Spit, Gum and Shoe Laces
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "The Dawn of Reckoning"A Progression Of Expression From Fiction To Faith
4 total reviews
Comment from lythampoet
Caught out and with a vengeance
This really relates to the mans conscience as he returns home
A deadly encounter
I wish you the very best in the contest
Max
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2008
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Caught out and with a vengeance
This really relates to the mans conscience as he returns home
A deadly encounter
I wish you the very best in the contest
Max
Comment Written 16-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2008
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Peer review is such a valuable tool that we all benefit from on Fanstory.com. That is why I am here. Thank you for the fine review and the time that you spent reading my work. I am appreciative and honored.
Comment from Judian James
This was very well written. The repetition confirmed the guilt.
The versing and rhythm of the piece were spot on and I loved the conclusion ... unexpected and good!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2008
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This was very well written. The repetition confirmed the guilt.
The versing and rhythm of the piece were spot on and I loved the conclusion ... unexpected and good!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2008
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Peer review is such a valuable tool that we all benefit from on Fanstory.com. That is why I am here. Thank you for the fine review and the time that you spent reading my work. I am appreciative and honored.
Comment from Freeflyer
Good reading. I just love it when the unfaithful are caught. You have the readers waiting to see if she is wondering or she knows. Great finish.
And so true to life.......
Freeflyer
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2008
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Good reading. I just love it when the unfaithful are caught. You have the readers waiting to see if she is wondering or she knows. Great finish.
And so true to life.......
Freeflyer
Comment Written 16-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2008
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Peer review is such a valuable tool that we all benefit from on Fanstory.com. That is why I am here. Thank you for the fine review and the time that you spent reading my work. I am appreciative and honored.
Comment from Sleep
Hi Blue,
This is perhaps the best piece I have read (so far) that has come from your portfolio.
The senses are completely activated by this work and your captivation of the moment is complete.
Brilliant, if I had 6 they would go to this piece!
N.B: just to keep the 'purists' at bay, I think you have a typo on the last line of each stanza on the word 'were' should it not read: 'WHERE' ? unless of course it is intentional, hell what do I know?
Sleep..
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2008
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Hi Blue,
This is perhaps the best piece I have read (so far) that has come from your portfolio.
The senses are completely activated by this work and your captivation of the moment is complete.
Brilliant, if I had 6 they would go to this piece!
N.B: just to keep the 'purists' at bay, I think you have a typo on the last line of each stanza on the word 'were' should it not read: 'WHERE' ? unless of course it is intentional, hell what do I know?
Sleep..
Comment Written 16-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2008
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thank you for the neeed edit... i missed it.
