Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 55 "Reasons For Concern"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
17 total reviews
Comment from Sankey
So glad I caught this today and still with the big phoney on board. I did miss notification but as I said I found it in time. No spags this time around keep it up.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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So glad I caught this today and still with the big phoney on board. I did miss notification but as I said I found it in time. No spags this time around keep it up.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and for the beautiful stars. i appreciate you continuing to read my stories.
Beth
Comment from LisaMay
What a rich treasure of reminiscence your story will have for your family members... as well as providing an insight to your relationships and life problems and situations for us reading its instalments now. Daily lives of interacting with others always throw curve balls as well as home runs and out of bounds, and in your story we get glimpses of how you and others cope with these events. I liked the small details, such as the embarrassment when the training bra gift was opened; and felt awkward for you at the bigger issue of being caught up in your parents' potential separation. Your advice was very sound - i hoped they worked out a more peaceful life together. Unemployment creates tension, but anger directed at a spouse is very hard to live with.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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What a rich treasure of reminiscence your story will have for your family members... as well as providing an insight to your relationships and life problems and situations for us reading its instalments now. Daily lives of interacting with others always throw curve balls as well as home runs and out of bounds, and in your story we get glimpses of how you and others cope with these events. I liked the small details, such as the embarrassment when the training bra gift was opened; and felt awkward for you at the bigger issue of being caught up in your parents' potential separation. Your advice was very sound - i hoped they worked out a more peaceful life together. Unemployment creates tension, but anger directed at a spouse is very hard to live with.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Thank you for a great review. I loved your comments. Actually my parents did work things out, so I'll reveal that as it might not come up in future chapters.
Beth
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I'm pleased to hear that about your parents. It must have been touch and go for a while. You played a major role in their reconciliation by helping your mother make the decision to go back home.
Comment from Mastery
Hi Beth. I think this is such a good idea of yours telling the story in this fashion will end up being prized keepsakes for all of your grandchildren and their children after that.
I have not followed it all, as you know, but what I do pick up from time to time, like now is very emotionally charged writing. Like this for instance;
"There were some tears and I felt sorry for her, but she finally agreed to go back. Maybe I was wrong, but I wasn't sure my Dad could handle being left alone. If he'd been mentally abusing me, I probably wouldn't have wanted to stay around either. Still, I felt her leaving from our apartment would put us in the middle of their troubles. Mom was very upset to have her plans changed, but she did allow us to take her home at the end of the week."
Bless you, my friend. :Bob
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Hi Beth. I think this is such a good idea of yours telling the story in this fashion will end up being prized keepsakes for all of your grandchildren and their children after that.
I have not followed it all, as you know, but what I do pick up from time to time, like now is very emotionally charged writing. Like this for instance;
"There were some tears and I felt sorry for her, but she finally agreed to go back. Maybe I was wrong, but I wasn't sure my Dad could handle being left alone. If he'd been mentally abusing me, I probably wouldn't have wanted to stay around either. Still, I felt her leaving from our apartment would put us in the middle of their troubles. Mom was very upset to have her plans changed, but she did allow us to take her home at the end of the week."
Bless you, my friend. :Bob
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Thank you Bob, This is a nice review. I guess I should take a lesson from you and tell you passages I especially like in your work.
Beth
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: ) You are a sweetheart, beth. Keep on going! Bob
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This chapter has you and your husband dealing with some very awkward situations! I hope everything worked out alright for your parents, who didn't sound like they were getting along, and you very nearly got stuck right in the middle of it. It was also a very touchy situation with your husband's job -- going over a supervisor's head had never worked out well, in my experience, so he was very fortunate to have a good outcome.
I didn't find any grammatical errors in the story here.
There appear to be some extra line breaks within the paragraphs, because the words wrap too quickly to the next line, in a few instances. They would probably be made visible in your original word processing software, and then you could delete them after you pinpoint where they are. But if you're going to publish this someplace, that would probably be taken care of by the publisher or proofreader, I suppose.
That's quite a trick, making the phone ring by itself! My brother and I pulled a few pranks as children, also. The FBI!!
I must have missed a chapter or more, where you moved from the house to the apartment. I hope you found a house soon after that, because it does sound creepy, after the bicycle thefts. I suppose I'll find out, soon!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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This chapter has you and your husband dealing with some very awkward situations! I hope everything worked out alright for your parents, who didn't sound like they were getting along, and you very nearly got stuck right in the middle of it. It was also a very touchy situation with your husband's job -- going over a supervisor's head had never worked out well, in my experience, so he was very fortunate to have a good outcome.
I didn't find any grammatical errors in the story here.
There appear to be some extra line breaks within the paragraphs, because the words wrap too quickly to the next line, in a few instances. They would probably be made visible in your original word processing software, and then you could delete them after you pinpoint where they are. But if you're going to publish this someplace, that would probably be taken care of by the publisher or proofreader, I suppose.
That's quite a trick, making the phone ring by itself! My brother and I pulled a few pranks as children, also. The FBI!!
I must have missed a chapter or more, where you moved from the house to the apartment. I hope you found a house soon after that, because it does sound creepy, after the bicycle thefts. I suppose I'll find out, soon!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much Mary Kay. I really appreciate your reviews and comments and I'm shocked not to see a page of corrective suggestiveness. You know I appreciate the six stars.
My husband was transferred from Jackson to New Orleans when his company moved it's Jackson office. He is not thrilled with having to leave our farm acreage and a partially finished house in Mississippi, but he realizes his salary is necessary for the support of family. My mom and dad will work out their differences over time. Thanks again. Beth
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Thanks for filling me in, Beth. I'm glad things eventually worked out!
It's the first time I think I shocked anyone by not finding errors, haha! I find your life story very interesting.
Blessings to you and your family,
Mary Kay xoxo
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Life continues on with nothing very traumatic happening. You seem to be handling each new event with courage and good decisions. All is well so far.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Life continues on with nothing very traumatic happening. You seem to be handling each new event with courage and good decisions. All is well so far.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Thank you Rebecca, I appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from elchupakabra
This was a nice story, thank you very much for sharing it. I hope you keep up the great work on this, it is personable and well written. Great work overall, later daze.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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This was a nice story, thank you very much for sharing it. I hope you keep up the great work on this, it is personable and well written. Great work overall, later daze.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I appreciate you reading it.
Beth
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am still enjoying reading your memoirs. Thank you for sharing.
I learned from her that Dad had been making life miserable for her. (TRY - I learned from her that Dad had been making her life miserable. You can probably leave out 'from her' too)
I decided It wasn't fair for you to have to dread going to work every day, and I'd have to live with whatever happened. (Lower case i needed on 'it)
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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I am still enjoying reading your memoirs. Thank you for sharing.
I learned from her that Dad had been making life miserable for her. (TRY - I learned from her that Dad had been making her life miserable. You can probably leave out 'from her' too)
I decided It wasn't fair for you to have to dread going to work every day, and I'd have to live with whatever happened. (Lower case i needed on 'it)
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thanks Barbara, I appreciate that you are still reading my story. I like that you are always willing to help me with awkward sentences and spags.
Beth
Comment from Dick Waters
Thanks Beth for posting another chapter. It is interesting to participate in someone else's life. I wonder what I would do in similar circumstances. My son's car was the victim of an attempted break in, right in daylight on a Saturday morning. A week later, my grandson's bike was stolen.
They now live in a better area in a rental house.
I'm sorry for your loss, but I'm sure your children will like the personal touch of your story.
I don't see any changes required.
Best regards,
Dick
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thanks Beth for posting another chapter. It is interesting to participate in someone else's life. I wonder what I would do in similar circumstances. My son's car was the victim of an attempted break in, right in daylight on a Saturday morning. A week later, my grandson's bike was stolen.
They now live in a better area in a rental house.
I'm sorry for your loss, but I'm sure your children will like the personal touch of your story.
I don't see any changes required.
Best regards,
Dick
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you Dick, I haven't forgotten about your stories and I will read them. I had to go to North Carolina for two weeks to get my cousin out of rehab as she had no one to stay with her. I'm back home now so I'll try to catch up on my reading. I apprecate you continuing to read my story.
Beth
Comment from Ulla
Hi Beth. I'm so glad your are back with your story.I know how difficult it is to catch up but it will happen. I can see that you ran into a few problems here but it seems to have settled somewhat. I'm looking forward to what's next. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Hi Beth. I'm so glad your are back with your story.I know how difficult it is to catch up but it will happen. I can see that you ran into a few problems here but it seems to have settled somewhat. I'm looking forward to what's next. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much Ulla, I'm glad to be back writing again as well. I hope to get caught it with everything soon. After two weeks away, there is much to catch up with at home as well writing.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Beth, this chapter is well named. You certainly had several reasons for concern. (Three major ones for sure)
I have no grounds to find fault with your decisions and I can not find fault or need for improvement with your writing, so, I will remain patiently waiting for your next post !
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Dear Beth, this chapter is well named. You certainly had several reasons for concern. (Three major ones for sure)
I have no grounds to find fault with your decisions and I can not find fault or need for improvement with your writing, so, I will remain patiently waiting for your next post !
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and for the comments. It is good to be back after two weeks away. I have a lot to catch up with and I think your writing is one of those things.
Beth
