Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "College Life"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
10 total reviews
Comment from alexisleech
Another lovely chapter, with an exciting ending! I found a few nits, which I've listed below in the hope that it helps with your final edit.
Alexis xxx
I thought Johnny was cute, so he became a (a) school week diversion.
summer.(space)Just in (cast) [case] thing[s] went South with you [,and] I needed a backup plan.
We wouldn't even [be able] to get a license by then, but wasn't about to ruin this by saying no.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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Another lovely chapter, with an exciting ending! I found a few nits, which I've listed below in the hope that it helps with your final edit.
Alexis xxx
I thought Johnny was cute, so he became a (a) school week diversion.
summer.(space)Just in (cast) [case] thing[s] went South with you [,and] I needed a backup plan.
We wouldn't even [be able] to get a license by then, but wasn't about to ruin this by saying no.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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I was afraid some these weren't edited as much as they should have been. I really appreciate you pointing out the nits.
Thank you again for another great review.
Beth
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
wow! You were going to be a new bride. Now I must have to read if it happened right away or did it happen later. I like when the story gets exciting....you lived in Mississippi at the time.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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wow! You were going to be a new bride. Now I must have to read if it happened right away or did it happen later. I like when the story gets exciting....you lived in Mississippi at the time.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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It happened soon than I was expecting because I hadn't thought I wanted to get married at all. I guess it was meant to be.
Beth
Comment from Spitfire
There were three times more guys than there were girls, so the field was ripe for picking.--Wow! Even insecure me might have snagged a date.
"but I finally agreed to go out with him after school was out for the summer.Just in cast thing went South with you I needed a backup plan."--I'm totally in agreement with this.
Interesting how you finally realized you were in love with this man. I too proposed to my husband because I had to know whether to dump him or not.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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There were three times more guys than there were girls, so the field was ripe for picking.--Wow! Even insecure me might have snagged a date.
"but I finally agreed to go out with him after school was out for the summer.Just in cast thing went South with you I needed a backup plan."--I'm totally in agreement with this.
Interesting how you finally realized you were in love with this man. I too proposed to my husband because I had to know whether to dump him or not.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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You're funny. A gal after my own heart Thanks again for reading and commenting.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
-"it's students" should be its students
-The last sentence of paragraph explains why they made the decision for the college they did.
-"three time more guys" should be three times more guys
-"Sometime we'd go to a local café" should be Sometimes we'd go to a local café
-"wrote wrote back" should be wrote back
My reviews are mere suggestions. Feel free to use anything that provides assistance and/or chuck the whole shebang.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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-"it's students" should be its students
-The last sentence of paragraph explains why they made the decision for the college they did.
-"three time more guys" should be three times more guys
-"Sometime we'd go to a local café" should be Sometimes we'd go to a local café
-"wrote wrote back" should be wrote back
My reviews are mere suggestions. Feel free to use anything that provides assistance and/or chuck the whole shebang.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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Thank you for reading and catching these errors. Much appreciated.
Comment from Sankey
This was another excellent read. There re a few spags this time around ok. there were three time(s) more guys
mine there were[r] many dark secluded spots
Rhomas was looking for a girlfriend[s],
a [a] school week diversion.
these guys ma[k](d)e
you didn't have second thought(s)
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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This was another excellent read. There re a few spags this time around ok. there were three time(s) more guys
mine there were[r] many dark secluded spots
Rhomas was looking for a girlfriend[s],
a [a] school week diversion.
these guys ma[k](d)e
you didn't have second thought(s)
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Wow! Thanks for the six stars and the comments and corrections. I don't if I'm allowed to nominate you again for editing but you are great one.
Comment from Sasha
This is another well written chapter in your book 'Remembering Yesterday'. Excellent description of life in an era without internet. I am enjoying this story very much and as always, anxiously look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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This is another well written chapter in your book 'Remembering Yesterday'. Excellent description of life in an era without internet. I am enjoying this story very much and as always, anxiously look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Thank you Sasha. I'm so glad you are enjoying my story. I hope I don't disappoint you.
Beth
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I've been reading it from the start and no disappointments so far.
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You're so nice.
Smiles,
Beth
Comment from nancy_e_davis
You do an excellent job remembering you are talking to your husband in a letter. I am enjoying this because it is about the world I lived in at the time. The story is one I can certainly relate too. We didn't have a TV until I finished High School. Dad bought it in hopes I would spend my evenings at home instead of dating. LOL Well done Beth.
Nancy:)
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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You do an excellent job remembering you are talking to your husband in a letter. I am enjoying this because it is about the world I lived in at the time. The story is one I can certainly relate too. We didn't have a TV until I finished High School. Dad bought it in hopes I would spend my evenings at home instead of dating. LOL Well done Beth.
Nancy:)
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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I tired to reply earlier but my computer quit so I don't know if you received my thanks. I do enjoy your comments. Thank you so much. Beth
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once again, I enjoyed reading and really like the story.
The next morning you came over and drove me to the bus station. (An editor told me it was 'The following morning'. He said it had to do with definition.)
Between your house and mine, there was no end of dark secluded spots to stop and get in a little private time.together. (extra period)
I thought the Johnny was cute, so he became a a school week diversion. (Not sure why 'the' is before Johnny.)
but I finally agreed to go out with him after school was out for the summer.Just in cast thing went ( space needed after the period and before 'Just'.)
That day I'd walked back from college with three guy friends who ironically were only platonic friends.. & Back then, when there was a lack of girls friends,these guys make great substitutes..At any rate, (One period is enough and the second one space needed before 'At'.)
I wrote you a letter and told you we had to talk and could you please come drive home on Wednesday night and see me. (omit the 'come' or the 'drive')
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Once again, I enjoyed reading and really like the story.
The next morning you came over and drove me to the bus station. (An editor told me it was 'The following morning'. He said it had to do with definition.)
Between your house and mine, there was no end of dark secluded spots to stop and get in a little private time.together. (extra period)
I thought the Johnny was cute, so he became a a school week diversion. (Not sure why 'the' is before Johnny.)
but I finally agreed to go out with him after school was out for the summer.Just in cast thing went ( space needed after the period and before 'Just'.)
That day I'd walked back from college with three guy friends who ironically were only platonic friends.. & Back then, when there was a lack of girls friends,these guys make great substitutes..At any rate, (One period is enough and the second one space needed before 'At'.)
I wrote you a letter and told you we had to talk and could you please come drive home on Wednesday night and see me. (omit the 'come' or the 'drive')
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and for seeing the things i need to fix. I think I got them all. Much appreciated. You're a good editor.
Comment from RoseFlower179
Very great and realistic. It tells a true story and I can feel the emotions from it. Life was very different back then because it didn't have technology to distract people from being completely socialized.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Very great and realistic. It tells a true story and I can feel the emotions from it. Life was very different back then because it didn't have technology to distract people from being completely socialized.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. You are right all this technology has played a big rolling in changing the times and not always for the best.
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
I really enjoyed reading your story..it is very beautifully written and one can relate to it instantly. I'm hoping you'll get the better reward for it. Wishing you lots of luck!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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I really enjoyed reading your story..it is very beautifully written and one can relate to it instantly. I'm hoping you'll get the better reward for it. Wishing you lots of luck!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the great comments. You look young in your picture. Since this is memories from another time, I'm very pleased that younger people can relate.
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I am 25! And well your story was really interesting :-)
