Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Up in the Air"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
21 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Wow! Did you ever get a chance to go out West? As I am reading some of your history, I'm thinking about your life as an artist. When did you get into writing? When you considered being a proofreader?
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2020
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Wow! Did you ever get a chance to go out West? As I am reading some of your history, I'm thinking about your life as an artist. When did you get into writing? When you considered being a proofreader?
Comment Written 30-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2020
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I always enjoyed writing and I learned I could express myself better on paper that in person sometimes. I never occurred to me to go that route in college but I was an avid reader from the time I learned to read.
Beth
Comment from estory
I think it's an interesting idea and it comes off as a kind of diary experience. What made it stand out was the moments you chose to illustrate. You have that tension between you and the woman who looks after the kids. you have that day when your husband reveals this secret love of flying, and you watch him nervously taking off and landing in triumph. There's a sense of standing outside of a moment that only he can experience completely. So we get that part of him that is separate from you. There's also that sense that you were on your own dealing with the child care. No mention of your husband there. So there's this sense of a man not completely understand or totally involved with your life and that's what makes the story complicated and interesting. estory
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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I think it's an interesting idea and it comes off as a kind of diary experience. What made it stand out was the moments you chose to illustrate. You have that tension between you and the woman who looks after the kids. you have that day when your husband reveals this secret love of flying, and you watch him nervously taking off and landing in triumph. There's a sense of standing outside of a moment that only he can experience completely. So we get that part of him that is separate from you. There's also that sense that you were on your own dealing with the child care. No mention of your husband there. So there's this sense of a man not completely understand or totally involved with your life and that's what makes the story complicated and interesting. estory
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Thank you for the review and comments. I think you analysis of what this story is about is right on target. I hope your continue to read.
Beth
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Your family had a very rich, full and busy life! Even while raising a young family, you and your husband both had your individual interests and coordinated your respective roles quite well. I'm sure his piloting activities were quite a shock, especially when they cut a hole out of your favorite shirt that he wore!
Some suggested revisions:
On a different topic, I missed not having a piano in our home.
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On a different topic, I missed having a piano in our home.
I had taken lessons off and on for years in school,
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I had taken lessons on and off for years in school,
The idea of having a child start to school was exciting.
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The idea of having a child start school was exciting.
I'm always wanting to go out to the airport and watch the planes take off and land?," you asked.
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I'm always wanting to go out to the airport and watch the planes take off and land?" you asked.
Get the kids ready and let's go." You told me.
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Get the kids ready and let's go," you told me.
Why did you wear that one?
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Why did you wear that one?"
You should have gone into the air force instead of the army.
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You should have gone into the Air Force instead of the Army.
I let the the mom who had been taking the kids when she didn't come, take care of Don and Christi every week day.
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I let the mom who had been taking the kids when she didn't come, take care of Don and Christi every weekday.
Carol was eager to learn and enjoyed (close up extra space before "enjoyed")
The teachers had displayed the students work around the room.
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The teachers had displayed the students' work around the room.
two sheets of 4 X 8 ft, plywood panels.
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two sheets of 4' x 8' plywood panels.
duplicating the Christmas Card onto a 4 X 8 panel
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duplicating the Christmas Card onto a 4' x 8' panel
This truck came with cattle enclosure,
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This truck came with a cattle enclosure,
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You were a very busy young wife and mother. You have many unique memories to look back upon, and share.
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Your family had a very rich, full and busy life! Even while raising a young family, you and your husband both had your individual interests and coordinated your respective roles quite well. I'm sure his piloting activities were quite a shock, especially when they cut a hole out of your favorite shirt that he wore!
Some suggested revisions:
On a different topic, I missed not having a piano in our home.
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On a different topic, I missed having a piano in our home.
I had taken lessons off and on for years in school,
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I had taken lessons on and off for years in school,
The idea of having a child start to school was exciting.
-->
The idea of having a child start school was exciting.
I'm always wanting to go out to the airport and watch the planes take off and land?," you asked.
-->
I'm always wanting to go out to the airport and watch the planes take off and land?" you asked.
Get the kids ready and let's go." You told me.
-->
Get the kids ready and let's go," you told me.
Why did you wear that one?
-->
Why did you wear that one?"
You should have gone into the air force instead of the army.
-->
You should have gone into the Air Force instead of the Army.
I let the the mom who had been taking the kids when she didn't come, take care of Don and Christi every week day.
-->
I let the mom who had been taking the kids when she didn't come, take care of Don and Christi every weekday.
Carol was eager to learn and enjoyed (close up extra space before "enjoyed")
The teachers had displayed the students work around the room.
-->
The teachers had displayed the students' work around the room.
two sheets of 4 X 8 ft, plywood panels.
-->
two sheets of 4' x 8' plywood panels.
duplicating the Christmas Card onto a 4 X 8 panel
-->
duplicating the Christmas Card onto a 4' x 8' panel
This truck came with cattle enclosure,
-->
This truck came with a cattle enclosure,
***
You were a very busy young wife and mother. You have many unique memories to look back upon, and share.
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you Mary Kay. you are the best editor I've ever had. You don't miss anything. I wish I could keep nominating you, but I can only do it once a month. Thank you so much.
Beth
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You're very welcome, Beth. It's so lovely to be appreciated. God bless you, my friend. - Mary Kay xoxo
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Excellent recall as usual, Beth. I doubt very much I could do as well. LOL You do bring some memories to mind for me. We are from the same era and so many things you write about can apply to my family as well. Well done dear. xxx Nancy:)
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Excellent recall as usual, Beth. I doubt very much I could do as well. LOL You do bring some memories to mind for me. We are from the same era and so many things you write about can apply to my family as well. Well done dear. xxx Nancy:)
Comment Written 18-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thank you Nancy, I think this is bringing back memories for many of our generation. I appreciate your comments. You should write your story. I think your children would love it.
Beth
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Beth, how exciting! A camper for a week's holiday! That's wonderful to look forward to. How did those panels for Christmas turn out? Or are you telling that in the next chapter?
So Carol now went to school and did well. Always such satisfaction when children turn out to be good students. My oldest was very good at elementary school and went without a single doubt to a classical gymnasium at the age of twelve. There it all was so different! It was not as easy as she thought it would be, and in the third year she dropped out. I think it had also a lot to do with my divorcing her father that year.
Each time I read a new chapter here, I enjoy the conversational tone, the simplicity of the ongoing events in your family life. Your husband now can fly a plane! What a surprise that must have been for you.
Well written, as always.
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Beth, how exciting! A camper for a week's holiday! That's wonderful to look forward to. How did those panels for Christmas turn out? Or are you telling that in the next chapter?
So Carol now went to school and did well. Always such satisfaction when children turn out to be good students. My oldest was very good at elementary school and went without a single doubt to a classical gymnasium at the age of twelve. There it all was so different! It was not as easy as she thought it would be, and in the third year she dropped out. I think it had also a lot to do with my divorcing her father that year.
Each time I read a new chapter here, I enjoy the conversational tone, the simplicity of the ongoing events in your family life. Your husband now can fly a plane! What a surprise that must have been for you.
Well written, as always.
Comment Written 18-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thank you Marjon, I'm pleased you're enjoying this. The trip in the camper is one I'll never forget. It's two chapters away. There is something about the panels in the next chapter. I appreciate your comments.
Beth
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Welcome, Beth. I enjoy your story.
Comment from djsaxon
I actually enjoy the seemingly random glimpses into your life with a man that you obviously loved dearly. I AM a 'first timer'. Your introductory notes really helped to clarify the thrust. Thank you for sharing. DJ
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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I actually enjoy the seemingly random glimpses into your life with a man that you obviously loved dearly. I AM a 'first timer'. Your introductory notes really helped to clarify the thrust. Thank you for sharing. DJ
Comment Written 18-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Well welcome first timer, I'm so glad I left that note about what this is all about. I was hoping no one would be offended. Thanks so much for the review. I hope to see your name agains.
Beth
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Beth, a most progressive chapter in your life, your personal life and that of your Husband and Carol in particular. No civil rights in this chapter, just the revelation that airplanes were going to be a part of your life too!
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Dear Beth, a most progressive chapter in your life, your personal life and that of your Husband and Carol in particular. No civil rights in this chapter, just the revelation that airplanes were going to be a part of your life too!
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thank you so much Suzanna, I really appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Spitfire
The airplane business sounds as if your husband was having a mid-life crises. I would be burned up about the shirt too. Your husband's reaction was the same as my husband's would have been. I had to learn not to be so materialistic.
You are taking on a lot with the two art projects. You need to learn to say no. LOL Hey, I had the same problem too.
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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The airplane business sounds as if your husband was having a mid-life crises. I would be burned up about the shirt too. Your husband's reaction was the same as my husband's would have been. I had to learn not to be so materialistic.
You are taking on a lot with the two art projects. You need to learn to say no. LOL Hey, I had the same problem too.
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the great comments. I'm glad I'm not the only one who would have bitched about the shirt, and yes, I did need to say no.
Beth
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
It ain't broke; don't fix it. Skip around as much as you want--I love the format of your speaking to your late husband and recalling various incidents, amusing and otherwise. Those twins of yours are demonic! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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It ain't broke; don't fix it. Skip around as much as you want--I love the format of your speaking to your late husband and recalling various incidents, amusing and otherwise. Those twins of yours are demonic! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thank you so much for the review. I think I going to keep that note on the rest of mine. It paid off this time. I had two more first timer and one gave me six stars. Yep, the twins were demons. Don when he was young and Christi can be an older demon. Don't her I said so. She knows. LOL
Beth
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is another well written segment of your memoir. I was so interested I was surprised that I had come to the end already. Well done again as usual!
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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This is another well written segment of your memoir. I was so interested I was surprised that I had come to the end already. Well done again as usual!
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thank you so much Rebecca, I so glad you didn't find it too long.
Beth
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Your writings are never too long for me.
