The Center
What really counts41 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are engaging, thought provoking, clear and creative.
I pondered on the deep meaning of these words. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is perfect and compliments both the theme
and words of this poem.
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The author's words are engaging, thought provoking, clear and creative.
I pondered on the deep meaning of these words. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is perfect and compliments both the theme
and words of this poem.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
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Comment from Boogienights
How lovely and comforting. There is nothing like hearth and home to make us feel good inside...just like the feelings your poem evokes. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. :)
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How lovely and comforting. There is nothing like hearth and home to make us feel good inside...just like the feelings your poem evokes. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
What really counts
The Center
Good job with the syllables count and connection between lines. Great entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. Good luck in the contest.
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What really counts
The Center
Good job with the syllables count and connection between lines. Great entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
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Comment from Janet Foor
A thought provoking 5/7/5 poem. The structure is spot on. The first two lines are grammatically connected and the 3rd line, the satori line is definitely an ah ha moment.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
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A thought provoking 5/7/5 poem. The structure is spot on. The first two lines are grammatically connected and the 3rd line, the satori line is definitely an ah ha moment.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
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Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Oooo I like this one. It has a supernatural romantic feel to it
The red fire burns warm
In my home at evening time
I know you are there
This really is very lovely and I wish I had a six to give you but I'm out.
Good luck in the contest with this awesome entry! Please accept a virtual six.
Katiemae Dead
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Oooo I like this one. It has a supernatural romantic feel to it
The red fire burns warm
In my home at evening time
I know you are there
This really is very lovely and I wish I had a six to give you but I'm out.
Good luck in the contest with this awesome entry! Please accept a virtual six.
Katiemae Dead
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
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Comment from dragonpoet
Nice love poem in 5-7-5 format that uses fire both literally and metaphorically.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Dragonpoet
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Nice love poem in 5-7-5 format that uses fire both literally and metaphorically.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Dragonpoet
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this contest entry. Yes, having our loved one at home is what's really important. This entry stated that and used on a few syllables good job. Thank you for sharing and good luck.
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I enjoyed reading this contest entry. Yes, having our loved one at home is what's really important. This entry stated that and used on a few syllables good job. Thank you for sharing and good luck.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
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Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, The Center, has the proper formatting and seems to point to the burning memories of one who is no longer on this side of the fire.
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This 5-7-5, The Center, has the proper formatting and seems to point to the burning memories of one who is no longer on this side of the fire.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
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You are perceptive. Thank you
Comment from papa55mike
It's like you can feel their hand in yours gently squeezing your hand. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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It's like you can feel their hand in yours gently squeezing your hand. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective imagery as the
"fire burns warm."
-The mood is peaceful.
-The concluding line could
have a number of meanings
depending on who "you" is referring to.
That is a good techniqueğ???
-Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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-Nice presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective imagery as the
"fire burns warm."
-The mood is peaceful.
-The concluding line could
have a number of meanings
depending on who "you" is referring to.
That is a good techniqueğ???
-Good luck in the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Thank you for your comments. I don;t know if the last line is a good technique, but it was an intentional one. I appreciate your thoughts.
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You are very welcome. I was trying to think of the right way to say it; maybe open ended would have been better.
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