Remembering Yesterday
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Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
It's a very colorful chapter describing life for your family of six! A sinking boat, a daughter trapped in a car trunk, a terrorized toddler... that gorilla reminds me of the character on "Harry and the Hendersons." My father loved that show, or movie, or whatever it was!
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By the time, we'll all had a turn,
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By the time we'd all had a turn,
I was using my time to vacuum the new gold shag carpet which we'd had installed..
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I was using my time to vacuum the new gold shag carpet which we'd had installed.
In the past years, our older children, had always gone trick-or-treating,
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In the past years, our older children had always gone trick-or-treating,
and whatever was left would melt together in a sticky lump. [remove extra space before "lump"]
pagan groups considered Oct.31 as a high night in their calendar
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pagan groups considered October 31 as a high night in their calendar [also remove invisible line break between "in" and "their"]
and that the church should come up with and alternate activity...
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and that the church should come up with an alternate activity...
Suddenly she let out a chilling scream loud enough to be heard from a block away.
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Suddenly she let out a chilling scream, loud enough to be heard from a block away.
I jerked around in time to see a person dressed as King Kong fleeing away from our car...
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I jerked around in time to see a person dressed as King Kong, fleeing away from our car...
Connie was totally traumatized and was still crying even after the twins were back and we were safely home.
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Connie was totally traumatized and was still crying, even after the twins were back and we were safely home.
Rhomas was working as a project engineer for the local utility company and Shirley was giving home decor parties.
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Rhomas was working as a project engineer for the local utility company, and Shirley was giving home decor parties. [remove extra space after "giving"]
Kids get into all kinds of trouble, don't they! So do kittens... I have heard what kittens can do to a Christmas tree!
You really do have a Mom's intuition. That was a close call, with the trunk. And the gorilla thing sounds like a really frightful fiasco. Poor little Connie! I'm not a big fan of Halloween myself. For some people, it's innocent fun, but for others, it's seriously evil. For churches who want to provide alternative children's entertainment, I'm all for it -- and keep an eye on the youngsters!
I'm wondering if you found another job, after your employer picked up and left.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
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It's a very colorful chapter describing life for your family of six! A sinking boat, a daughter trapped in a car trunk, a terrorized toddler... that gorilla reminds me of the character on "Harry and the Hendersons." My father loved that show, or movie, or whatever it was!
Some suggested revisions for you:
By the time, we'll all had a turn,
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By the time we'd all had a turn,
I was using my time to vacuum the new gold shag carpet which we'd had installed..
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I was using my time to vacuum the new gold shag carpet which we'd had installed.
In the past years, our older children, had always gone trick-or-treating,
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In the past years, our older children had always gone trick-or-treating,
and whatever was left would melt together in a sticky lump. [remove extra space before "lump"]
pagan groups considered Oct.31 as a high night in their calendar
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pagan groups considered October 31 as a high night in their calendar [also remove invisible line break between "in" and "their"]
and that the church should come up with and alternate activity...
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and that the church should come up with an alternate activity...
Suddenly she let out a chilling scream loud enough to be heard from a block away.
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Suddenly she let out a chilling scream, loud enough to be heard from a block away.
I jerked around in time to see a person dressed as King Kong fleeing away from our car...
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I jerked around in time to see a person dressed as King Kong, fleeing away from our car...
Connie was totally traumatized and was still crying even after the twins were back and we were safely home.
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Connie was totally traumatized and was still crying, even after the twins were back and we were safely home.
Rhomas was working as a project engineer for the local utility company and Shirley was giving home decor parties.
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Rhomas was working as a project engineer for the local utility company, and Shirley was giving home decor parties. [remove extra space after "giving"]
Kids get into all kinds of trouble, don't they! So do kittens... I have heard what kittens can do to a Christmas tree!
You really do have a Mom's intuition. That was a close call, with the trunk. And the gorilla thing sounds like a really frightful fiasco. Poor little Connie! I'm not a big fan of Halloween myself. For some people, it's innocent fun, but for others, it's seriously evil. For churches who want to provide alternative children's entertainment, I'm all for it -- and keep an eye on the youngsters!
I'm wondering if you found another job, after your employer picked up and left.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your great review and for you excellent help with punctuation errors. I really appreciate you, and I'm thrilled with the six stars.
Beth
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You're very welcome, Beth. Happy to help and a pleasure to read! - Mary Kay xoxo
Comment from Ulla
Hi Beth, this is a lovely continuation to your story but also a bit worrying. You had a few frights not only at Halloween but on other occasions as well. Can't wait to what's next. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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Hi Beth, this is a lovely continuation to your story but also a bit worrying. You had a few frights not only at Halloween but on other occasions as well. Can't wait to what's next. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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Thank you Ulla. I appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
(remove commas around , our older children, & , we all had a turn ,
& add commas after preacher's daughter, and Rhomas,)
Gripping! Spooky re Christi in the trunk! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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(remove commas around , our older children, & , we all had a turn ,
& add commas after preacher's daughter, and Rhomas,)
Gripping! Spooky re Christi in the trunk! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much for the review and help with misplace commas.
Beth
Comment from Mistydawn
I remember when they found razor blades in the candy. Fortunately, we were in a neighborhood where we have known each other for years. It was sad though. Being so cruel to children. Sounds like Don was quite a carpenter. Glad you found your little girl in time. Your story is well-written very interesting start to finish. I look forward o reading more
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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I remember when they found razor blades in the candy. Fortunately, we were in a neighborhood where we have known each other for years. It was sad though. Being so cruel to children. Sounds like Don was quite a carpenter. Glad you found your little girl in time. Your story is well-written very interesting start to finish. I look forward o reading more
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. Several people remembered about when there was so much in the news about razors in candy.
Beth
Comment from mermaids
I am fascinated by your son Don building a boat, that is quite the accomplishment, despite the leaks. The Halloween idea of dressing up like people from the Bible is a good idea. I enjoyed reading your memoir again like the other chapters and look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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I am fascinated by your son Don building a boat, that is quite the accomplishment, despite the leaks. The Halloween idea of dressing up like people from the Bible is a good idea. I enjoyed reading your memoir again like the other chapters and look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the review and comments. Don really surprised us too.
The church party on Halloween night was success. I think most of the kid enjoyed it.. A few went trick or treating and came to the party later.
Beth
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for sharing all these stories, Beth. I'll just comment on the different ones as I read them.
I can't believe that you were asked to keep an eye on the business owners' baby while working! That shouldn't be legal. Interesting thing about that "Napoleanic law."
I was really impressed with Don building his own boat at age 11! Wow! Reminds me of those children's survival books where a kid builds everything himself on a deserted island. He could do it! Kudos to him. Leaks can be fixed.
Your maternal instincts are so strong! It's good that the Spirit nudged you to check on Christi!
Poor Connie. I always had some concern about the whole Halloween thing and was puzzled why the public schools gave up teaching about Thanksgiving and made such a huge deal about Halloween. I think the spelling is "Wiccan" with two 'c's.
Congrats to Don again! "time he won the price. " (prize?)
Ah, pets and Christmas trees - that's a topic for stories all on their own!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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Thanks for sharing all these stories, Beth. I'll just comment on the different ones as I read them.
I can't believe that you were asked to keep an eye on the business owners' baby while working! That shouldn't be legal. Interesting thing about that "Napoleanic law."
I was really impressed with Don building his own boat at age 11! Wow! Reminds me of those children's survival books where a kid builds everything himself on a deserted island. He could do it! Kudos to him. Leaks can be fixed.
Your maternal instincts are so strong! It's good that the Spirit nudged you to check on Christi!
Poor Connie. I always had some concern about the whole Halloween thing and was puzzled why the public schools gave up teaching about Thanksgiving and made such a huge deal about Halloween. I think the spelling is "Wiccan" with two 'c's.
Congrats to Don again! "time he won the price. " (prize?)
Ah, pets and Christmas trees - that's a topic for stories all on their own!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and all your lovely comments. I enjoyed reading them.
Beth
Comment from Sankey
This was a good chapter. You can see why I get so frustrated with this place and I had to find this myself, again. A couple of spags this time.
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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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This was a good chapter. You can see why I get so frustrated with this place and I had to find this myself, again. A couple of spags this time.
with (a)walking stick. Some member(s) voted
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much for the review and comments. I was about to send you a message but I'm glad you found it. I appreciate the help with the spags. I've fixed them.
Beth
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Beth, you brought so many memories of the 70s back to me. Shag Carpet, and warnings of Razor Blades in Candy being at the top of the list of the not so good stuff that marked those times.
I do see that your next chapter will have you job hunting again! I will look forward to see how that goes.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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Dear Beth, you brought so many memories of the 70s back to me. Shag Carpet, and warnings of Razor Blades in Candy being at the top of the list of the not so good stuff that marked those times.
I do see that your next chapter will have you job hunting again! I will look forward to see how that goes.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much for the review and comments. Thinks were different int he seventies but to me it is hard to believe it was nearly fifties ago.
Beth
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Another interesting chapter. I hate Halloween, Beth. It started when I became a teen and felt like I was too mature to go trick or treat. I never allowed my children to go because of the evil people who were doctoring the candy treats. We had parties or went on family camping trips instead.. My cat used to climb our tree. I wrote a poem about it. He was so cute. Thought he was hid from me.
Good job, dear. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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Another interesting chapter. I hate Halloween, Beth. It started when I became a teen and felt like I was too mature to go trick or treat. I never allowed my children to go because of the evil people who were doctoring the candy treats. We had parties or went on family camping trips instead.. My cat used to climb our tree. I wrote a poem about it. He was so cute. Thought he was hid from me.
Good job, dear. Nancy:)
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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They were having trick or threating when I was a kid but mine folks wouldn't let me participate. We had Halloween Carnivals at school and some kids soaped up store window and played pranks. Thanks so much for the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Your life was a going concern. Between your job, your children and your husband, there was never a dull moment. You had to have eyes in the back of your head, to keep up with these children. Don seems to be exceptionally talented and headed for a good future. Also, I'm thinking it won't be long before you two decide, Mississippi is where you want to be, in your newly built house. Good story and very interesting, Beth.
Ralf
since in was unoccupied.>>in s/b 'it'
he won the price.>>'prize'
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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Your life was a going concern. Between your job, your children and your husband, there was never a dull moment. You had to have eyes in the back of your head, to keep up with these children. Don seems to be exceptionally talented and headed for a good future. Also, I'm thinking it won't be long before you two decide, Mississippi is where you want to be, in your newly built house. Good story and very interesting, Beth.
Ralf
since in was unoccupied.>>in s/b 'it'
he won the price.>>'prize'
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for the great review and comments. Stay tuned to find out about the Mississippi thing. I appreciate you helping with the typos.
Beth
