Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 64 "Needs of a Growing Family"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
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Comment from Sankey
Well done. Not getting notified again. I missed out on Phoney money on the last chapter it was a good read though. You still need to let me know ok. Continuing on for one more chapter, I think.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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Well done. Not getting notified again. I missed out on Phoney money on the last chapter it was a good read though. You still need to let me know ok. Continuing on for one more chapter, I think.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
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I don't understand why you aren't getting the notices. I will keep sending them There are a couple of poems up for contests but still paying but you'll have to look in my portfolio to find them.
Beth
Comment from Mastery
Very well written recollection of days gone by in this chapter, Beth.
There's a lot of memory-driven events that will capture the attention of your children and their children for years to come. For example:
After Connie began sleeping through most of the night, we moved her crib into the room with Carol and Christi. The crib didn't work for her very long, because she acted as though she was afraid of sleeping in it. When she had enough words in her vocabulary to communicate, she let us know that when she was in the crib she had dreams of being in a rowboat with skeletons. The older kids had probably frightened her with Halloween decorations."
One suggestion, if I may, Beth. I believe Itold you about using the word "would" on anoyher chapter. It's best to refrain from overusing the word in this manner:
"When Dolly would ask Connie how much she loved her. Connie would stretch out her arms and say, "de' whol wurld." I was a little jealous. Dolly was always buying her little toys and other thiings. (also misspelled things) btw.
Good chapter from beginning to end, Beth. :) Bob
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Very well written recollection of days gone by in this chapter, Beth.
There's a lot of memory-driven events that will capture the attention of your children and their children for years to come. For example:
After Connie began sleeping through most of the night, we moved her crib into the room with Carol and Christi. The crib didn't work for her very long, because she acted as though she was afraid of sleeping in it. When she had enough words in her vocabulary to communicate, she let us know that when she was in the crib she had dreams of being in a rowboat with skeletons. The older kids had probably frightened her with Halloween decorations."
One suggestion, if I may, Beth. I believe Itold you about using the word "would" on anoyher chapter. It's best to refrain from overusing the word in this manner:
"When Dolly would ask Connie how much she loved her. Connie would stretch out her arms and say, "de' whol wurld." I was a little jealous. Dolly was always buying her little toys and other thiings. (also misspelled things) btw.
Good chapter from beginning to end, Beth. :) Bob
Comment Written 25-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
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Thank you Bob, I do appreciate your review and suggestions I did remove the word "would" It seems to work alright without it. I tend to write like I talk and I'm sure that is what I "would" say. See I just put it in there again without thinking. LOL
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So glad you like the idea, dear friend. In text it sounds so much better, don't
you think? Bob
Comment from Dick Waters
What a wonderful recap of those early times. I found only one potential correction - eight tract tapes should be track.
I'm sure your children will cherish these postings.
Thanks for sharing.
Dick
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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What a wonderful recap of those early times. I found only one potential correction - eight tract tapes should be track.
I'm sure your children will cherish these postings.
Thanks for sharing.
Dick
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the review and comments. Thank you also for noticing that misspelling. I think my children do like it that I writing this. I'm pleased when others say they enjoy it as well.
Beth
Comment from lyenochka
Oh how difficult that must have been! So many changes from places to sleep and vehicles and dealing with a teenager. I remember bell bottom pants! I also remember Pres. Nixon resigning - I think I was in high school. What a busy time. Thanks for putting that all into historical perspective.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Oh how difficult that must have been! So many changes from places to sleep and vehicles and dealing with a teenager. I remember bell bottom pants! I also remember Pres. Nixon resigning - I think I was in high school. What a busy time. Thanks for putting that all into historical perspective.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for the review. Most of this stuff I write about seems like it just happened a couple of ;years ago. When I realize how many years have actually passed, it is hard to believe. When writing, it is almost like time travel because I feel I'm there again. However my daughter claims that I live in the moment so that doesn't make sense.
Beth
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Memory is a time machine. You can live in the moment but still take occasional time trips! 😊💖
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Love it! You are quite the storyteller and have quite a trove to draw from!
Cheers. LIZ
(plural of crisis is crises; at a crossroadS; hippy s/b hippie; eight tracts s/b tracks; You drew up plans that enclosing [s/b enclosed] our carport and made it into the new den ... no longer had a carport [omit: for our car]; [omit: cold] chills; for you and I s/b ME; both ... were both [omit one]; had it's drawbacks s/b its)
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Love it! You are quite the storyteller and have quite a trove to draw from!
Cheers. LIZ
(plural of crisis is crises; at a crossroadS; hippy s/b hippie; eight tracts s/b tracks; You drew up plans that enclosing [s/b enclosed] our carport and made it into the new den ... no longer had a carport [omit: for our car]; [omit: cold] chills; for you and I s/b ME; both ... were both [omit one]; had it's drawbacks s/b its)
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2020
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Than you Liz, I so glad you like it and I am so glad you don't seem to mine helping me clean up my errors. I looked up that word 'hippy' and learned that it describe me. I' m the one with big hips. I never noticed before the 70 guys were hippies.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I do remember those years. I am definately old enough to remember. How horrible is that? Our countries downfall started back then. Not good. I am so glad you have this down in writing. You are doing a grea service in writing these memiors.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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I do remember those years. I am definately old enough to remember. How horrible is that? Our countries downfall started back then. Not good. I am so glad you have this down in writing. You are doing a grea service in writing these memiors.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Thank you Barbara. My kids are starting to remember those years. I was in my thirties then. How horrible is that? LOL I'd like to be as ;young as you.
Beth
Comment from Ulla
Hi Beth, I so enjoy,reading your memories and you tell them so very well. It all come alive in my mind's eye. Your children will be so pleased when they read this,I'm sure.
So, you encountered a few problems from the children and then the van. Yes, I can imagine the change of he times could be difficult. I was 22 in 1974 so to me it was the way it was.
All best, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Hi Beth, I so enjoy,reading your memories and you tell them so very well. It all come alive in my mind's eye. Your children will be so pleased when they read this,I'm sure.
So, you encountered a few problems from the children and then the van. Yes, I can imagine the change of he times could be difficult. I was 22 in 1974 so to me it was the way it was.
All best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Thank you Ulla. I do appreciate your review. Three of my four children are reading them as I write them. I've written 66 chapters already, and they don't want me to stop. I'll need to get my grandchildren to read them.
Beth
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Awe, That is so great. What a joy it must be for you. :)))
Comment from Gert sherwood
BethShelby
I like your chapter in your book remembering yesterday about the needs of a growing family there were a few places that drew my attention made me smile ex. of this one is wen Don was continuing to treat Connie as a play thing. And Connie on the door knob by the elastic in the waist of her pants.
Gert
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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BethShelby
I like your chapter in your book remembering yesterday about the needs of a growing family there were a few places that drew my attention made me smile ex. of this one is wen Don was continuing to treat Connie as a play thing. And Connie on the door knob by the elastic in the waist of her pants.
Gert
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Thank you for reviewing this Gert. I didn't know he was doing that at the time. When I was pregnant, he was so hoping I would have a boy. He said we had enough girls already. He and Christi are twins and he told the doctor when he found I'd had a girl, to go back and look and see if there wasn't a boy in there too.
Beth
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You are welcome BethShelby
Gert
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Beth, in this post you mention some of the things I remember because they impacted the nation. Particularly the whole Nixon scenario, and the Vietnam war. The urban terrors of "sin-city" was, happily escaped by me and mine.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Dear Beth, in this post you mention some of the things I remember because they impacted the nation. Particularly the whole Nixon scenario, and the Vietnam war. The urban terrors of "sin-city" was, happily escaped by me and mine.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the review Suzanna. I hope I'm putting a few things in that trigger memories in other people who lived during the same time. Our stories are all different, but we have a lot in common as well.
Beth
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
The seventies were a mixed bag of good things and bad things. The Watergate affair was the pits. The end of the Vietnam war was good. The poor soldiers from that war were not given any honour at the time. But ordinary citizens wended their way through those crazy times. Isn't it so disappointing when you hear about some of the things you children do when you are not there. Carol must have been over the moon with the room you built, just for her. You two were a going concern with an interesting family life. Plenty of action in every sphere. You write about so well it keeps me interested.
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You drew up plans, and we ending by enclosing our carport and makeing that into the new den and dining
My suggestion:>> You drew up plans that enclosed our carport and made it into the new den and dining
to told her they wouldn't need her >> to tell her
The driver and a passenger seats were>> passenger seat
Raffaelina
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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The seventies were a mixed bag of good things and bad things. The Watergate affair was the pits. The end of the Vietnam war was good. The poor soldiers from that war were not given any honour at the time. But ordinary citizens wended their way through those crazy times. Isn't it so disappointing when you hear about some of the things you children do when you are not there. Carol must have been over the moon with the room you built, just for her. You two were a going concern with an interesting family life. Plenty of action in every sphere. You write about so well it keeps me interested.
NB:
You drew up plans, and we ending by enclosing our carport and makeing that into the new den and dining
My suggestion:>> You drew up plans that enclosed our carport and made it into the new den and dining
to told her they wouldn't need her >> to tell her
The driver and a passenger seats were>> passenger seat
Raffaelina
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comment. Your suggestion on that awkward sentence is a good one. I also appreciate you noticing the two spags. I corrected them.
Beth
