I Danced for the Throne
Fear no more11 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
"I Dance for you he Throne"
Is a "Dear God Writing Prompt Entry"
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
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Good luck with this and have a great day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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"I Dance for you he Throne"
Is a "Dear God Writing Prompt Entry"
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
...
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
...
Good luck with this and have a great day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 30-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from the13thpoet
A wonderful Wednesday to you Maria. Thank you for sharing your story, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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A wonderful Wednesday to you Maria. Thank you for sharing your story, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your encouragement and comments.
Comment from BigPoppaJrock
Very strong and personal story/letter. Very engaging with a great flow from start to finish. I enjoyed the over emphasis on how you worried and the calmness that I the reader felt when you made eye contest and how it put you to ease. Great story thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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Very strong and personal story/letter. Very engaging with a great flow from start to finish. I enjoyed the over emphasis on how you worried and the calmness that I the reader felt when you made eye contest and how it put you to ease. Great story thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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Thank you, I appreciate your comments and review.
Comment from poetwatch
There is nothing to fear, for God is with you. I like your story and I would be happy to dance for God. Probably stumble on my feet, but no problem He would give me a hand and I would stand. :) This is a very good entry for the Dear God contest.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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There is nothing to fear, for God is with you. I like your story and I would be happy to dance for God. Probably stumble on my feet, but no problem He would give me a hand and I would stand. :) This is a very good entry for the Dear God contest.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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Thank you, yes, there is nothing to fear, but at the time, I forget it.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Dear God writing prompt.
Your story of your fear of messing up your dance and then overcoming it with the lord's help is clear.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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I think this is a good entry for the Dear God writing prompt.
Your story of your fear of messing up your dance and then overcoming it with the lord's help is clear.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 29-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your comments and review.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is beautiful and I really like it. The heart that wants to do things the very best for Him is well pleasing in His sight. I love everything about this inspirational, heartfelt, and well written offering. Great job and well done!
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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This is beautiful and I really like it. The heart that wants to do things the very best for Him is well pleasing in His sight. I love everything about this inspirational, heartfelt, and well written offering. Great job and well done!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2019
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I am so glad you like it. I had a great time writing it.
Comment from Eve Vasa
Hello, a good poem born of the prompt. I liked the personal nature of the work and it was spiritually uplifting and reminded me of David, how he danced naked before the Lord.
I do think you overuse the perpendicular pronoun, "I" "I" "I" - it got a little much and I would edit some of them out of the narrative. And if you edit, get back to me if you are chasing those little FS stars and I will review it again.
Apart from that, this was a good read I would recommend to other readers for review, cheers, Eve.
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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2019
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Hello, a good poem born of the prompt. I liked the personal nature of the work and it was spiritually uplifting and reminded me of David, how he danced naked before the Lord.
I do think you overuse the perpendicular pronoun, "I" "I" "I" - it got a little much and I would edit some of them out of the narrative. And if you edit, get back to me if you are chasing those little FS stars and I will review it again.
Apart from that, this was a good read I would recommend to other readers for review, cheers, Eve.
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Comment Written 28-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2019
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That was my point in the poem, I thought it was all about "I" and me and myself when in reality it's about Him. The "I" in the poem has a deeper meaning. Thank you for your review, and suggestions, but I will keep it as is.
Comment from tim dodd
sounds beautiful. I believe
you did dance before him
and Im sure he would dance
for you too if you asked him too
he has for me. Once in a prayer
group we did an exercise and we all
closed our eyes and someone played
the guitar and we sang an upbeat song
then a strange thing happened one person
exclaimed I see a little man dancing and someone
else said so do I. I had been watching the little
man dance too but I thought it was in my head
till everyone else in the circle said the saw the same thing
yes God danced for me.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2019
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sounds beautiful. I believe
you did dance before him
and Im sure he would dance
for you too if you asked him too
he has for me. Once in a prayer
group we did an exercise and we all
closed our eyes and someone played
the guitar and we sang an upbeat song
then a strange thing happened one person
exclaimed I see a little man dancing and someone
else said so do I. I had been watching the little
man dance too but I thought it was in my head
till everyone else in the circle said the saw the same thing
yes God danced for me.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2019
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You are wonderful. I love that you shared a similar experience a mine and you were so crafty about it.
Comment from 24chas
This was a good read that I enjoyed. I liked the way your faith was rewarded and you overcame your fear and the end reminded me of David dancing for his king as well. Nice job.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2019
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This was a good read that I enjoyed. I liked the way your faith was rewarded and you overcame your fear and the end reminded me of David dancing for his king as well. Nice job.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your review and encouragement.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
What a well written and inspiring story, my friend. Congrats on overcoming your fear. It should be much easier the next time for you you perform for an audience~Debbie
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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What a well written and inspiring story, my friend. Congrats on overcoming your fear. It should be much easier the next time for you you perform for an audience~Debbie
Comment Written 27-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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Thank you, yes, I think it will be easier. Thank you for your kind words.
