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A Progression Of Expression From Fiction To Faith

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Comment from sherrymccall
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Wow, what a beautiful, touching poem. Even though it is so short it holds so much information. I felt so much pain and sorrow from this grieving widow. You did a beautiful job in so few words. Sherry

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2008

reply by the author on 15-Mar-2008
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Earthwriter
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Very nice i feel this is a strong contender in this contest has some nice sentiment expressed smooth flow thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2008

reply by the author on 15-Mar-2008
    Thank you for your review. It is appriciated.
Comment from LovnPeace
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it is a sad thing for sure and you did a great job showing her sorrow. i can't help thinking how lucky they were though to have known it. Blessings. L&P*

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2008

reply by the author on 15-Mar-2008
    Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review.
Comment from RJ
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I believe that your poem fits the Tanka style. It is a short poem and your words were very moving. I would not change anything.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2008

reply by the author on 15-Mar-2008
    Peer review is such a valuable tool that we all benefit from on Fanstory.com. That is why I am here. I was fortunate with this piece, in that I only had to write it down as it presented itself. Thank you for the fine review and the time that you spent reading my work. I am appreciative and honored.

Comment from heyjude
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Blue-Stubby,
You did very well on the guidelines for this poem. A sad message. I know my great-grandparents lived together 70 years. When my grandfather was in the hospital my grandmother said if he died she didn't want to live. Their love journey now parted. Good luck on the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2008

reply by the author on 15-Mar-2008
    Peer review is such a valuable tool that we all benefit from on Fanstory.com. That is why I am here. I was fortunate with this piece, in that I only had to write it down as it presented itself. Thank you for the fine review and the time that you spent reading my work. I am appreciative and honored.

Comment from Badjuju
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Short but very much to the point. The words run smooth, a great little piece. I commend you for this work. Great job, I like it very much.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2008

reply by the author on 15-Mar-2008
    Thank you x100.
Comment from renda
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I am no critic, and really no very little about Tanka style. I will say this is beautiful. It portrays the passage of life very well
thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2008

reply by the author on 15-Mar-2008
    Thank you for your time and I appriciate your review.
Comment from Judian James
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This is a nice entry for the tanka poetry contest. It's quite sad and lonely. You manage to evoke much emotion in very few lines. Well done

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2008

reply by the author on 15-Mar-2008
    An honor to be reviewed by the unique and obviously talented Judian James. Love the bio and enjoy your work. Thank you for the positive review.
reply by Judian James on 15-Mar-2008
    Thanks so much!