Urges
Can sometimes lead you to a dark place.21 total reviews
Comment from JT traveller
Such intensity. Such a build up. I could feel my heart beat faster but then...what a clever and humurous twist.
A thoroughly enjoyable read. Thank you. Jacqueline
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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Such intensity. Such a build up. I could feel my heart beat faster but then...what a clever and humurous twist.
A thoroughly enjoyable read. Thank you. Jacqueline
Comment Written 16-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much for this great review. :)
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Thanks for the giggles. Jacqueline 😊
Comment from Thesis
Okay, you got me. Here I was all ready to find out what she killed, and then you identify that she killed the cherry pie, and broke her diet. Good ending twist. You built it up really well - good job.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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Okay, you got me. Here I was all ready to find out what she killed, and then you identify that she killed the cherry pie, and broke her diet. Good ending twist. You built it up really well - good job.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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Thank you, I appreciate this nice review. :)
Comment from RodG
I like how you misdirect our thinking throughout this veryshort story, making us think she is planning murder. The second paragraph really sets up the conflict both internal and external. Well done! It deserved to win. Rod
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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I like how you misdirect our thinking throughout this veryshort story, making us think she is planning murder. The second paragraph really sets up the conflict both internal and external. Well done! It deserved to win. Rod
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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Thank you for this positive review. :)
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good 75-word flash fiction entry. The text is an okay size. It would be better one size larger. I like it being bold because that helps old eyes to see the text better. The message is stated with clarity and is easy to understand. I thought in the beginning the female was a cutter. I had several girls in my classes over the years who were. Great twist at the ending. Your visual fits perfectly. Congratulations, on having the winning entry.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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This is a good 75-word flash fiction entry. The text is an okay size. It would be better one size larger. I like it being bold because that helps old eyes to see the text better. The message is stated with clarity and is easy to understand. I thought in the beginning the female was a cutter. I had several girls in my classes over the years who were. Great twist at the ending. Your visual fits perfectly. Congratulations, on having the winning entry.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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Thank you for this wonderful review. :)
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You are welcome.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hah! Sharon!
Bravo!
And cherry pie no less!
Of course, the reader thinks the protagonist's intended target is a person!
I also thought she might have been considering doing something with her face!
Loved the ending!
Congratulations on your winning flash fiction!
diane
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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Hah! Sharon!
Bravo!
And cherry pie no less!
Of course, the reader thinks the protagonist's intended target is a person!
I also thought she might have been considering doing something with her face!
Loved the ending!
Congratulations on your winning flash fiction!
diane
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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Thank you for this terrific review. :)
Comment from Susan L. Winters
Ha ha!....got me!
This is a perfect example, of flash fiction done well! Every word mattered and held the reader in suspense.
Thank you, that was fun!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Ha ha!....got me!
This is a perfect example, of flash fiction done well! Every word mattered and held the reader in suspense.
Thank you, that was fun!
Comment Written 10-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Thank you for this wonderful review, I'm glad you liked it. :)
Comment from AprilViolet
What a ride you took the readers on here! And a delicious plot twist at that! Well done in with this flash fiction! Six stars deserved indeed! Also loved the picture!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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What a ride you took the readers on here! And a delicious plot twist at that! Well done in with this flash fiction! Six stars deserved indeed! Also loved the picture!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Thank you, my first attempt at flash fiction. :)
Comment from jessizero
This was a very good piece of flash fiction. It was purposely misleading, and you did an excellent job with that. The twist at the end was hilarious. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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This was a very good piece of flash fiction. It was purposely misleading, and you did an excellent job with that. The twist at the end was hilarious. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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Thank you, that means a lot to me. :)
Comment from Annmuma
I love it!!! I see you are currently holding 1st place in the contest and that is a deserved spot for this story. The imagery is really good and enhanced by the picture. Good luck and congrats! ann
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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I love it!!! I see you are currently holding 1st place in the contest and that is a deserved spot for this story. The imagery is really good and enhanced by the picture. Good luck and congrats! ann
Comment Written 08-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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Thank you for this thoughtful review... have a wonderful day. :)
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Now here is a tragedy worth experiencing in real life terms, though I'd likely have chosen Pecan pie instead, but then again there would be no red and that would have squashed using the picture. Great story.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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Now here is a tragedy worth experiencing in real life terms, though I'd likely have chosen Pecan pie instead, but then again there would be no red and that would have squashed using the picture. Great story.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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Thank you for this exceptional review, it's really appreciated. Pecan pie is good but I prefer peach...but that wouldn't have worked either! Thanks again. :)
