoying these.
Love, Debi
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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A little more serious setting to the scenes with the murder of Pez acting like a woman (but not sounding too happy about it) yet I love that he was under all this makeup making mumbling sounds while the others were talking about him being a woman. That was hilarious.
Wow, quite a list and conglomeration of body damage. Funny there was anything there to autopsy.
DED doesn't seem like such a bad guy. A daydream of repentance.
Even tho this had a darker tone to it, it was still funny as heck.
Great job, Bill. I am totally enjoying these.
Love, Debi
Comment Written 05-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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Thank you, Debi, for giving this a look.
Comment from judiverse
That autopsy report sounds like it could have been written by Quincy, MD. Otherwise, I am really not following what's happening. I think Ned should have a larger role. This is really a zany one. judi
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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That autopsy report sounds like it could have been written by Quincy, MD. Otherwise, I am really not following what's happening. I think Ned should have a larger role. This is really a zany one. judi
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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I wanted the serious autopsy report followed by Fox's realization he;d been duped by his "brother".
Comment from lyenochka
Ah, if only Ned had won the election! When we reflect on some presidents of the past, they weren't too bright either but had good hearts. The ones currently running the country need a "daydream of repentance"!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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Ah, if only Ned had won the election! When we reflect on some presidents of the past, they weren't too bright either but had good hearts. The ones currently running the country need a "daydream of repentance"!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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Currently they have a "pay scheme of 'dementiance'".
Comment from jim vecchio
I have no idea what's going on here but I just went to Dave and Buster's ( a combination arcade/restaurant) and won a rubber duck. Now I can watch Svengoolie in style. Do you understand any of this?
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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I have no idea what's going on here but I just went to Dave and Buster's ( a combination arcade/restaurant) and won a rubber duck. Now I can watch Svengoolie in style. Do you understand any of this?
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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I know he throws rubber chickens. I guess a rubber duck would do.
Comment from nomi338
Whoa, that was a pretty graphic description of the injuries the victim suffered. It sounds almost like the writer of this script may have had some experience in causing such destruction to a possible victim of like violence. Hmmm.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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Whoa, that was a pretty graphic description of the injuries the victim suffered. It sounds almost like the writer of this script may have had some experience in causing such destruction to a possible victim of like violence. Hmmm.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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Let's put the brakes on that thinking. I have watched and listened to a myriad of Hollywood autopsy scenes to both capture this procedure but also leave no room for sympathy for the killer.
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What's the matter Bill, afraid of being accused of committing a crime? Hmmmm.
Comment from Tim Margetts
You've crafted something gloriously unhinged here, Bill, and I mean that in the best way.
The cast reads like a Shakespearean fever dream-with Ned, GED, Fox, Felix, and Pons all bouncing off one another in layered nonsense that still somehow pushes the narrative forward.
Lines like "Well, I seem to remember GED becoming a zombie last summer..." are delivered so deadpan that they land because of the chaos, not in spite of it.
Dr. Lois's autopsy monologue was such a sharp tonal shift-clinical, horrific, and long-but it somehow sits perfectly inside this absurd world. It makes the humour hit harder by contrast.
And I love that even amid the slapstick, you let the dialogue carry the characters-Fox's dry wit, Pez's baffled observations, Ned's country wisdom-it all works.
This is theatre of the delightfully deranged. And I'm completely in. Can't wait to see who knocks next... or rises from the slab.
Tim
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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You've crafted something gloriously unhinged here, Bill, and I mean that in the best way.
The cast reads like a Shakespearean fever dream-with Ned, GED, Fox, Felix, and Pons all bouncing off one another in layered nonsense that still somehow pushes the narrative forward.
Lines like "Well, I seem to remember GED becoming a zombie last summer..." are delivered so deadpan that they land because of the chaos, not in spite of it.
Dr. Lois's autopsy monologue was such a sharp tonal shift-clinical, horrific, and long-but it somehow sits perfectly inside this absurd world. It makes the humour hit harder by contrast.
And I love that even amid the slapstick, you let the dialogue carry the characters-Fox's dry wit, Pez's baffled observations, Ned's country wisdom-it all works.
This is theatre of the delightfully deranged. And I'm completely in. Can't wait to see who knocks next... or rises from the slab.
Tim
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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I am dumbfounded. This is the most exacting and specific review I have had in a long time. So glad to see what it was in the story that caused this detailed and positive review. Thank you, Tim.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed the dialogue in your scene! The way Lois is calmly performing the autopsy while everyone else is having their own side conversations is funny. I especially liked the back and forth between Pez, Fox, and Lois - it feels lighthearted. But there's also this tension that makes it fun to read. Can't wait to see where this goes next!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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I really enjoyed the dialogue in your scene! The way Lois is calmly performing the autopsy while everyone else is having their own side conversations is funny. I especially liked the back and forth between Pez, Fox, and Lois - it feels lighthearted. But there's also this tension that makes it fun to read. Can't wait to see where this goes next!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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Thank you, Michael. I hope it gets better.
Comment from patcelaw
This part six to your story is very well written and I very much it. It flows very well when it is read aloud. I wish you the very best with your writing. I also wish you a wonderful weekend. Patricia.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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This part six to your story is very well written and I very much it. It flows very well when it is read aloud. I wish you the very best with your writing. I also wish you a wonderful weekend. Patricia.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2025
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Thank you, Patricia.
