Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 67 "1975 in Retrospect"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
15 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
You and your husband didn't shirk any responsibilities. You certainly kept your hands full. What with the Pathfinder and the School Board and your jobs, my goodness you were always willing and able. You sure gave back.
Ralf
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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You and your husband didn't shirk any responsibilities. You certainly kept your hands full. What with the Pathfinder and the School Board and your jobs, my goodness you were always willing and able. You sure gave back.
Ralf
Comment Written 18-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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Back then I had a lot more energy that I have now. I enjoyed some of the things I did but then I had a problem saying no sometime when asked. Thank you for reading another chapter.
Beth
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I wasn't sure what I'd missed. I'm glad I investigated. I've been so far behind in my reviews.
Ralf
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I wasn't sure what I'd missed. I'm glad I investigated. I've been so far behind in my reviews.
Ralf
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This is an enjoyable chapter that makes a lot of sense and doesn't seem disjointed; it's all about the kids. You had three teenagers and a toddler, with a variety of issues.
Here are some errors (or possible errors) and suggested revisions:
I hope these short paragraphs don't seem to disconnected to be unpleasant to the reader.
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I hope these short paragraphs don't seem too disconnected to make sense to the reader. [your original wording became a kind of double negative]
It was the year Disco was the musical choice...
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It was the year disco was the musical choice... [I don't think musical genres like jazz and blues need to be capitalized, but I could be wrong]
and say "Roger that, Good Buddy".
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and say "Roger that, Good Buddy."
Every day as I drove her to Dolly's. I worked on teaching her...
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Every day as I drove her to Dolly's, I worked on teaching her...
Yet I'm sure she wasn't much over three.
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Yet I'm sure she wasn't much older than three.
You were as mortified as I was that I could have done such a thing.
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You were as mortified as I was, that I could have done such a thing.
Even Connie was getting old enough to enjoy it..
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Even Connie was getting old enough to enjoy it.
That was quite a scare you had in the department store, with Connie getting lost under the clothing racks, and again with accidentally leaving her in the store -- you must have felt terrible. We've all heard the tragic stories, and most of us have a lot of sympathy for the parent who is just forgetful at the worst possible time. Thanks be to God for His mercy and protection!
You and your husband went through so much together. Sometimes people can be very harsh, but you seemed to exercise very good judgment. You had a very full life as a family -- definitely worth writing a book about!
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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This is an enjoyable chapter that makes a lot of sense and doesn't seem disjointed; it's all about the kids. You had three teenagers and a toddler, with a variety of issues.
Here are some errors (or possible errors) and suggested revisions:
I hope these short paragraphs don't seem to disconnected to be unpleasant to the reader.
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I hope these short paragraphs don't seem too disconnected to make sense to the reader. [your original wording became a kind of double negative]
It was the year Disco was the musical choice...
-->
It was the year disco was the musical choice... [I don't think musical genres like jazz and blues need to be capitalized, but I could be wrong]
and say "Roger that, Good Buddy".
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and say "Roger that, Good Buddy."
Every day as I drove her to Dolly's. I worked on teaching her...
-->
Every day as I drove her to Dolly's, I worked on teaching her...
Yet I'm sure she wasn't much over three.
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Yet I'm sure she wasn't much older than three.
You were as mortified as I was that I could have done such a thing.
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You were as mortified as I was, that I could have done such a thing.
Even Connie was getting old enough to enjoy it..
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Even Connie was getting old enough to enjoy it.
That was quite a scare you had in the department store, with Connie getting lost under the clothing racks, and again with accidentally leaving her in the store -- you must have felt terrible. We've all heard the tragic stories, and most of us have a lot of sympathy for the parent who is just forgetful at the worst possible time. Thanks be to God for His mercy and protection!
You and your husband went through so much together. Sometimes people can be very harsh, but you seemed to exercise very good judgment. You had a very full life as a family -- definitely worth writing a book about!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Please forgive me for taking so long to read your review. I was away most of the day. I really appreciate your review and nice comments and the help you are always so kind to give me. Thank you for the six stars. Those really make my day. You're an angel.
Beth
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You're very welcome, Beth, and no apology is necessary! Sometimes we have busy days. I really enjoy reading your work, so much. Not only does it take me inside the times of my parents' generation, but it also gives me an inside look at raising a family, something that I never had the opportunity to do, as my life turned out. I appreciate your style of narration, because you neither minimize the importance of events, nor overly dramatize them. It's really very pleasant reading.
Blessings and hugs, Mary Kay xoxo
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This is a very lovely thing to say. I really appreciate you.
Beth
Comment from Brett Matthew West
P5 - I would depend should be I would depend on
P7 - sometime we enjoyed should be sometimes we enjoyed. Also, no need to capitalize Condos.
P9 - competition should be competitions
P11 - expressing an opposing should be expressing opposing
P12 - sometime patted should be sometimes patted
This autobiography continues to be interesting and sure something your children will treasure.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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P5 - I would depend should be I would depend on
P7 - sometime we enjoyed should be sometimes we enjoyed. Also, no need to capitalize Condos.
P9 - competition should be competitions
P11 - expressing an opposing should be expressing opposing
P12 - sometime patted should be sometimes patted
This autobiography continues to be interesting and sure something your children will treasure.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the help with corrections.
Beth
Comment from Ulla
Hi Beth, again you've written a beautiful and very engaging narrative of your married life and with kids who grow up in the process. The honesty of it is so very endearing. I love it, and can't wait to reading on. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Hi Beth, again you've written a beautiful and very engaging narrative of your married life and with kids who grow up in the process. The honesty of it is so very endearing. I love it, and can't wait to reading on. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thank you Ulla. I guess I don't have any boundaries. I telling it all as I remember it. both good and bad. I'm glad you like reading it.
Beth
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That's one of the things I love about it.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
More interesting memories from the past and your lovely family Beth. You make your chapters interesting and lively and I enjoy reading them in relation to our lives at that time. Thanks for sharing. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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More interesting memories from the past and your lovely family Beth. You make your chapters interesting and lively and I enjoy reading them in relation to our lives at that time. Thanks for sharing. Nancy:)
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much Nancy. I'm so glad you are finding my memories interesting.
Beth
Comment from Ben Colder
I know it was a serious moment about your daughter being left at a store. My wife lost our third so in a Sears store and when they found him he was doing his job on the display toilet.
Good one Beth, understand how the girls can be ticky about things they wear.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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I know it was a serious moment about your daughter being left at a store. My wife lost our third so in a Sears store and when they found him he was doing his job on the display toilet.
Good one Beth, understand how the girls can be ticky about things they wear.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Chuck, It is good to see you reviewing my chapter. I was afraid I wouldn't see your name on FanStory for a while. That is hilarious about your son. I got a great laugh about that. I do appreciate the six stars.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I graduated college in December of 1975. I went through in 3 1/2 years. I remember this period very vividly. Thank you for writing these memoirs. They are wonderful to read.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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I graduated college in December of 1975. I went through in 3 1/2 years. I remember this period very vividly. Thank you for writing these memoirs. They are wonderful to read.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the review and comments. I'm sure your remember 1975 quite well. I graduated college in 3 1/2 years as will but I was already married the last 2 1/2.
Beth
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Your book is very interesting to me. You are detailed, and it all brings back my days in America. You mention things like Gerald Ford was the president and Nelson Rockefeller VP, which I had totally forgotten about. Well done!
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Your book is very interesting to me. You are detailed, and it all brings back my days in America. You mention things like Gerald Ford was the president and Nelson Rockefeller VP, which I had totally forgotten about. Well done!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thank you Rebecca for the review and comments. I'm so glad you find my chapters interesting.
Beth
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You're very welcome!
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, I can imagine how horrifying it was for you to realize that you forgot little Connie! I hope she started to stick closer to you on shopping trips after that. So good that you taught her to remember your phone number!
Isn't it awful how small Christian private schools can be so full of politics? The school my youngest went to eventually closed. There was lots of political unhappiness before it di.
A few comments:
In 1975, Gearld Ford was the (Gerald)
the excalator. (escalator)
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Oh, I can imagine how horrifying it was for you to realize that you forgot little Connie! I hope she started to stick closer to you on shopping trips after that. So good that you taught her to remember your phone number!
Isn't it awful how small Christian private schools can be so full of politics? The school my youngest went to eventually closed. There was lots of political unhappiness before it di.
A few comments:
In 1975, Gearld Ford was the (Gerald)
the excalator. (escalator)
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments and for noticing my spags. Yes, leaving Connie behind was something I beat myself up about for a while. It was disappointing to find church and school board like that, but after all, they are just human. I guess we shouldn't have been so shocked, even though they are supposed to be asking for divine guidance.
Comment from Sankey
It was just as well you did a review it made me look for an other chapter all by myself. This, again was a giid read. A few spoags for you. I would depend (on)the older ones
the e[x](s)calator.
used the fact that (he)dared to to touch them
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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It was just as well you did a review it made me look for an other chapter all by myself. This, again was a giid read. A few spoags for you. I would depend (on)the older ones
the e[x](s)calator.
used the fact that (he)dared to to touch them
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the great review and the six stars. I was going to notify you today, but I'm glad you found it.
