This Time - That Time 3
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Gladys Finds The Power"Third book in the time travel trilogy
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Comment from Rachelle Allen
Venomous Asp Pembrock! HA! That's really funny! And all the power they now hold over this mere (obnoxious, arrogant) mortal! I am just LOVING this!! xo
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Venomous Asp Pembrock! HA! That's really funny! And all the power they now hold over this mere (obnoxious, arrogant) mortal! I am just LOVING this!! xo
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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I thought that name was a good one, my hubby came up with it. lol. Bless him. He is waiting to read the book when it's published, so he only gets smidgeons of it until then. :)) xxxxx
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He's a keeper, that husband of yours! xo
Comment from wordsfromsue
The toad made it to the story!! Yay.
He is SUCH a creep!
I certainly hope Veronica and Gladys can sort him out!
One small correction:
When he opened it out ('out' sounds odd) and laid it across the desk, I was at his side in an instant.Â
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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The toad made it to the story!! Yay.
He is SUCH a creep!
I certainly hope Veronica and Gladys can sort him out!
One small correction:
When he opened it out ('out' sounds odd) and laid it across the desk, I was at his side in an instant.Â
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Thank you so very much for the 6 stars, Sue, and for picking up that word. I asked Graham about it, and he said, 'It wouldn't be a map it would be a chart! Grrrr. And, it would be rolled out with paperweights placed in the corners to stop it rolling up again! So, I'll change it in my MS Word doc.
Yes, I got your toad in, lol, and yes, Veronica, Mildred and Gladys will be making plans soon. Nuff said!! lol. Thanks, my friend. Big hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-You might say that Gladys is flying
high in this chapter, Sandra.
-I liked the development of events in this chapter.
-I also liked some of the descriptions of
the V. Admiral-he deserved all the derogatory ones!
-Ver. and Gladys do a good job with the
map; hopefully, it isn't much use to him anymore.
-I also liked how you inserted the
observation of how he had miscalculated
the number of German ships.
-As we approach the end of the chapter,
he has to get his digs in about Gladys.
-I agree with Ver. that is was probably
bravado on his part.
-It is unfortunate that Gladys
is still affected by his malicious comments
about her, but I think that is probably close
to the reality of someone who has been
in her situation, also unfortunate.
-I like how Ver. does her best to bolster the
confidence of Gladys and their mission;
all is not lost; in fact, I think it is just beginning,
especially when they will meet up
with Mildred; she will be really surprised.
-I can hear her now, "Oh, Lordy,
my word, not you, too, Gladys?!"
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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-You might say that Gladys is flying
high in this chapter, Sandra.
-I liked the development of events in this chapter.
-I also liked some of the descriptions of
the V. Admiral-he deserved all the derogatory ones!
-Ver. and Gladys do a good job with the
map; hopefully, it isn't much use to him anymore.
-I also liked how you inserted the
observation of how he had miscalculated
the number of German ships.
-As we approach the end of the chapter,
he has to get his digs in about Gladys.
-I agree with Ver. that is was probably
bravado on his part.
-It is unfortunate that Gladys
is still affected by his malicious comments
about her, but I think that is probably close
to the reality of someone who has been
in her situation, also unfortunate.
-I like how Ver. does her best to bolster the
confidence of Gladys and their mission;
all is not lost; in fact, I think it is just beginning,
especially when they will meet up
with Mildred; she will be really surprised.
-I can hear her now, "Oh, Lordy,
my word, not you, too, Gladys?!"
Comment Written 29-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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LOL, Mildred is going to surprise them alright, just wait and see. Thank you so much for the lovely 6 stars and this really lovely review, Pam. The next couple of chapters will have some planning and a few other things... I'm hoping to post later tomorrow, or at the latest, on Monday. I'm so pleased you are liking the way it's going. Thanks, my friend. Big hugs. Sandra xxx
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I am betting on it🙂 You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and the review, Sandra. It was a good chapter with a lot of substance.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
Another intriguing chapter in the novel.
It's good that V A wasn't an easy push over,
it makes it all the more fun to meet the challenge.
I think making him act strangely in front of others
could result in his being demoted as unreliable.
After all, he can't exactly tell the Admiral he's being plagued by a ghost
or maybe he'll let it slip in a fit of rage.
But we'll see what the devious mind of STM cooks up.
I think Gladys will rise to the occasion and Mildred is part Mitchell.
Wonderful scene with excellent dialogue.
Well done, my friend
Robert
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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Hello Sandra,
Another intriguing chapter in the novel.
It's good that V A wasn't an easy push over,
it makes it all the more fun to meet the challenge.
I think making him act strangely in front of others
could result in his being demoted as unreliable.
After all, he can't exactly tell the Admiral he's being plagued by a ghost
or maybe he'll let it slip in a fit of rage.
But we'll see what the devious mind of STM cooks up.
I think Gladys will rise to the occasion and Mildred is part Mitchell.
Wonderful scene with excellent dialogue.
Well done, my friend
Robert
Comment Written 29-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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I think you'll enjoy what Veronica and Gladys will be getting up to, and the help that Mildred will be giving in another way. :)) Thank you so much for the lovely 6 stars, Robert, and this fabulous review. I really appreciate them both. Are you posting this week? Big hugs, my friend. Sandra xx
Comment from Rhonda Skinner
Another fun chapter. I'm sure the ladies will get the better of him yet.
I noticed a couple comma splices, but they seem so common in everyone's writing I'm beginning to wonder if they've become accepted now. Also, the study.â?? a little gremlin crept in
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2019
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Another fun chapter. I'm sure the ladies will get the better of him yet.
I noticed a couple comma splices, but they seem so common in everyone's writing I'm beginning to wonder if they've become accepted now. Also, the study.â?? a little gremlin crept in
Comment Written 29-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2019
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Thank you so very much for telling me about the gremlin, Rhonda, I don't know when that jumped in! I've stamped on him now and he's disappeared. :)) Thank you also for the lovely review, my friend. I'm delighted you are still enjoying this story. Big hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from alexisleech
What fun! I suppose it would be too easy if the Vice Admiral was spooked by their first attempt. At least it gives us the chance to enjoy them having another attempt at turning his life upside down - something you write about so well. It's as though you're in the room with Veronica when she starts doing 'spooky' things. Don't keep us waiting too long!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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What fun! I suppose it would be too easy if the Vice Admiral was spooked by their first attempt. At least it gives us the chance to enjoy them having another attempt at turning his life upside down - something you write about so well. It's as though you're in the room with Veronica when she starts doing 'spooky' things. Don't keep us waiting too long!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 28-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Thank you so very much, Alexis, for all the pretty stars, and lovely review. There will be a bit more going's on coming up! (that reads so weird! LOL) Thanks again, my friend. Big hugs. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Sandra!
Oh! I enjoyed this chapter immensely! "Venomous Asp Pembrock!" What a name! And what an arrogant, horrible individual. Loved this expression regarding Pembrock: "I'm sure he'd put the wind up the devil!" That's a new one for me!
How I would love to be with these characters - messing up everything in this man's life, but not being seen! Oh! I would have a grand time!
Thank you so much for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Hello Sandra!
Oh! I enjoyed this chapter immensely! "Venomous Asp Pembrock!" What a name! And what an arrogant, horrible individual. Loved this expression regarding Pembrock: "I'm sure he'd put the wind up the devil!" That's a new one for me!
How I would love to be with these characters - messing up everything in this man's life, but not being seen! Oh! I would have a grand time!
Thank you so much for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 28-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much for the six stars, Diane, that is so kind of you. That expression is quite common here. To 'put the wind up someone', is to scare them, make them nervous. Which I'm sure the 'Venomous Asp' would easily do to the devil. lol. Thank you for your lovely review, my friend, I'm so pleased you are enjoying my story. :)) Big hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from JDRBAR
This was hysterical! LOL Oh, how I'd love to be a ghost sometimes. Gladys reacted like a young child with a new found toy. I loved every word, even if they didn't really make much progress with the Asp.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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This was hysterical! LOL Oh, how I'd love to be a ghost sometimes. Gladys reacted like a young child with a new found toy. I loved every word, even if they didn't really make much progress with the Asp.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Thank you so very much for the lovely 6 stars, Diane! I plan on being a ghost and coming back to do spooky things to the nasties in this world! lol. They aren't giving up, so more spooky things to come. Big hugs, dear friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from WryWriter
I say: next time splash the ink in his face where he has to wear it! LOL! This was a fun chapter. I enjoyed it. Some suggestions:
determined Gladys I'd first (gotten) to know when she marched on Downing Street with the other suffragettes, banner in hand, and demanding her rights.
After that, we didn't have to wait (omit for) long before he stopped again. Opening a drawer beneath the desk, he took out a piece of blotting paper, placed it over the wet ink to mop up the surplus, (then closed the book and moved it to one side.)
Anticipation stirred my senses as I leaned closer(;)could this be what I'm after?
As fast as a whippet, Gladys had moved over to stand on his other side. "Is this the map you wanted to see?" (she asked, not waiting for a reply.) Instead, she pointed to an area in the North Sea. "What do you think (these) symbols mean?"
"Going by their positions, I think the little triangles are our ships, and the crosses are the Germans." I studied the map for a moment. (Reverse these two sentences)
"If I'm right about what each of the(se) markings represent, he has grossly miscalculated the number of German ships that(,) I know for certain(,) will be there. And (that's) why we will lose the war." (WHY?) (Too many or too few German ships?)
"Oh, look at his face!" Gladys squealed(omit ,) her delight(.) (omit bursting through.) "If we keep this up, we WILL drive him to apoplexy." [[[Then, without warning, she slapped the inkpot from my hand. Dark liquid exploded onto the map and flowed over the desk. The Vice Admiral jumped to his feet, howling with anger. Gladys and I stared in stunned silence, then looked at each other before bursting into fits of laughter.]]]
"You did it(!) (Y)ou actually touched the inkpot and sent it flying!"
"I did ... didn't I? That'll teach the venomous asp!" (Omit Then) [[[Leaping into the air, she did a hilarious jig. "Oh, this is such fun!" Gladys raced around the study, knocking things onto the floor.]]]
I looked at Charles. His expression was priceless. [[[While he gazed in disbelief at the huge stain on the map, another thought entered my scheming mind. I picked up his pen and dipped the nib in the spilt ink, then wrote in big letters: I'M WATCHING YOU! - G.]]]
Gladys (came) over to see what I was doing, then grinned [[[a devilish grin. As we gauge(d) his response to my message, we were both taken aback to see his lips curve into a twisted smile.]]]
("Just as I thought,") he drawled(, or omit) lazily. "So, you thought a bit of haunting would scare me, huh?
(A) young girl, whom I hadn't seen before, came into the room and (then) stopped dead in her tracks. Her eyes took in the mess, but she said nothing.
"Clea(n) this up(;) and be quick about it."
"Oh, my word! I (hadn't expect(ed) him to take it like that(, said Gladys.)
I guess I (should've) known (that) he'd be like this(;) he's such an arrogant, nauseating man(.) I'm sure he'd put the wind up the devil!"
It shook me for a moment, too. But I was sure this was all bravado. (His act wasn't going to deter me!)
"He's right about one thing though,(;) I am stupid!" (said) Gladys (omit continued). "I shouldn't have messed up this room. It didn't hurt him--or scare him(.") (omit come to that.)
I watched the young maid pick up all the things that Gladys had knocked over(, then) (omit and) smiled. "Don't be too hard on yourself. At least(,) now(,) he knows you're here(.) (T)hat's the main thing. We've made a statement(;) and whether (or not he's scared,) this (is) just the beginning.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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I say: next time splash the ink in his face where he has to wear it! LOL! This was a fun chapter. I enjoyed it. Some suggestions:
determined Gladys I'd first (gotten) to know when she marched on Downing Street with the other suffragettes, banner in hand, and demanding her rights.
After that, we didn't have to wait (omit for) long before he stopped again. Opening a drawer beneath the desk, he took out a piece of blotting paper, placed it over the wet ink to mop up the surplus, (then closed the book and moved it to one side.)
Anticipation stirred my senses as I leaned closer(;)could this be what I'm after?
As fast as a whippet, Gladys had moved over to stand on his other side. "Is this the map you wanted to see?" (she asked, not waiting for a reply.) Instead, she pointed to an area in the North Sea. "What do you think (these) symbols mean?"
"Going by their positions, I think the little triangles are our ships, and the crosses are the Germans." I studied the map for a moment. (Reverse these two sentences)
"If I'm right about what each of the(se) markings represent, he has grossly miscalculated the number of German ships that(,) I know for certain(,) will be there. And (that's) why we will lose the war." (WHY?) (Too many or too few German ships?)
"Oh, look at his face!" Gladys squealed(omit ,) her delight(.) (omit bursting through.) "If we keep this up, we WILL drive him to apoplexy." [[[Then, without warning, she slapped the inkpot from my hand. Dark liquid exploded onto the map and flowed over the desk. The Vice Admiral jumped to his feet, howling with anger. Gladys and I stared in stunned silence, then looked at each other before bursting into fits of laughter.]]]
"You did it(!) (Y)ou actually touched the inkpot and sent it flying!"
"I did ... didn't I? That'll teach the venomous asp!" (Omit Then) [[[Leaping into the air, she did a hilarious jig. "Oh, this is such fun!" Gladys raced around the study, knocking things onto the floor.]]]
I looked at Charles. His expression was priceless. [[[While he gazed in disbelief at the huge stain on the map, another thought entered my scheming mind. I picked up his pen and dipped the nib in the spilt ink, then wrote in big letters: I'M WATCHING YOU! - G.]]]
Gladys (came) over to see what I was doing, then grinned [[[a devilish grin. As we gauge(d) his response to my message, we were both taken aback to see his lips curve into a twisted smile.]]]
("Just as I thought,") he drawled(, or omit) lazily. "So, you thought a bit of haunting would scare me, huh?
(A) young girl, whom I hadn't seen before, came into the room and (then) stopped dead in her tracks. Her eyes took in the mess, but she said nothing.
"Clea(n) this up(;) and be quick about it."
"Oh, my word! I (hadn't expect(ed) him to take it like that(, said Gladys.)
I guess I (should've) known (that) he'd be like this(;) he's such an arrogant, nauseating man(.) I'm sure he'd put the wind up the devil!"
It shook me for a moment, too. But I was sure this was all bravado. (His act wasn't going to deter me!)
"He's right about one thing though,(;) I am stupid!" (said) Gladys (omit continued). "I shouldn't have messed up this room. It didn't hurt him--or scare him(.") (omit come to that.)
I watched the young maid pick up all the things that Gladys had knocked over(, then) (omit and) smiled. "Don't be too hard on yourself. At least(,) now(,) he knows you're here(.) (T)hat's the main thing. We've made a statement(;) and whether (or not he's scared,) this (is) just the beginning.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much for this detailed review, my friend. I have copied and pasted to my MS Word and will go through your suggestions one by one. I've had American reviewers pick me up on 'Got - Gotten, before, but Gotten isn't a word in UK English, it's strictly American English. Other than that, I'll do some sorting!
I'm so pleased you still enjoy the story, thank you again! :) Sandra xx
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Thank you for letting me know about "gotten". I didn't know that. Must have started out American slang and from so much use made it into the dictionary. ?? I found the differences in English so fascinating. : )
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sandra, I told you...this guy wasn't going to scare that easy...
ð?¤ª...he's deranged...just down right mean....maybe they should threaten him....there has to be something he doesn't want others to know....he doesn't wear underwear....ð???...there has to be something....think Gladys....let's see what Mildred has to say...very well written my wonderful sweet friend...am loving your story told....an awesome chapter you....love you so many....Linda xxoo
How is Ian doing?...
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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Hi Sandra, I told you...this guy wasn't going to scare that easy...
ð?¤ª...he's deranged...just down right mean....maybe they should threaten him....there has to be something he doesn't want others to know....he doesn't wear underwear....ð???...there has to be something....think Gladys....let's see what Mildred has to say...very well written my wonderful sweet friend...am loving your story told....an awesome chapter you....love you so many....Linda xxoo
How is Ian doing?...
Comment Written 27-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2019
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He's a bit of a pain, isn't he? lol. Actually, he has taken to wearing Gladys's underwear!! LOL! You are so naughty, Linda. Mildred is back in the next part, so we will learn what she's been doing. Thank you, dear friend, for this lovely, very funny review. Big hugs, and lots of love. Sandra.
Ian is behaving himself at the moment, lol. He has to go for more blood tests this afternoon, (I don't know how much more he can give, he'll run out soon!) He's fine, he is spending some time with his daughter during the day, as he says it gets so boring just sitting around at home. He has is little mobility scooter that he uses, he's not allowed to drive on the road, but there are bicycle paths everywhere that he can use. (thank goodness) xxxx :))
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I am just so glad Ian is in motion...that is wonderful...tell him to take up writing poetry...say hi for me...xxoo love
I had a feeling Ole Charles there was on the iffy side...may explain bumping off his wife...he was jealous of her wardrobe hummmm...ok!!!! I will be looking for Mildred's (AKA Sandra) return...bigger hugs back at you...bunches of love...xxoo
