Just a Quick Break!
We have to just go every now and again52 total reviews
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is fun. I had no idea where the story was going until the last line. Walter was a dog. I didn't see the end coming. Clever and cute. I love the image of the trees in the grassy area. I liked the part where he knew he'd be missed almost immediately. This sounds like a happy dog. Congratulations on reaching the break in your teaching schedule. Yay! Thank you for this romp in the early morning.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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This is fun. I had no idea where the story was going until the last line. Walter was a dog. I didn't see the end coming. Clever and cute. I love the image of the trees in the grassy area. I liked the part where he knew he'd be missed almost immediately. This sounds like a happy dog. Congratulations on reaching the break in your teaching schedule. Yay! Thank you for this romp in the early morning.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 07-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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LOL! Thanx for your review on this one, Jesse -- glad Walter could pass along his happiness to you this morning! ;) Take care out there, sir, and have a great week! ;) Yvette
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Hi Yvette.
Yes, your post started my day in an upbeat fashion. I'm glad you finally get a break. Enjoy your week, as well.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Alex Rosel
Ha, ha! I love this. The culminating twist caught me completely unaware {smiles}.
One thing did throw me -- but I'm assuming it's down to the difference between American English and British English:
He'd barely gotten his leg hiked!
The more usual term here would be "leg cocked".
Also, I find "barely gotten" awkward. If this was mine, I'd reword it as:
"He had barely cocked his leg!" (maintaining word count).
But that's just personal preference...
Oh, but I do like the dog's name, Walter -- very appropriate. LOL!
Wishing you the best of luck with the contest judging committee {smiles}.
Have a great week,
Alex.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Ha, ha! I love this. The culminating twist caught me completely unaware {smiles}.
One thing did throw me -- but I'm assuming it's down to the difference between American English and British English:
He'd barely gotten his leg hiked!
The more usual term here would be "leg cocked".
Also, I find "barely gotten" awkward. If this was mine, I'd reword it as:
"He had barely cocked his leg!" (maintaining word count).
But that's just personal preference...
Oh, but I do like the dog's name, Walter -- very appropriate. LOL!
Wishing you the best of luck with the contest judging committee {smiles}.
Have a great week,
Alex.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Thanx so much for your review, Alex, always so good of you to drop by! ;) And thanx for the suggestions - yes, there is a difference between the sides of the pond on the colloquialisms nd use/identification with certain words. :) Glad you enjoyed Walter's little quick break.... take care over there! ;) Yvette
Comment from Darlene Franklin
Certainly urgent enough from poor Walter's POV! Fun story, and captured well in 50 words. I'm looking at your bio, you fascinating woman, you! Good luck with the contest.
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Certainly urgent enough from poor Walter's POV! Fun story, and captured well in 50 words. I'm looking at your bio, you fascinating woman, you! Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Yeah, it's been a wild ride over here, Darlene -- gonna see what I can do next, yeah?! ;) :) LOL! Thanx for the review, ma'am - take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from damommy
A little fun piece. At least, he got to go, bless his heart. What did she expect him to do, hold it forever? Lovely picture. I'm glad you're getting to have some fun during your break.
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A little fun piece. At least, he got to go, bless his heart. What did she expect him to do, hold it forever? Lovely picture. I'm glad you're getting to have some fun during your break.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Even if I just kinda 'be useless' (which the blonde could never do with my personality) it would be a wonderful step away from lectures/grading! ;) :) LOL! ;) Thanx for the review, Yvonne -- hope Fall's moving in up/over there! ;) Yvette
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It is. Slowly.
Comment from Debbie Pope
I think that you have a winner here. Have I ever said that before? I've read a bunch of these entries, and your's is the only one that made me smile. I love the "Oh that woman!" line. And, he barely had his leg hiked. It's funny. I love the dog, and it's all done in 50 words.
Like I said, a winner.
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I think that you have a winner here. Have I ever said that before? I've read a bunch of these entries, and your's is the only one that made me smile. I love the "Oh that woman!" line. And, he barely had his leg hiked. It's funny. I love the dog, and it's all done in 50 words.
Like I said, a winner.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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LOL! Well, probably not, but it was a crazy brainstorm from left field that just sortof percolated as I sat on the front porch yesterday evening 'decompressing' after posting all my 1st quarter grades....HOORAY!! ;) :) Glad you really enjoyed Walter, MQ, and hope things are going well for you.... when and where's coffee this month...? LOL! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
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Still looking forward to that coffee. Mom took a turn for the worse yesterday. She is now permanently on oxygen. I keep checking on her because she can't figure out how to keep the tube in her nose. I even caught her putting her eye drops in her nose. She is so confused. I have gone to bed and get up only to check on her.
Comment from Janetsue
lol I loved reading this and discovering the surprise ending. You have a definite talent for funny postings. I hope your Fall Break is wonderfully relaxing, Yvette, and you get refreshed and energized. :-)
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lol I loved reading this and discovering the surprise ending. You have a definite talent for funny postings. I hope your Fall Break is wonderfully relaxing, Yvette, and you get refreshed and energized. :-)
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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I'm certainly gonna give it my best shot, Janet!! ;) :) Thanx for your review here, ma'am -- always so appreciated! ;) Yvette
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Big hugs!
Comment from lyenochka
Fall break already! Hooray for you! Thanks for the giggles! I can almost hear the older dog's voice and how he finds his owner's overseeing all his movements.
Best wishes in the contest!
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Fall break already! Hooray for you! Thanks for the giggles! I can almost hear the older dog's voice and how he finds his owner's overseeing all his movements.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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Yes!! Celebration!! Now, I've got to find something with which to busy myself or I'll go stir crazy - LOL! ;) Thanx so much for your review, Helen -- Walter is grateful that you could relate to his 'trappings'! :) Take care - Yvette :)
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hey Yvette. That's a good one! Seriously, I am going to have to read this one to Ralphie. He is just about old enough now to try lifting his leg. It's still funny watching him at this point. :)) Z Enjoy your free time...if you can get some.
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Hey Yvette. That's a good one! Seriously, I am going to have to read this one to Ralphie. He is just about old enough now to try lifting his leg. It's still funny watching him at this point. :)) Z Enjoy your free time...if you can get some.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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You have to let me know what Ralphie thinks.... and if he actually needs a break from his human once in a while.... LOL!! ;) :) Thanx so much for your review, Z -- always so good to read your smile! ;) Yvette
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You're welcome
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He said, "why would I lift my leg?" We're going bow tie shopping so I can update his picture. He will look sharp with a tie. :))). Z
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your ultra-concise fiction piece is clever, cute, and entertaining. Giving the dog a quality some humans don't even have, consideration for
others--nice touch! :-)
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Your ultra-concise fiction piece is clever, cute, and entertaining. Giving the dog a quality some humans don't even have, consideration for
others--nice touch! :-)
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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LOL! ;) I think sometimes dogs do exhibit better empathetic qualities than the humans around them, don't you? Very sad, but true... :) :) Glad Walter could make you smile, Janice -- take care over there this week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Hitcher
Ha ha,n it's not only dogs that head for the trees in time of need. When you gotta go you gotta go : )) A fun little dribble flash fiction for the contest Yvette. Good luck!
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Ha ha,n it's not only dogs that head for the trees in time of need. When you gotta go you gotta go : )) A fun little dribble flash fiction for the contest Yvette. Good luck!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2019
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You know it, Hitch!! ;) :) LOL! Glad you enjoyed Walter's momentary break for it... ;) :) You take care down there, sir... hope the vacation went well! ;) Yvette
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Thank you yvette : )) The vacation was awesome, climbed a mountain, biked a coastal walkway(32km), visited native gardens, shopped, eat at some impressive restaurants and explored that little twinkle in her eye, ha ha. Yea, Moana loves outdoor activities: ))
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Thank you yvette : )) The vacation was awesome, climbed a mountain, biked a coastal walkway(32km), visited native gardens, shopped, eat at some impressive restaurants and explored that little twinkle in her eye, ha ha. Yea, Moana loves outdoor activities: ))
