Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "Things Which Don't End Well"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
18 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I must start reading your story from the very beginning. It sounds like you had a good life with many unexpected experiences. I want to give you my condolences. God Bless You As You Write Your Life Story.
P.S. I have caught up on the chapters.....I have already written comments on this chapter but after finishing the prior chapter today, I thought I'd update.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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I must start reading your story from the very beginning. It sounds like you had a good life with many unexpected experiences. I want to give you my condolences. God Bless You As You Write Your Life Story.
P.S. I have caught up on the chapters.....I have already written comments on this chapter but after finishing the prior chapter today, I thought I'd update.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for wanting to read my story from the beginning. I open to suggestion so If you see a problem let me know. I hope you'll keep reading. I would nominate you for the reviewed award but FanStory wan't let me this month.
I would like to read some of your work thought so I put you on the fan list. Beth
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a highly interesting story that I always look forward to. Your rock garden would have been a thing of beauty if it were meant to be. Well done again!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2020
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This is a highly interesting story that I always look forward to. Your rock garden would have been a thing of beauty if it were meant to be. Well done again!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments.
Beth
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You're welcome.
Comment from Spitfire
This certainly was a disturbing time in your life. Starting with the building of a new house to the sick puppies and the rock garden episode, it's a wonder you didn't get sick from all the stress. I would have had a panic attack for sure.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2020
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This certainly was a disturbing time in your life. Starting with the building of a new house to the sick puppies and the rock garden episode, it's a wonder you didn't get sick from all the stress. I would have had a panic attack for sure.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I'm sure there must have been some good things going on during that period of my life. It is funny the bad things are more memorable.
Comment from estory
This narrative of family life paints a complicated picture of people pulled in all kinds of directions by life; and in the process, we get an inkling of the character and personality of the individuals as they navigate these struggles. There's an element of deferral from wife to husband as you let your husband build the country house, despite all the problems with the contractor and the strained relationship with him. The desire to remain in the shadows as you relate the story of spilling the beans on the unscrupulous fellow worker stealing company supplies. The sense of loss in the puppies dying in a failed dog breeding scheme. All these hopes and disappointments see saw through life just the way they do for all of us. You have a nice down to earth tone in the voice of the narrator, a confidential tone. Good attention to detail makes the little scenes come to life. estory
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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This narrative of family life paints a complicated picture of people pulled in all kinds of directions by life; and in the process, we get an inkling of the character and personality of the individuals as they navigate these struggles. There's an element of deferral from wife to husband as you let your husband build the country house, despite all the problems with the contractor and the strained relationship with him. The desire to remain in the shadows as you relate the story of spilling the beans on the unscrupulous fellow worker stealing company supplies. The sense of loss in the puppies dying in a failed dog breeding scheme. All these hopes and disappointments see saw through life just the way they do for all of us. You have a nice down to earth tone in the voice of the narrator, a confidential tone. Good attention to detail makes the little scenes come to life. estory
Comment Written 26-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the in-depth comments. I enjoyed reading what you had to say and appreciate you mentioning all the things you did.
Beth
Comment from Ben Colder
I can see this unfolding when driving off and the books becoming a treasure you would need to pay. Good write. Sorry about the loss but sometimes things are revealed like it or not. We just pretend it never happens.
Good one Beth.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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I can see this unfolding when driving off and the books becoming a treasure you would need to pay. Good write. Sorry about the loss but sometimes things are revealed like it or not. We just pretend it never happens.
Good one Beth.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Thank you Chuck, You missed the last one, so I wondered where you were. I was hoping all those Arkansas viruses hadn't gotten to you.
Thanks so much for the six stars.
Beth
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Father Day weekend in the lake area with the kids. They bought me a tv screen big enough to be a drive in movie. LOL.
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Wow! Lucky you. Don't let all that entertainment keep you from writing..
Comment from nancy_e_davis
My, My, This part of your story was mostly sad, or bad news etc. Life is like that. Things run smooth for a while and then you can't do anything right for a while. Bad times are tests and it takes a string will to overcome. Well done, Beth. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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My, My, This part of your story was mostly sad, or bad news etc. Life is like that. Things run smooth for a while and then you can't do anything right for a while. Bad times are tests and it takes a string will to overcome. Well done, Beth. Nancy:)
Comment Written 26-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Thank you Nancy, other than when Evan's father died I don't remember being sad. Those other thing broght on some anxiety and aggravation but we sort of handled them as the roller coaster ride that life sems to be. Thank you so much for the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Wow! This is a very interesting chapter, and it is aptly named, "Things Which Don't End Well," but you could have just as easily named it, "Murphy's Law!"
From poorly delivered news about a death in the family, to a very awkward encounter at work, to a litter of doomed puppies, and more, you really had your fill of trouble.
I like the way you described your response to those things in your "Background" section: "We handled them as they happened."
Here are the errors I found and/or suggested revisions:
...we knew there was hard feelings and we felt awkward being around them.
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...we knew there were hard feelings and we felt awkward being around them.
I'd gotten along fine with Stan, and I didn't want to get involved because, I didn't consider it any of our business.
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I'd gotten along fine with Stan, and I didn't want to get involved, because I didn't consider it any of our business.
Loraine, the typist told me to calm down...
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Loraine, the typist, told me to calm down...
To make matters worse, Stan had been called to the meeting as well to face his accusers.
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To make matters worse, Stan had been called to the meeting as well, to face his accusers.
Our dogs had not been checked by a Vet to see if they were healthy,
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Our dogs had not been checked by a vet to see if they were healthy,
We had a Vet check the puppy's leg, he said she had hip dysplasia,
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We had a vet check the puppy's leg, and he said she had hip dysplasia,
...and a man was picking something up, which turned out to be my books. [close up space between "picking" and "something"]
They never make it back to the library,
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They never made it back to the library,
In the end, you did help me fill back in the area which I had dug out where my rock garden was supposed to go.
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In the end, you did help me fill in the ground, back in the area which I had dug out, where my rock garden was supposed to go.
What's very good about this chapter is that it lets the reader know that he or she is not alone in suffering difficulties; we all have them in life, and we all have to handle them. I am sure your children, and even your grandchildren, will have a special appreciation for everything you went through as a married couple, parents and homeowners. You really have a fine conversational voice in the story, achieving a very pleasant blend of narrator and participant in your own past. You have made it personal, addressing it to your deceased husband, without being unduly sentimental.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Wow! This is a very interesting chapter, and it is aptly named, "Things Which Don't End Well," but you could have just as easily named it, "Murphy's Law!"
From poorly delivered news about a death in the family, to a very awkward encounter at work, to a litter of doomed puppies, and more, you really had your fill of trouble.
I like the way you described your response to those things in your "Background" section: "We handled them as they happened."
Here are the errors I found and/or suggested revisions:
...we knew there was hard feelings and we felt awkward being around them.
-->
...we knew there were hard feelings and we felt awkward being around them.
I'd gotten along fine with Stan, and I didn't want to get involved because, I didn't consider it any of our business.
-->
I'd gotten along fine with Stan, and I didn't want to get involved, because I didn't consider it any of our business.
Loraine, the typist told me to calm down...
-->
Loraine, the typist, told me to calm down...
To make matters worse, Stan had been called to the meeting as well to face his accusers.
-->
To make matters worse, Stan had been called to the meeting as well, to face his accusers.
Our dogs had not been checked by a Vet to see if they were healthy,
-->
Our dogs had not been checked by a vet to see if they were healthy,
We had a Vet check the puppy's leg, he said she had hip dysplasia,
-->
We had a vet check the puppy's leg, and he said she had hip dysplasia,
...and a man was picking something up, which turned out to be my books. [close up space between "picking" and "something"]
They never make it back to the library,
-->
They never made it back to the library,
In the end, you did help me fill back in the area which I had dug out where my rock garden was supposed to go.
-->
In the end, you did help me fill in the ground, back in the area which I had dug out, where my rock garden was supposed to go.
What's very good about this chapter is that it lets the reader know that he or she is not alone in suffering difficulties; we all have them in life, and we all have to handle them. I am sure your children, and even your grandchildren, will have a special appreciation for everything you went through as a married couple, parents and homeowners. You really have a fine conversational voice in the story, achieving a very pleasant blend of narrator and participant in your own past. You have made it personal, addressing it to your deceased husband, without being unduly sentimental.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Mary Kay, you are a wonderful editor and I love it when you read my posts because they get such careful attention, and I feel you've found most of grammatical errors. I also love your comments. You are so kind. Thank you for those stars.
Beth
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
If it ain't one thing it's another! Your poor husband getting the news about his father's death--kids sure tell it like it is. Wise advice re not hiring friends. What a life--keep it coming. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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If it ain't one thing it's another! Your poor husband getting the news about his father's death--kids sure tell it like it is. Wise advice re not hiring friends. What a life--keep it coming. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Thank you Liz, I really appreciate you hanging in there with my tale of woes. Family and even close friends are bad news when it comes to business or money matters.
Beth
Comment from Sankey
Hey, look what I have for you! A detailed, intgerest9ing chapter. Lots of ups and downs as usual. Thanks again for a great story and I wish you well with the next one.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Hey, look what I have for you! A detailed, intgerest9ing chapter. Lots of ups and downs as usual. Thanks again for a great story and I wish you well with the next one.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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I can't believe you saved me another six stars. You know I thrilled with those. Thanks so much for the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Beth, this post contains a lot of disappointments, but they are, a part of life too! Are they not?
As usual your writing is clear and well organized, I hope you have collected a whole band of faithful readers, like me, who look forward to each post.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Dear Beth, this post contains a lot of disappointments, but they are, a part of life too! Are they not?
As usual your writing is clear and well organized, I hope you have collected a whole band of faithful readers, like me, who look forward to each post.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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It really sounds terrible when I write it down, but I remember any periods of my life when I was unhappy. I think we all took whatever happened in stride. As you say, thar;s life, and overall I think I had a great life. I'd do all again if I had that choice. Thanks for the review.
