This Time - That Time 3
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "The Beginnings Of A Plan"Third book in the time travel trilogy
29 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
That seems rhetorical
"see how she reacts to the idea of us driving her husband crazy...." I don't know even one woman who wouldn't respond favorable to that option...even if only for a teeny while...
I'm very eager to get on to the next chapter! The plot thickens!!! Come-uppance can't be far away NOW!!! xo
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
  |
That seems rhetorical
"see how she reacts to the idea of us driving her husband crazy...." I don't know even one woman who wouldn't respond favorable to that option...even if only for a teeny while...
I'm very eager to get on to the next chapter! The plot thickens!!! Come-uppance can't be far away NOW!!! xo
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
-
I can't believe you sat down and read all these chapters in one go!!! Thank you so much. I've had my sons and grandchildren around all day, so I couldn't get on here. You are amazing, and have totally made my day! :)) xxxxxxxxxxx
-
You made it so that I simply could NOT stop reading!! Thank goodness I'm on vacation, or I'd have to call my students and cancel lessons!! xo
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sandra, well this shall all be so easy...now listen up Glady's...I'm from another domination...and your as dead as a door nail...and we are going to drive Charles out of his mind...possibly to his death...and Mildred...you want to take a shot at what she's all about...she got more stitches in her head than a Christmas turkey....hmmmmmm...other than that...what did you do all day today ???...
I'm not sure trying to drive a man crazy who is already there will work...but give it the old college try...
yes I am behind once again...so I'm off to catch up my wonderful sweet friend...and this is a awesome chapter...one step closer...love you so much beautiful girl...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
|
Hi Sandra, well this shall all be so easy...now listen up Glady's...I'm from another domination...and your as dead as a door nail...and we are going to drive Charles out of his mind...possibly to his death...and Mildred...you want to take a shot at what she's all about...she got more stitches in her head than a Christmas turkey....hmmmmmm...other than that...what did you do all day today ???...
I'm not sure trying to drive a man crazy who is already there will work...but give it the old college try...
yes I am behind once again...so I'm off to catch up my wonderful sweet friend...and this is a awesome chapter...one step closer...love you so much beautiful girl...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 20-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
-
LOL. Linda, you are so funny. Just you wait and see what Veronica has in store for the nice gentleman, she is going to have such fun, but she needs Gladys on board first. I've been quite busy too, so never worry about getting behind.
Ian will be having surgery tomorrow. They are going to try doing something to his heart, but they have said if they find that it would create a bigger problem, they will stop immediately. I'm not sure what they are planning to do, I will be talking to Maggie tomorrow after the op. She is staying in the hospital with him. Nervous times. How is your friend doing, John, isn't it? I hope he is continuing to improve, and you, my friend, how are you doing? Stay strong, my dear friend. We all need to stay positive. Love you lots. xxxx Sandra xxx
Say hi to Noah for me! xxx
-
I will have a private prayer for him tonight...thank you for letting me know...he will be ok...John is back on his feet and doing well...has to just go slow a few more weeks...and I am doing well...one thing at a time...you stay strong sweet girl...they will both need you...my prayers are with you as well...let me know how everything goes...God Bless to you all...love you lots ...with big hugs all around...xxoo Linda...xxoo
Comment from wordsfromsue
Oh, it's going to be fun now!
The Toad needs sorting, and NOW!!
I think Gladys will be totally on board to help out any way she can. She might even wish she could've done this while she was alive!
Fun chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
 |
Oh, it's going to be fun now!
The Toad needs sorting, and NOW!!
I think Gladys will be totally on board to help out any way she can. She might even wish she could've done this while she was alive!
Fun chapter. :-)
Comment Written 20-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2019
-
Thank you so much, my dear friend, for the lovely 6 stars! :)) Yes, fun and games up ahead! xxx Big hugs, dear one. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
Oh, the plotting and planning, this is what V and M do best.
To spook him in public could work well in many ways.
Erratic behavior could cause some to doubt his stability or even sanity,
and bring into question his suitability to be the VA.
Ghosts (and Time Travelers) can be very scary, and very effective.
I think Gladys will relish this plan.
Now what would scare him the most? Perhaps, the truth. lol
I believe they are up to the task!
Excellent chapter.
The reader will be turning the pages, for now the fun begins.
Well done, my friend.
Looking forward to showtime.
Robert
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
|
Hello Sandra,
Oh, the plotting and planning, this is what V and M do best.
To spook him in public could work well in many ways.
Erratic behavior could cause some to doubt his stability or even sanity,
and bring into question his suitability to be the VA.
Ghosts (and Time Travelers) can be very scary, and very effective.
I think Gladys will relish this plan.
Now what would scare him the most? Perhaps, the truth. lol
I believe they are up to the task!
Excellent chapter.
The reader will be turning the pages, for now the fun begins.
Well done, my friend.
Looking forward to showtime.
Robert
Comment Written 19-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
-
Veronica has to tell Gladys she is from the future, so the next part will be fun. But you know our Veronica, she can be quite convincing when she has to be. :)) Thank you so much for another of your lovely reviews, Roberts, and for the shiny 6 stars. I'm glad this part came over well, the next few chapters are ones I'll enjoy writing. Thanks again, my friend. :))) Sandra xx
g
-
If one believes in ghosts, it's pretty easy to believe in time travelers.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A very good chapter, Sandra.
-Mildred still has her sense of humor,
and she also has a good idea about not
spooking the Vice Admiral at home.
-It's good that James checked Mildred's
wound because Ver. had a good idea about
it going back in the past-she
is quite perceptive, you might say!
-James not only had a good way to solve
the problem, but he added to the mayhem
they wanted to cause the V. Admiral-it's a
family affair, now, so he doesn't stand a chance!
-Good transition back to the past;
I guess the Powers are getting restless.
-Tommy shows his concern for Mildred, and Gladys
appears to be very interested in the plan at the end.
-I look forward to seeing that unfold.
-Well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
|
-A very good chapter, Sandra.
-Mildred still has her sense of humor,
and she also has a good idea about not
spooking the Vice Admiral at home.
-It's good that James checked Mildred's
wound because Ver. had a good idea about
it going back in the past-she
is quite perceptive, you might say!
-James not only had a good way to solve
the problem, but he added to the mayhem
they wanted to cause the V. Admiral-it's a
family affair, now, so he doesn't stand a chance!
-Good transition back to the past;
I guess the Powers are getting restless.
-Tommy shows his concern for Mildred, and Gladys
appears to be very interested in the plan at the end.
-I look forward to seeing that unfold.
-Well done, my friend.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
-
aw, thank you, Pam. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part. Now we are on the final lap, it will take some doing and a few bumps, but I'm going to enjoy tormenting the VA. :)) Thank you so very much for the six stars, my dear friend. Sending you an extra hug. :) Sandra xx
-
You are very welcome and deserving, Sandra. I am sure you are going to enjoy tormenting the V. Admiral.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Sandra,
Another good instalment. There's a nice balance in this part between the then and the now. I can't wait for the fun and games to begin the hauntings. lol
All the best
G
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
|
Hi Sandra,
Another good instalment. There's a nice balance in this part between the then and the now. I can't wait for the fun and games to begin the hauntings. lol
All the best
G
Comment Written 19-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
-
It will begin at the end of the next part, and then the fun really begins. :) Thanks, Gareth, I enjoy your reviews. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from shaffer40
This is a fascinating subject and sooooo well-written. I like the English accent, and the manner in which you depict it really works. Writing different dialects is not always easy.
I did have one question related to the UK language. Should "S'possin" have one "s"
to create a long "o", as in "S'posin'"?
One other thing regarding this sentence:
"A few hairgrips held her hair nicely in place"
Might you somehow not repeat "hair" in such close proximity, like maybe
"A few grips" or "A barrette" or "A clasp"?
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
|
This is a fascinating subject and sooooo well-written. I like the English accent, and the manner in which you depict it really works. Writing different dialects is not always easy.
I did have one question related to the UK language. Should "S'possin" have one "s"
to create a long "o", as in "S'posin'"?
One other thing regarding this sentence:
"A few hairgrips held her hair nicely in place"
Might you somehow not repeat "hair" in such close proximity, like maybe
"A few grips" or "A barrette" or "A clasp"?
Comment Written 19-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
-
Hi there, thank you so much for your really helpful review. I agree with both your comments and have removed an 's' and the 'hair' from 'hairgrip'. That was very kind of you to make those suggestions. I'm delighted you enjoyed this part, and hope you come back again. A big thank you and hug for the 6 stars. :)) Sandra xxx
-
It's a good'n, ole' chap. (Probably terrible UK language.)
-
LOL! Now, if you are going to use the term, 'Old chap' you have to pronounce it as if you have a plum in your mouth. It's frightfully upper-class, old chap, and not at all the type of words that our Mildred would say. lol. :))
-
I'll get a plum and practice. ha ha
Comment from sandragee
"You're an absolute genius," Veronica tells her friend. I agree. I like the way Mildred's mind works. She is smart and devious, two things that are needed when dealing with Gladys's toe-rag of a husband.
"Mildred! There you are, I've been worried," Tommy says as if it has only been minutes since he last saw her. I love that little time is lost as Veronica and Mildred travel back and forth between this time period.
Another great chapter. I look forward to what the three women are going to do to the admiral.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
|
"You're an absolute genius," Veronica tells her friend. I agree. I like the way Mildred's mind works. She is smart and devious, two things that are needed when dealing with Gladys's toe-rag of a husband.
"Mildred! There you are, I've been worried," Tommy says as if it has only been minutes since he last saw her. I love that little time is lost as Veronica and Mildred travel back and forth between this time period.
Another great chapter. I look forward to what the three women are going to do to the admiral.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2019
-
Thank you so much, Sandra, for this lovely review. Veronica and Gladys are going to have fun with the VA over the next few chapters, and I'm going to have a lot of fun writing them!! lol. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from damommy
I can't wait to see what they come up with. This should be a hoot! He deserves whatever they can do to him.
Sorry I'm so late reviewing. I just returned from a week in hospital.
Yvonne
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
|
I can't wait to see what they come up with. This should be a hoot! He deserves whatever they can do to him.
Sorry I'm so late reviewing. I just returned from a week in hospital.
Yvonne
Comment Written 18-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
-
Oh, Yvonne, what was wrong? I know you've had lots of problems with your shoulder and arm, was it that again? I hope you are alright now, my friend. You've heard the sad news about Brooke, have you? This year isn't going very well at the moment, Stay well, my friend.
You are a love coming to read this part, thank you so much, and a big, gentle hug for the 6 stars. Yes. there is going to be lots of fun over the next few chapters, and a few discoveries. Take care, my friend. sending lots of love. Sandra xxx
-
I was self-treating and ended up with severe infection from bronchitis. I'm home now, and will be on meds for a few days. I've learned my lesson. lol. Thank you for caring, Sandra. You're such a dear friend.
Comment from JDRBAR
Most of the nits below I'm sure have already been pointed out, but just in case...:)
The following morning, I walked into the kitchen, flopped down on the chair, and putting my elbows on the table, I lowered my head into my upturned palms and let out a noisy yawn.
AWKWARD Needs to be condensed with tenses matched. I would suggest "and with my elbows
I've put the bread in the toaster, it won't be long."
Two separate sentences
"our infamous friend." Attempting to smother another yawn while picking up my cup, wasn't easy. I took a tentative sip of the scalding liquid, and then pulling my dressing gown sleeves down to cover my hands, I wrapped them around the cup as I looked over at her.
Start new paragraph with "attempting to smother"
"I've been using me noddle, as well
NOODLE
"We'll start at his house, get him spooked up there so he knows what's happening when he's out."
Semi colon after house
Anymore chat was put on hold as Michael
ANY MORE
As James had already left for the hospital, it didn't take us long to get breakfast cooked (COMMA HERE) and, less time for the children to eat it
"Right, come on, (NO COMMA)you two, get your coats and satchels."
In fact, we's (SPACE)mortal enemies!"
"What's happening? Where are we going?" she asked him, but looking (LOOKED)at me over his shoulder.
Not only them, (BUT) all the staff as well. If it hadn't been for your clever idea to practice getting out in case of another bombing, every one of us would be dead now."
"How do we get outta here?" she said (ASKED), abruptly changing the subject.
Just as I'd suspected, Gladys was there sat (SITTING)opposite her husband in the sitting room.
I love their idea. Sounds like fun.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
|
Most of the nits below I'm sure have already been pointed out, but just in case...:)
The following morning, I walked into the kitchen, flopped down on the chair, and putting my elbows on the table, I lowered my head into my upturned palms and let out a noisy yawn.
AWKWARD Needs to be condensed with tenses matched. I would suggest "and with my elbows
I've put the bread in the toaster, it won't be long."
Two separate sentences
"our infamous friend." Attempting to smother another yawn while picking up my cup, wasn't easy. I took a tentative sip of the scalding liquid, and then pulling my dressing gown sleeves down to cover my hands, I wrapped them around the cup as I looked over at her.
Start new paragraph with "attempting to smother"
"I've been using me noddle, as well
NOODLE
"We'll start at his house, get him spooked up there so he knows what's happening when he's out."
Semi colon after house
Anymore chat was put on hold as Michael
ANY MORE
As James had already left for the hospital, it didn't take us long to get breakfast cooked (COMMA HERE) and, less time for the children to eat it
"Right, come on, (NO COMMA)you two, get your coats and satchels."
In fact, we's (SPACE)mortal enemies!"
"What's happening? Where are we going?" she asked him, but looking (LOOKED)at me over his shoulder.
Not only them, (BUT) all the staff as well. If it hadn't been for your clever idea to practice getting out in case of another bombing, every one of us would be dead now."
"How do we get outta here?" she said (ASKED), abruptly changing the subject.
Just as I'd suspected, Gladys was there sat (SITTING)opposite her husband in the sitting room.
I love their idea. Sounds like fun.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2019
-
Thank you so much, Diane, for another lovely review. Yes, some had been corrected already and others hadn't. Mildred saying,
Noddle, instead of Noodle, is just the way she puts it. She changes lot's of words, you just have to go with the flow with her. LOL. Veronica will be having loads of fun soon. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
