Alone
Starting fresh again33 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Just when I though I could take another breath, then wham,
A gloved hand clamped her mouth
Well done, Carol. A great little flash fiction story. Good luck in the contest.
cheers
valda
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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Just when I though I could take another breath, then wham,
A gloved hand clamped her mouth
Well done, Carol. A great little flash fiction story. Good luck in the contest.
cheers
valda
Comment Written 12-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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Surprise....LOl I couldn't help myself, Valda. I just had to rattle the nerves just a little bit. Thanks so much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Karen Cherry
That was awful. You scare us, then calm us then scare us then calm us then really scare us. All with a few words. Creepy. You wrote it well but it really creeped me out in the end. Karen
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2025
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That was awful. You scare us, then calm us then scare us then calm us then really scare us. All with a few words. Creepy. You wrote it well but it really creeped me out in the end. Karen
Comment Written 12-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2025
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That's what it was suppose to do, Karen. If I am not mistaken, that's what you'd tell me too, Thanks as always.
Smiles, Carol
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I liked it, Karen
Comment from karenina
A roller-coaster tide of emotions here in your Flash, Carol! I was just breathing evenly at the strawberry syrup and the clumsy cat when BAM---you turned a hard right and yanked me into an assault in progress!
This is what a "flash" should do, in my opinion.
Now where do you bottle all your energy? You're an ever-flowing fountain of original ideas and posts!
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2025
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A roller-coaster tide of emotions here in your Flash, Carol! I was just breathing evenly at the strawberry syrup and the clumsy cat when BAM---you turned a hard right and yanked me into an assault in progress!
This is what a "flash" should do, in my opinion.
Now where do you bottle all your energy? You're an ever-flowing fountain of original ideas and posts!
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2025
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Hello there! To answer your question, I really don't know at the moment why my brain is spinning in so many different directions. I have three contest entries written (flash ones) two chapters for In The Attic which will wrap that one up I think, and about five or six roughed out for the Veil.... It's like I have to keep writing or else. One of these moments, somethings going to go wrong again and my brains going to dry up... Gotta get it while I can. LOL Thanks for all the kindness and the review.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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I haven't been able to get on every day and I have to smile because every time I sign in I'm behind five or six reviews for YOU! (Meanwhile I haven't a muse within six hundred miles)--
You go for it! Strike while the iron's hot!
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I can write, I can red and review, but I can't keep up with the thank yous...I've tried to answer as many as I can between the other stuff but I am 233 behind again. This sucks...I don't just like to say Thank you for the review like some do, but I don't like getting so far behind either. I need a clone...WEll, maybe not!
Smiles, Carol
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So many do not even write a thank you! It says a lot about who you are, Carol, that you want to write a personal response to each review... Sometimes it's just not feasible!
(Not when one is as prolific as you!)
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I'm sitting here writing thank yous and my brain is screaming that it wants me to write..it's crazy!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, you lulled us into a false sense of security here only to hit us with a night prowler in the house! I enjoyed your inventive flash fiction Carol, I was entertained and shocked! Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2025
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Oh my goodness, you lulled us into a false sense of security here only to hit us with a night prowler in the house! I enjoyed your inventive flash fiction Carol, I was entertained and shocked! Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 12-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2025
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I love flash fiction when I can use a few words to tell a story and still surpris the reader. Thanks so much, Dolly.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Oopsie, I was not expecting this ending, but I should have anticipated by the leads, read syrup, faucet in distress:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2025
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Oopsie, I was not expecting this ending, but I should have anticipated by the leads, read syrup, faucet in distress:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2025
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Glad I surprised you, Iza. That's what is fun about flashes taking the unexpected and making it the surprise.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from June Sargent
You hooked me in right off the bat and then shocked mewith that twist at the end! Alfred Hitchcock couldn't have dine better. Great entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2025
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You hooked me in right off the bat and then shocked mewith that twist at the end! Alfred Hitchcock couldn't have dine better. Great entry for the contest.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2025
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Thank you so much for your review and the kindness. I am thrilled that I could surprise you with so few words... It was a fun flash to write.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
You crafted a really good mystery by describing clues and then dispelling them. Just as the reader relaxed satisfied that Misty caused the mysterious sounds, POW! "Her flashlight crashed. The night swallowed her muffled scream. She wasn't alone." Great entry in the contest. I wish you the best.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2025
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You crafted a really good mystery by describing clues and then dispelling them. Just as the reader relaxed satisfied that Misty caused the mysterious sounds, POW! "Her flashlight crashed. The night swallowed her muffled scream. She wasn't alone." Great entry in the contest. I wish you the best.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2025
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Gotcha! I love those kind of flashes...stimulates the old brain cells. LOL Thanks for reading and as always I so appreciate you.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your story builds tension so well! I love how you play with us the reader. I thought it's just nerves - until that chilling last moment. I could feel every little moment from her shiver to the muffled scream. This is the kind of story that will stick with me for awhile! Fantastic job!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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Your story builds tension so well! I love how you play with us the reader. I thought it's just nerves - until that chilling last moment. I could feel every little moment from her shiver to the muffled scream. This is the kind of story that will stick with me for awhile! Fantastic job!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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Yes, I love it when a reader tries to second guess me and then surprise...that's not where this crazy brain was going after all. Thanks so much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good morning, Carol!
Whew!
I read your exceptionally well-crafted Flash Fiction yesterday while I was caring for my two little grandsons who were building a train set.
To say your story "got me" is an understatement.
First of all, I hate being alone at night.
Secondly, I am always hearing sounds.
Thirdly, was mother to a cat named Mitsy = close.
And then... to have a human interloper actually be in your protagonist's home = GAWD!
And your final sentence is so-well crafted: Her flashlight crashed. The night swallowed her muffled scream. She wasn't alone.
Kudos, Carol!
Thank you for sharing... I think! :) :) :)
fondly,
diane
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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Good morning, Carol!
Whew!
I read your exceptionally well-crafted Flash Fiction yesterday while I was caring for my two little grandsons who were building a train set.
To say your story "got me" is an understatement.
First of all, I hate being alone at night.
Secondly, I am always hearing sounds.
Thirdly, was mother to a cat named Mitsy = close.
And then... to have a human interloper actually be in your protagonist's home = GAWD!
And your final sentence is so-well crafted: Her flashlight crashed. The night swallowed her muffled scream. She wasn't alone.
Kudos, Carol!
Thank you for sharing... I think! :) :) :)
fondly,
diane
Comment Written 11-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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I live in the country and normally I am never afraid or feeling creeped out but the other night I woke up and was sure I heard something and then my blind cocker started barking. I got up and turned on all the lights but found nothing. By the time I went back to bed, my pup was already sound asleep. LOl
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
My goodness- the range of places your mind goes. I just read the sweet story of helping the dragon - and now, I was thinking thank goodness it's only the cat. What an excellent flash fiction with its twist of horror at the end! Surely a winner. Best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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My goodness- the range of places your mind goes. I just read the sweet story of helping the dragon - and now, I was thinking thank goodness it's only the cat. What an excellent flash fiction with its twist of horror at the end! Surely a winner. Best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 10-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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Somehow the corridors in my brain have opened and all the marbles are rolling out and I can't keep up with the ideas. I'm not complaining but I hope it doesn't stop.
Smiles, Carol
